我也来献丑大作文 猛拍
<strong>Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.<br />
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.</strong><br />
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Nowadays, many people have changed their old conception of working. They will never spend their lives doing the same things while others still keep no change. In my opinion, change is a good thing but it is not suitable for everyone.<br />
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On the one side, people can get benefits from changing their jobs. Firstly, searching for a new job can earn more money. People always pursue wealth which is their first target for working. According to a survey, 90 percent of people who want to change their occupation are not satisfied with current salary. Secondly, people will be lazy if they keep stay in a same place. A new environment will encourage them to express their potential ability. Last but not least, new working opportunity enable employees to study new technology to enrich their knowledge which will promote the skill level of the workers.<br />
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On the other side, people should not change their job indiscriminately because they should consider some issues. In the first place, people need to get accustomed to a new system which means new employee to the new company. No one in the company will treat you as professional worker as before. In their eyes, you just a new colleague who can be commanded by anyone. In the second place, if you are a frequent job-hopping, the company will suspicious your loyalty and integrity. For instance, if a candidate have never worked for a company more than one year, definitely, the interviewer of the new company will refuse your application. Finally, people should consider more about job changing especially if they have married. Although money is important, stable of life is more significant. Changing a job means a challenge, it may be failed. At that time, the whole family will tied by the pressure of unemployment. That is why people really should consider carefully about this thing.<br />
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All in all, every coin has two sides. Even though changing a job will encounter some risks, people will be gain more through job-hopping if they can make a serious consideration before they make decisions.<br />
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最近写作文 发现2个大问题 <br />
1. 不会造句，很奇怪 许多句子或者单词等到写作文的时候 怎么也想不出来<br />
2. 字数太多 动不动就奔300+去了 <br />
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各位水友猛拍~
我来坐坐FreeOZ名人的沙发。。。
第一段：
doing the same things & change is a good thing 与题目重复，最好换成意思一样但是句法不同的表达方式。
第二段与第三段句首：
On the one side/on the other side: 我不是很确认这样是不是准确，但我觉得是不是： on one hand/ on the other hand 更好？
第二段：searching for a new job can earn more money - 语法错误
People always pursue wealth which is their first target for working - 这个观点是不是有些偏激了？
enrich their knowledge which will promote the skill level of the workers. - 末尾怎么像在说别的人而不是 enrich their knowledge 本人呢？
第三段没有细看，留点悬念
第四段：
every coin has two sides - 这句话好像听某个雅思考官说，已经被中国考生用滥了，因此建议不用
Even though changing a job will encounter some risks - 语法错误，主语呢？
people will be gain more - be不需要，语法错误
就是这么些，我的英语也一般，与楼主共勉哈
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果然 千疮百孔 怪不得最近帮我改作文的mm 都不搭理我了 ..... 多谢楼上的 ~
concept不就是名词么，conception有什么区别捏。。。没考过雅思的人飘过
这没什么，坚强！当初我的小作文被tx们批的都比你这个大作文多。。。。
LZ 也考过很多次了
应该经验丰富阿
我觉得考试么 就自己想好 自己 的魔板
考试的时候把关键词想好填进去
这样的好处很多
不会出现低级错误 时间肯定够用
字会比较好看 不会出现字越来越差的情况
这样 一般6分都有的 7分都没有 反正6分够了考那么高有毛用
我刚认识一个人 女的 大专 4级勉强过 就是这样考的作文6分
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you just a new colleague who can be commanded by anyone. 缺谓语
That is why people really should consider carefully about this thing. 据说thing不大好用在大作文里，这个词比较随便。
果然 还有病句 。。。
至于thing 我是一时想不出别的单词了 issue 感觉用着不合适
thing 可以用 matter代替
都没什么大问题,几个感觉更好的说法,:
In my opinion, change is a good thing but it is not suitable for everyone.->In my opinion, change is a good thing but not suitable for everyone.
searching for a new job can earn more money 寻找新工作的过程可以赚更多钱?->a new job always means more money
study new technology to -> learn new technology to
you just a new colleague who can be commanded by anyone.-> you, just a new colleague can be commanded by anyone.
it may be failed. At that time, the whole family will tied by -> it may fail. At that time, the whole family could be tied by