天马行空写作方法，不拘泥于模板，但求素材充实，逻辑严密，求讨论
看了那么多指导书，觉得模板什么的都是太教条。<br />
没有内容或者少有内容，最后僵硬的套模板，导致前后词不达意的不连贯，文章拿不到高分也不少见了。<br />
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本人也是水平有限，今天喜作一篇，任由天马行空。也请不论高手还是低手，共同来探讨，共同提高！<br />
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题目<br />
Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?<br />
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我的习作<br />
As the economies have been developed in fast paces, a range of complicated problems have inevitably raised. Amongst those, traffic issues as well as public pollution problems have attracted most attention. Some people believe it is the proper way to solve these problems by increasing the price of petrol, which, I think, might work in a certain domain but cannot resolve the problems thoroughly. <br />
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Petrol pricing adjustment might resolve the traffic issue, as it was expected that increasing the driving cost may stop people driving the cars. Increasingly high cost of using their own cars may push the people to the public transport system, but this could only apply in the some personal domains, where people could choose to drive or not to. While most business entities need to use their vehicles to operate daily business, increasing transportation cost could only result in increasing of the operating burden that might be heavy already. Even in the persona domains, people with busy daily schedule will not choose the public vehicles with the reason that public services could not fulfill their needs of fast transportation. Wealthy people, of cause, will not as well, as petrol costs have little impact on them.<br />
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Furthermore, traffic problems are not merely due to large number of the vehicles, but it also includes some human factors. One research in China shows that fifty percent of the traffic jams are due to unregulated driving behaviors, which causes the high incentive of car accidents, thereby causing the more prevalent traffic jams.<br />
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Regarding pollution, it includes not only the air pollution caused by traffic emissions, but it also includes those produced by modem industries, such as water contamination by a chemical plant. It also covers later scale contaminations, such as nuclear pollutions. One recent example was the nuclear contaminations caused by Tsunami in Japan, which is not related to the carbon emissions at all. Even for the traffic emission pollution, reducing the number of running cars is not always the effective way. Different vehicles emit different mount of and variety kind of contamination substances. Usually the big vehicles such as buses contribute more in pollution, comparing to family cars. Even they are the similar in size, they may be dramatically different in terms of pollution amount and poisonous composition, due to technology issues.<br />
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To resolve traffic issue and the pollution cased by it, first of all, a convenient and effective public transportation system should be established, so as to attract people to use, thereby reducing the number of vehicles on the road. Second, government has obligation to educate public to drive politely. Last but not least, it is important to invent more efficient engines which consume less petrol and emit less. For this, government should not only encourage the car vendors to produce more environmental friendly cars, but also subsidize the end user who uses the high efficient cars, which is usually in high expense. To resolve other pollution problems, it might be out of scope of this essay.<br />
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这是为雅思准备的吗？
这得多少字啊，抄一遍，差不多也要四十分钟了吧？
曾经有一个雅思写作8.5的哥们, 记得他帖子说的字数比这个要多...
其实雅思并没有规定字数的上限，我觉得能多些内容，能面面俱到就对分数有利！个人之见，仅供参考！
时间有限，先根据您的意思把您的第一段改写如下：
Reflecting the past two decades, there has been a debate about solutions over issues regarding traffic congestion and atmosphere pollution due to massive car use. While it may be true that more expensive petrol price would force people to choose other alternatives, it could not solve the problem completely as many experts predict.
注意While和Although的用法和区别，这里不可用Although。
第一段其实是换一种方式把问题重复一遍，然后提出中心论点。（小作文类似）
第二段，第二分论点，然后用事实和数据支撑。（事实和数据可以胡诌！）
第三段，第三分论点，然后用事实和数据支撑。
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第四段，第四分论点，然后用事实和数据支撑。
第五段，总结，复述论点或给出办法。
雅思作文个人小诀窍：
1.建立自己的模板，尽量用自己的语言方式来写作。多从报章杂志上找符合自己写作特点的文章来反复阅读，最后成为自己的语言方式。（俺的语言风格是《新概念英语》风格！ ）a
2. 雅思不问您的文章的证据来源如何，所以可以胡诌，不必担心会扣分。例如，
According to the data from International Transportation Committee（子乌须有的机构）, 50% incidents related to traffic congestion were solved in Sweden by increasing public transport investment in 2010.
注意雅思小作文，上面一些数据写作方式可以胡诌到大作文里。只要语法正确，言之有理，对主题思想是有力的支持。
总之，小作文大作文都可以互相相通，甚至口语和大作文小作文都可以相通。
还有，就是不建议一日一文。
最好的方式是一篇文章反复写四五遍至十遍，最好同一篇文章隔一段时间再重写，效果更好。
再改写前，多阅读类似文章，不必在规定时间内写完。开始时可以一天甚至两天写一篇文章（甚至是小作文）。
别人的文章可以改写成自己的语言风格，成为范文不断咏读，熟记在心。
祝你成功！
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'天马行空写作方法，不拘泥于模板' 话是没错的。就好比＜百年孤独＞不但是魔幻现实主义文学的代表作，更被认为是最无争议的诺贝尔文学奖作品，创新的写作手法，不拘泥于模板等等。可是这一套写作思路用在科学文献的写作上合不合适呢？
科学文献的写作的主要目的是什么呢？不是显示写作者的写作手法，技巧有多高超，多新颖，多创新。。。那是文学作品要做的事情。而科学文献最主要的目的当然是高效率传递新技术，新知识。科学工作者就需要一套这样的'模板'：便于大家交流，便于大家从大量的科学文献里迅速定位查找以及筛选合适的文献等等。而雅思essay就是一份mini的科学文献。从这个角度来看，天马行空，随意的写作模式其实是违背了上述的主要目的的。
作为一个phd学生，一般需要看上百的甚至更多的文献，而且是从数以千计的文献里挑出来看的，这时候大家都写的教条，严格按照'模板'来写，是多么重要的事情。最重要的是文章的idea十分清晰，论述严谨充分，有说服力。阅读者巴不得数以千计的文献都是一个'模子'出来的，当然核心内容，创新的知识和创新的技术是可以完全不一样的。写作水平也是有高低的，有的读来赏心悦目，写的很清晰，条理清楚，说服力强等；有的就写的不好，读起来难以跟上作者的思路，尽管'模板'是一样的。我想这就是essay水平高低的重要体现了。而如果出现了异类的写作手法，阅读者甚至会感到气愤，因为那是在浪费大家的时间。所以，academic writing和文学作品的创作要求可以说有天壤之别。
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字儿太多了，估计临场来不及写完
多谢zhengzhi的指导！ 很实在也很有用的建议！
多谢yrqin指出问题。同意你的观点：关于条例和文章结构，我们需要有一定的八股，以便逻辑清楚的陈述观点以及论据，非常赞同。
我说的模版是说那些第一段多少句，第一句开头是什么，第二句however,第三句moreover之类的模版（雅思作文培训课上应该常见）。
我说的天马行空，可能说得太随意了，呵呵，目的是让自己的思绪开阔一些，着重于论据的整理/先后排列，以及由逻辑性的连接！
不过我的目标很高，水平很低，无论如何多谢指教！万分感谢！
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