求帮批大作文一篇
请大家帮我批下一下边这篇作文，这是我练习的第一篇作文，不知道能得几分，还请各位大侠不吝赐教。<br />
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in current days(好像没怎么看见这么写的),along with the rapid developing technologies,there are so maney problems that occured such as air pollusion and so on（多举个例子再and so on啊）.what can be done with this?people dispute this and some individuals suggested that some kinds of technological developing should be stoped becouse it would be enough for us to maintain a simple life,while others supposed that the pollution will finally tackled in terms of the technology development.I agreed with the later opinion
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改了两段改不下去了。下次请放在word里把拼写啊大小写啊之类的错误先eliminate掉。
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