苦练两天基本功，大家看看这篇作文能凑合着上6分吗？^_^
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It is common today for the buildings to have various appearances. Some buildings’ exteriors and structures, however, are individualized beyond our wildest imagination, which has impacted its original purpose. As a consequence, an argument arises that the designing of buildings should not be associated with art. <br />
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Admittedly, there are some buildings which are designed in an exaggerated way to express some kind of art. Sometimes the exaggerated structures do affect its functions. No one would deny that the building’s original purpose is to provide a place for people to live in or work in. So any form of art works should be carried out based on the satisfaction of the building’s serving goals. While it seems that the argument of rejecting all the art work is over-responding. It is unnecessary to negate all the designing work of buildings.<br />
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In fact, architecture is indeed a very essential part of the building. Individualized buildings, featured by varying appearances, represent the world cultural diversity to some extent. It is the diversity that makes the world so different. If there were not architecture, the buildings might look like the same; culture might not be preserved, for example; and most importantly a host of architects would lose their jobs, which might impact the social stability greatly. Besides, the buildings, characterized by outstanding exterior, have become the landmarks in some places, which have profound influence upon not only the local residents but also the tourism.<br />
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In my opinion, an intermediate position could be found to address this issue. Creative art work should be encouraged during the produce of buildings, while the crucial function of the building should take the priority to ensure its serving purpose.<br />
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只看了开头，应该没问题。
6分很低水平，感觉你水平不低啊。
To be honest, 这篇作文我写了近1个小时，besides, 我又改了10来分钟
考试时写出一半这样我就烧香拜佛了
上回就考了个5.5 眼泪哗哗地~
不要故意把句子结构弄复杂，万一出点错考官看不懂的话就给5.5了。简单、清楚、少出错误。就肯定没问题。我一个同学6分，写的很烂，感觉你比他强的太多了。
我觉得6分对你太容易。记住，考试时别超时，写快点。
比我好很多啊!!!我都拿了6.5.你这7分没问题吧?!
LZ没有直接回答"do you agree or disagree"这个问题。有被判定为审题不清甚至套材料的危险，但是未必。这类题目最好还是开宗明义，就提出论点同意就是同意，不同意就是不同意，否则task response上可能会丢分。
后面的论述似乎试图是在建筑物的功能性和艺术性上找平衡。但两方面投入的笔墨并不平衡，更多时候在论述艺术性的重要性，但结尾又说功能takes priority，导致观点不甚明确。
没有论据支撑。其实建筑物的例子还是很好找的，特别是正面例子满地都是，负面的即使找不到也可以泛泛而谈，比如说有些会堂设计气派却忽视了通风导致内部闷热，有些高层建筑的发光设计非常耗能，诸如此类。
还有一些语法问题（比如第一段第二句的单复数，最后一句produce->production）和用词问题（过度反应overreaction，individualized这个词的用法也值得推敲）也会略微丢分。
结构还算完整，coherence基本有。也许有6分，但大概要看考官胃口。
楼上要求好高，我觉得写得比我好多了
lz是7分以上的水平。
确实，昨天在淘宝找了个北外的改了改
改出很多语法问题和用词问题。最重要的是她指出我这篇一边倒 有很大风险 给我评了个5分
郁闷的我一晚上没睡好
她还说想考7分以上最少350字
才能把论点支持的很好
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