6分应该没有啥问题吧
汗...希望不要误导这位同学，模板是给我这种写着写着会跑题的人用的
一般看出是模板是拿不到高分的
汗 俺语文的作文就没高分过。。。。。我特爱范的毛病是觉得说的不够清晰 就来回说 同时又有些该说的更清楚的东西没说。。。。。
要不我也模板吧 好歹能把文章结构搞对不出乱子。
希望这是真的 我看见希望了。。。。 向来写作文是弱项 不分中文英文。。。。
做记号，回头来看。
看出来了你是想写一边倒的，就是Financial 课程不应该作为主要学科。你要加强一下你的力度。第三段开头的However让我看得很晕，上面下面的论调很明显是一样的。
这个题目完全可以写成一边倒的，因为本身就是很偏激的观点。重要的是这种题目很少出的。没有什么争辩性。
我发觉自己根本看不来作文好不好
Education is always a topic of public interest and concern. Recently, there has been a controversy over whether financial education should be taught as a mondatory part of the school program. In my opinion, although financial education can bring students some benefits, it is only suitable for（AS) a selective course.
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Z; U3 p9 m+ v0 Qwww.FreeOZ.orgObviously, students study in school in order to acquire more knowledge and learning(不可数） enable（s） them to make（觉得有点怪，是不是可以用ACHIEVE a better development in the rapidly changing society. Therefore, students could be taught on(THE BASIS OF ) rather(FAIRLY?) extensive courses, such as history, arts and sports, even finacial one(ONE 可以去掉吧？）. However, due to the limited time spent on their study, students should select some courses that can develop their intelligence and bodies, such as math, sports. In this case, financial eduaction should, as a selective course, be taught to those students who are very inerest in financial issues and have more spare time.
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; l- j$ b- ~( u7 ~ A. J9 s% r# l) W澳洲华人,澳洲移民,澳洲自助移民,澳洲移民DIY,澳大利亚自助移民,澳大利亚移民DIY,澳洲生活,澳洲留学,澳大利亚留学,澳大利亚生活,澳洲租房,澳洲工作,澳洲华人论坛,澳大利亚华人论坛,澳大利亚中国人论坛,澳洲中国人论坛,澳洲移民非中介,澳大利亚移民非中介,旅游,论坛,我为人人,人人为我However, we can not ignore the （its)importance to some special （particular）students. For instance, it is universally acknowledged that some students have higher gift rather than those common students. Sometimes those mandatory courses can not meet their demand, some extra courses, like financial course, will be the best one of their choices. Therefore, financial education, as a modantory component on school educaton, is only suitable for those gifted students, not for all ones（ALL OF THEM).
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All in all, considering the difference of students and their limited study time, the financial education should not be mandatory part of the teaching scheme, and (IT )only is a better choice for those students having gifted ability so as to (删了两子）gain more knowledge during their educational period.
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