有形de翅膀
发表于 2012-12-5 18:03:31
楼主写的是1117的作文啊。关注
小作文是从广告上看到有一个要improve环境的project，给这个project的负责人写信，说明1.为什么感兴趣2.自己能帮什么忙3.帮忙的具体时间
大作文是很多国家有national celebrations，有人觉得应该把钱花在其它useful的地方，你的观点是什么
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发表于 2012-12-6 01:36:46
小作文的to be exactly应该改成to be exact
大作文我觉得你的想法比我的好多了，就是组织貌似有点乱。at last应该改成lastly吧
x1ahyuui8q
发表于 2012-12-6 01:58:40
Nowadays more and more counties are willing to spend a large amount of money on holiday celebration. Some people challenged it because they insist the money should be spent on other valuable projects. From my point of view, investing in the celebration of the public holidays is worthy and it can be proved by following points.
Firstly, people are emotional breeds, so what they need are not only in terms of physical materials, but contain soul stuffs as well. It worth to emphasize that the public holidays represent a period of unforgettable time for people. Consequently, the people in specific country will hold some celebration ceremony to memorize the important events.
Secondly, although the celebration of the public holidays may cost a huge amount of money, it will gain a rich variety of relevant business firms, thereby the celebration itself can be benefited a lot. Besides, the employee in these firms can enhance their living standards as the profits they gain from the celebrations. At the same time, very successful celebrations can make the country earn a better reputation in the whole world. As a result, the nation can attract more visitors from other countries and this surely will improve the tourism market.
Thirdly, the celebration will motivate innovations. Obviously, to hold the celebrations need a sort of different equipments and high technologies. Therefore, the related industries can be motivated to invent a lot of new technologies to satisfy the demands of celebrations.
Finally, it is not unnecessary to consider why there are so many people blame these celebrations. The primary cause is they believe that there are lots of situations are way more urgent than the celebrations, but in a healthy developed society, the possibility of accidents is very small.
In conclusion, making spending plans, governments should consciously abide by existing criteria. But in healthy societies, the spending of the public holiday celebrations is essential.
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三木童子1983
发表于 2012-12-6 12:41:20
都是牛人，好久没有写过严谨的作文了，都想不起来该怎么写了，惭愧
被人叫做jy
发表于 2012-12-6 16:02:34
好眼光，是1117的题目，因为只得了5.5， 考虑要不要复议哪！因为按照回忆写的，有些记不清楚了！
被人叫做jy
发表于 2012-12-6 22:58:11
首先，多谢指点！
不过我觉得 benefit 既可以是及物动词，也可以是不及物动词，还可以是名词，所以我的用法应该也没问题吧！
尽快按照批示在修改一遍！
最近在考虑是上个新东方还是自己看网上的资料那，也不知道新东方是否更新一些
refa3551
发表于 2012-12-7 00:18:59
这就是我11.17考的作文，我writing得了7.5分。
说实话，我也没有用很高级的词汇和复杂的句型，
我觉得雅思评分的Coherence and Cohesion非常重要，就是整篇文章的逻辑结构和句子之间的衔接。
如果这点做得比较好，可以弥补其他方面的一些不足，得较高的分数，仅是个人意见
黑木熊熊
发表于 2012-12-7 09:16:24
5.5,真给的挺低
残云半缕
发表于 2012-12-7 18:54:19
我也是11.17考的, 作文得了6, 但我觉得你比我写得好,
hrfd11fbtw
发表于 2012-12-8 00:27:09
我感觉你的文章标点符号用的少，一个影响你的逻辑，另外影响你的语法得分。