tjcmm
发表于 2010-4-3 13:19:58
如果要我重写的话就不会用你的ideas
而是自己写一篇,跟你这篇文没有关连
你要我写一次吗?
i8ze2s60
发表于 2010-4-3 19:51:49
如果要我重写的话就不会用你的ideas
而是自己写一篇,跟你这篇文没有关连 你要我写一次吗?
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恩！要的！ 我就是觉得我写的偏题了，所以不用我的ideas最好了，那就麻烦了
lokylethy
发表于 2010-4-4 02:04:09
这篇文章虽然未到范文的境界
可能会有少错,可是仍然值得参考
如果有人发现错漏的话便告诉我吧
其实学英文就像学足球
不论别人踢得多好,只是看别人踢还是不够,
更重要的是你要明白为什么别人踢得好,
为什么自己踢得不好,有什么地方要改善.
As a result of technology advancement, travelling overseas has become much easier in recent years. This results in an increasing number of young people studying and working overseas. It is believed that this will lead to greater international cooperation in the future. This essay will discuss how the increasing number of people studying and working overseas can lead to greater cooperation.
There are many students who choose to study overseas. Take Australia for example, there are lots of overseas students coming to Australia for study. On the one hand, these students can learn new skills such as better English in Australia. They have the opportunity to live with the locals and learn anything of value from them. On the other hand, these students will be a significant source of income to the Australian economy. In this case, we can see that both sides will benefit from those students who study overseas and hence it leads to greater international cooperation.
The same applies to young people who work overseas. If they choose to work in Australia, they will bring in their multi-cultural skills, such as the ability to speak a foreign language to the Australian work force. For instance, there are certain jobs in Australia require the candidate to be able to speak English as well as a foreign language. Yet the majority of local people in Australia can only speak English. This would be an excellent opportunity for overseas workers to get a job and bring about greater international cooperation between Australia and foreign countries.
To summarise, it is true that the increasing number of young people studying and working overseas will lead to greater international cooperation. Furthermore, people who study or work overseas will also learn new skills and benefit from the new country. Therefore, the government should consider bringing in more foreign students and workers by investing more money and resources.
i8ze2s60
发表于 2010-4-4 04:04:54
收到！ 很感动，很感激你，这样对待论坛上一个求改作文的帖子，我会仔细去读和总结，使自己进步。
BTW，我经常梦见自己神勇无比在踢球。。。。可是现实中我都没有踢过球。。