光复祖国
发表于 2010-3-29 10:34:08
因为我复议前，看到你发帖说复议什么的。同病相怜呗。坛子里面有没有雅思的考试群？大家好加了交流一下。写作让我很困惑
ubriq6469
发表于 2010-3-29 16:58:14
昨天下午就想回复了...可惜没有权限，看到那么多人都给指出问题我就不再写了，欢迎楼主继续贴，大家交流交流
梦浪天涯
发表于 2010-3-29 18:39:43
呵呵，收益匪浅
akaeibskt8
发表于 2010-3-29 22:58:12
LZ 2.11你在哪考的，我的一鸭也是那天
我觉得作文关键是要多练，还有找人帮你改。不得不说你现在的问题还是比较大的。。。
我的建议是多输入些native Speaker的英文，不管是听还是看，可以参考下我写的总结
5200dmwkcv
发表于 2010-3-30 09:46:03
咪咪，给你贴个美国鬼子来MAIL。。
Such a surprise and highlight to hear from you last week. Your email arrived at a time when I was out of town and not in a position to answer and then upon getting home Charles arrived home from school and we had a very busy weekend. I wanted to wait until I could give you a thoughtful response.
First of all “thank you” for taking the time to write. And you are correct, the Christmas & holiday season is a great time to think about old friends and reach out to those you’ve not communicated with for quite some time.
I really enjoyed the pictures of your daughter. She is so cute and does not look “naughty” at all. Now she does look like she enjoys having a lot of fun. Some of her facial expressions were so cute. And she has certainly grown. It is good to hear that both you and your husband seem to be doing well with your jobs.
Our life stays very busy. Charles is now in his 4th Year of college and continues to do very well. Because he needed to get some more math to perhaps pursue graduate school, he has decided to go to a 5th year of undergraduate school, so he’ll not officially graduate until May 2011. He is still making very good grades, still very happy with the same girlfriend and still has a full head of very blond hair. Over the next few months he is really going to decide what to do after he graduates as now he is considering many options. It makes him a bit nervous.
Ruth is in her 3rd year at the University of Colorado. She got home last Wednesday. She is also doing well studying in the business school. She will start thinking about her postgraduate plans in the next few months, but she now wants to go live in a big city like New York and maybe work for a nonprofit organization. She did that as an intern last summer and really enjoyed it.
Eileen is doing a lot of things. A great deal of the past year was spent in remodeling our home; she designed all the changes. She also has been purchasing some property that she is redesigning & fixing up so we can rent to others. She also is doing a lot of work in fundraising for some charity organizations.
I also stay busy working with a few little companies that I have invested money into. My work with them is mainly consulting. I do this together with a lot of volunteer work serving on the International Board of Directors of a disease research organization called the Juvenile Diabetes Research Foundation. I’ve been very involved for this for more than 10 years, but the amount of work & involvement increased a great deal in the past year.
We stay busy a great deal spending some time visiting Charles & Ruth at college and then some time just traveling for fun. We took a trip to Switzerland & Italy a couple of months ago to go hiking in the Alps. That was a whole lot of fun. And then just spend a lot of time enjoying family and friends.
Like in the US is still very interesting with the tough economy. Things have still not recovered to the way they used to be. And all of this debate on what to do with the United States health care system has created a lot of debate. A great deal of changes have occurred over the last year with President Obama.
This gives you some of the highlights. And thank you again for taking the time to keep in touch. It was very nice to hear from you and let’s make sure we do not lose touch.
Take care,
Mike
PS: Do you have any trips planned to the United States? I still hope you can make the journey one day.
永不言弃
发表于 2010-3-30 14:06:31
上文还挺收益的
wapzs162783
发表于 2010-3-30 20:02:43
美国人的写作格式和雅思考试还是有点差别的...
可以借鉴下人家的语感
2g3i1270
发表于 2010-3-30 23:43:58
我在财大国定校区考试的
qq2359332119
发表于 2010-3-31 11:05:11
楼主,强烈建议你看看米版的Miller Essay Template. 在下面链接的4楼.
http://www.freeoz.org/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=857884
因为我家主申请也准备再考,看过米版的作文模板后觉得很受益. 所以推荐给你.
bidwidway
发表于 2010-3-31 16:23:01
语法错误全更正了,应该6分不难.