请大家估估我的第一个作文练习，有几分？
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this.<br />
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Discuss both these views and give your opinion.<br />
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How to educate next generation to be a perfect citizen has been increasingly impertant now.Many people argue that parents should account for the parctice, however ,others hold the opinion that is the sutiable place where teach young people learn and apply the social rules.<br />
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Nevertheless to say ,parents have scignificant impact on children. Resaerch has suggested that the personality of individual is formed during the first few years ,therefore ,during this period ,the parendt should nature important aspects which are basic skills such as curioty ,patient and creation for the learning and living in the children's later lives.<br />
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However,humanity is highly characteristic of social life and shool is a area in which the children can be provided opportuinties to learn and practise the social rules through the activities in which children interact with their peers. In addition, in schooling children can re-expressing their ideas and have those tested and refined by teachers and classmates. These actives in schools are extermenly important for children becase they can develop abilities such as co-operation and effective contacts which play a fundmentanl role in the morden commercial society.<br />
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Therefore, the best hope for educating children to be a goog memember of comunity is to combine the family upbring with the school.parents should be closed informed with their children's progresses in school and the interact between school authority and parents should play a basic part in the education of children.
In my option, It must be a 7 point at least.
我的第一个作文，能七分，您吓唬我了
250字够了吗
打错单词和语法错误不少，还有超级长句看得很累
不到250字，什么都照着纸上的原样打上去的。
就这样原汁原味的让大家打个分数
谢谢
打击一下，嘿嘿，最多5分
这是一篇essay，discussion形式，需要两个观点都分别写，然后只有在最后一段结论中才给出你个人观点，essay要客观，不可以用i，should等主观内容，除非最后一段。连接词有些用得不正确。
不要灰心，当年我作文也只是5分，非常不服气，今天我学了TAFE英语才心服口服，知道哪儿错了。
英语跟语文一样，每种议论文有其独特的格式，比如你这种，得有开头，for几段，against几段，结论一段，我最近正在学这种格式，所以很清楚。不照格式写，后果很惨重。。。。
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不怕打击啊，没有打击那里来的进步。
谢谢您的指教
我也觉得5分左右，最多5.5吧，有很多拼写的错误，这些小错误很不应该的
白白丢分了
楼主要注意一下单词的拼写啊
前两段写的不错，第三段看得有点累。
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