首先声明我也是个初级选手，句式方面不做评论了
我就是觉得楼主写的有些跑题了，尤其是前面的部分
我认为这个题目主要想说的是有的人喜欢变更工作的类别，即变换不同类型的工作
有的人则喜欢做一种类型的工作，并非指工作的稳定性与否，而是指工作的内容方面的
所以还是从两方面去想
1）前一类人喜欢变换工作类型的，喜欢追求新奇，这样可以增加其阅历，广泛接触社会，对于管理工作尤其有利
2）后一类，只做一种类型工作的人，有利于积累工作经验，从而获得更高级的职位 senior position，对于技术性较强的工作比较适合
可能稍微有一点偏题，因为题目说的是不同种类的工作，没有说在不同公司工作怎么样。lz两个都说了，但是又没有明确化。总的来说，结构还是很规范，细节需要再加强。
What type of work do you prefer? This is a hot topic these days. Some people prefer to stay the type of work all their lives, while others prefer to change the type of work [不要引用原句，要换一种表达方式，如：Some people prefer to stick to one type of work, while others tend to try different types of work through out their lives]. Let’s see together what their reasons [似乎the reasons更好一点，因为reason是这个现象的reason，而不是这些人的reason] are.
People who prefer to stay the type of work all their lives think that a stable work can provide them with a stable life. They argue that today’s society is [少了一个a] competitive one, [用句号] in order to survive in this cutthroat society, people must have a stable work with a steady income. Otherwise, people might easily fall into poverty. They also point that a long-term job can promote their working efficiency and productivity, which will benefit both individuals and companies. What is more , it can improve employees’ loyalty to the company. It is reported that in Japan [加,] where companies are most of lifelong employees, so that [去掉so that。去掉之后语法通了，但是employees连在一起太重复了，还需进一步修改] employees do their endeavor in their work, which makes their companies more competent in the world.
However, those who prefer to change the type of work claim that they can benefit a lot from it. First of all, working in different companies with different types of work can greatly enrich their working experience and make them more capable in society. As we known, working experience is quite important in today’s job hunting, so this can help them find a better job. Secondly, some people do not like get stuck in a place for a lifelong time, and changing jobs enables them to live in any place they like. Thirdly, but not lastly, working with different types of job provides them good opportunities to meet people from a wide range of fields, which can improve their communicative ability.
In conclusion, both sides of the issue are well supported by sound reasons. What we should do is to choose job on the base of our preference and personal circumstance.
多看看范文和经典句子，老外的。不要自己想当然的造句子，不地道。另外时间太长了，多练习。
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