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生命微分 发表于 2015-4-4 09:20:25

雅思作文的十大失分点

<div><span style="font-size:14px;">雅思作文一向是中国考生的“软肋”，本文总结归纳了考生们在雅思写作过程中经常出现的失分点。看看你有没有“中枪”。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">一、不一致</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">所谓不一致不光指主谓不一致，还包括了数的不一致、时态不一致以及代词不一致等。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：When one have money, he can do what he want to.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：one是第三人称单数，因此本句的have应改为has; want应改为wants, 本句是典型的主谓不一致。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">改为：When one has money, he can do what he wants （to do）。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">二、修饰语错位</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">英语与汉语不同，同一个修饰语置于句子不同的位置，句子的含义可能引起变化。对于这一点考生们往往没有引起足够的重视，因而造成了不必要的误解。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">I believe I can do it well and I will better know the world outside the campus.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：better位置不当，应置于句末。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">三、句子不完整</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">在口语中，交际双方可借助手势语气上下文等，不完整的句子完全可以被理解。可是书面语就不同了，句子结构不完整会令意思表达不清，这种情况常常在主句写完以后，作者又想加些补充说明时发生。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：本句后半部分"For example by TV, radio, newspaper and so on.”不是一个完整的句子，仅为一些不连贯的词语，不能独立成句。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">改为：There are many ways to know society, for example, by TV, radio, and newspaper.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">四、悬垂修饰语</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子的逻辑关系混乱不清。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：At the age of ten, my grandfather died. 这句中"at the age of ten"只写出十岁时，但没有说明“谁”十岁时，按一般推理不可能是my grandfather, 如果我们把这个悬垂修饰语改得明确一点，读者或考官在读句子时就不会误解了。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">改为：When I was ten, my grandfather died.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">五、词性误用</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">“词性误用”常表现为：介词当动词用；形容词当副词用；名词当动词用等。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：None can negative the importance of money.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：negative系形容词，误作动词。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">改为：None can deny the importance of money.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">六、指代不清</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">指代不清主要讲的是代词与被指代的人或物关系不清，或者先后所用的代词不一致。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">读完上面这一句话，读者无法明确地判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚，谁将当伴娘。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">如果我们把易于引起误解的代词所指代的对象加以明确，意思就一目了然了。这个句子可改为：Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">七、不间断句子</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">这个错误的出现受中文意识的影响很大。很多考生在写句子时，句子之间缺乏有效的连接成分。甚至，有的句子写的比较中式化。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：There are many ways we get to know the outside world.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：这个句子包含了两层完整的意思：“there are many ways”以及“we get to know the outside world”。简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">改为：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或：There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">八、措词毛病</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">学生在写作中没有养成良好的推敲，斟酌句子中所选用词的习惯。大部分考生随心所欲，拿来就用，所以作文中用词不当的错误随处可见。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：The increasing use of chemical obstacles in agriculture also makes pollution.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：显然，考生把obstacles“障碍”，“障碍物”误作substance“物质”了。另外“the increasing use（不断增加的使用）”应改为“abusive use（滥用）”。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">改为：The abusive use of chemical substances in agriculture also causes/leads to pollution.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">九、累赘</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：In spite of his laziness, I like him.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">整个句子可以大大简化为：Diligent people use money only to buy what they need.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">十、不连贯</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语，或是结构上不畅通，这也是考生常犯的毛病。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">比如：The fresh water, it is the most important things of the earth.</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">分析：the fresh water与逗号后的it不连贯，it与things在数方面不一致。</span></div>
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<div><span style="font-size:14px;">如果你不幸中枪，那一定要提高警惕咯，希望能对你有所帮助。</span></div>

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