作文跑题了，要复议下吗？
这次6.5，感觉用词还可以，错误也不多，但是跑偏了<br />
People have more health problems because they choose to live an unhealthy way. Why do you think they choose to live in an unhealthy way? What can be done for this problem?<br />
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Nowadays, more and more citizens have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy lifestyle. From my perspective, I believe there are several reasons for it and some measures could be taken to tackle this problem.<br />
It is not sceptical that society is becoming more materialistic. Adults want to achieve career advancement and then earn more money to satisfy their needs. Therefore, they usually have heavy workloads and work overtime regularly. In order to save time, they take junk food regularly, which puts them at risk of obesity and it may lead to health problems such as high blood pressure and heart attack. Moreover, regular overtime and big pressure may cause insomnia. They cannot fall asleep night after night, which definitely puts them at risk of mental illness.<br />
In addition, with the development of technology, people use computers regularly. However, it deprives them of the chances for regular exercise. They sit in front of computers all day long and take less exercise, which may lead to the decline in their physical conditions and increase the risk of illness.<br />
Nevertheless, several actions could be taken to solve this problem. For example, governments should enact laws to ban regular overtime and penalty should be paid if employers violate the regulations. In addition, people should pay more attention to their lifestyle, give a priority to regular exercise and reduce having junk food.<br />
In conclusion, there are several reasons why people choose to live in an unhealthy way such as heavy workloads and regularly using computers. Nonetheless, the problem could be tackled by setting up regulations, taking regular exercise and reducing junk food. <br />
是不是In addition。。。跑题了
主要是问的是reason，我写太多effect了
跑题了就不要想拿7了,你是在中国的哪里考的
我觉得是你的作文结构不平衡。题目有两个问题，但很明显你用了过多字数来回答第一个问题，第二个问题的解决方案字数太少。不用复议了，不会有7的。
谢谢，大家的意见，似乎大家没觉得我跑偏，而是其他问题，那我还是复议一下。
楼主复议成功了回来说一声哈
personally speaking， 6.5 is a very fair score，meaning is logical as a whole，little grammar mistake， but the structure and cohesion is no good，2 very clearly repetitive words（overtime regularly take junk food regularly and another one i cannot remember）
considering the fact that you need also to 复议 ur speeking result from 6 to 7，it seems unattainable。
我也觉得没有跑题,如果楼主去复议,结果回来报告一下吧
60分不是已经大大推进了咩，lz还要7炸哇
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