阿狸穆森
发表于 2011-12-4 23:08:48
Appreciate your sharing! It is beneficial for maximizing the IELTS score. 我这句应该没错误吧 呼呼
回去好好研究研究阿 LS分享得很有用
吃的饱睡的好
发表于 2011-12-4 23:38:35
以后有时间了好好看看 多谢楼主
yli0f8o39d
发表于 2011-12-5 10:11:51
强大的楼主啊，请帮看下我写的作文。我每次写作文，主题段的论证逻辑都头疼的要死，请楼主提出宝贵的建议。谢谢啊，下月7号的要考了。。
A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities and cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the sweeping trend of globalization, countries increasingly frequently interact with each other in economy, culture and politics. This mutual interaction would probably generate large flux of migrants among countries, which may bring significant impacts on local daily life and social development. This essay will argue that countries the world over would profit enormously from the mixture of nationalities and cultures although they should be confront with some drawbacks as well. The reasons for my position are as follows.
Obviously, both nations and local citizens will benefit from multi-culture and globalization. To begin with, people who live with many foreigners may experience more cultures, customs, festivals and religions than those who only communicate to native residents. These experiences definitely enrich their entertainments in spare time, which would make their lives more stimulating and colorful. One particular salient example of cultural diversity is Christmas Day of western countries. People from eastern countries these days could also spend it together, sharing happiness and fun with families and friends. Moreover, nations with mixed nationalities and cultures are probably more competitive associated with the fact that international trades and communication with foreigners require a deeply mutual understanding. As a result, more connection to person of various nationalities may frequently promote the social development eventually.
Admittedly, this phenomenon has brought some negative impacts on the society as well, but it is still under control. Firstly, some historical traditions or customs would disappear gradually as the cultural assimilation, and it may cause ethnic conflicts because of communication barriers between different nationalities. More serious is eroding local values, thus native culture seems to lose its dominant roles finally. Nonetheless, these problems could probably be addressed or avoided by correct guidance and stringent control of the authorities. At the meantime, people are also advised to enhance their ability of justice in order to reject the dross and assimilate the essence.
By way of conclusion, it is the mixed nationalities and cultures that make it possible for persons to live more interesting and countries to develop more quickly. Although there are still several potential threatens to social development, a mixed population structure really deserves recommendation.
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逃避心理
发表于 2011-12-5 21:48:36
A country becomes more interesting and develops more quickly when its population includes a mixture of nationalities and cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
With the sweeping trend of globalization, countries increasingly frequently，有点拗口 interact with each other in economy, culture and politics. This mutual interaction would probably generate large flux of migrants among countries, which may bring significant impacts on local daily life and social development. This essay will argue that would profit enormously from the mixture of nationalities and cultures although they should be confront with some drawbacks as well. The reasons for my position are as follows. [总的来说，very good，篇幅上稍微长了一点点，如果能更精练些更好了]
Obviously, both and local citizens will->would benefit from multi-culture and globalization. To begin with, people who live with many foreigners may experience more cultures, customs, festivals and religions than those who only communicate to native residents. These experiences enrich their entertainments in spare time, which would make their lives more stimulating and colorful. One particular salient example of cultural diversity is Christmas Day of western countries. People from eastern countries these days could also spend it together, sharing happiness and fun with families and friends. Moreover, nations with mixed nationalities and cultures are probably more competitive associated with the fact that international trades and communication with foreigners require a deeply mutual understanding. As a result, more connection to person of various nationalities may frequently promote the social development eventually.
Admittedly, this phenomenon has brought some negative impacts on the society as well, but it is still under control. Firstly, some historical traditions or customs would disappear gradually as the cultural assimilation, and it may cause ethnic conflicts because of communication barriers between different nationalities. More serious is eroding local values, thus native culture seems to lose its dominant roles finally. Nonetheless, these problems could probably be or avoided by correct guidance and stringent control of the authorities. At the meantime, people are also advised to enhance their ability of justice in order to reject the dross and assimilate the essence.
, it is the mixed nationalities and cultures that make it,前后2个it，不是很好。这个句子不够自然了 possible for persons to live more interesting and countries to develop more quickly. Although there are still several potential threatens to social development, a mixed population structure really deserves recommendation.
由于结尾段还没来得及推出。。。这里先简单介绍下吧：
In conclusion/To sum up/To conclude/In summary, although xxx， yyy （主体段的总结，同义转换，最好show一下你这方面很行）. Therefore/As a result/Thus/Consequently, zzz (essay观点重申，同义转换，similarly，最好show一下你这方面很行).
以上是结尾段的最基本的写法。
总的来说，这篇作文写得不错了，小作文好好写，你一定可以考出理想的分数的。Bless～
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普明一灯
发表于 2011-12-6 02:01:55
这篇作文是卡着时间写然后自己再按本帖的讲解修改了的，其实不是太能体现自己考试时的水平。yrqin的讲解对我很有用，明白了很多之前很模糊的概念，谢谢。下次我贴一篇限时写的原版。
ww412345
发表于 2011-12-6 08:37:32
太精彩了，只是楼主能不能稍微加快一点速度？我二雅是1月7号的。
逃避心理
发表于 2011-12-6 15:05:47
帖子一楼有些内容更新，希望有用。
上周杂事太多了，所以没有更新。今天会继续更新本帖子，尽量更新多点内容进来。争取圣诞节前全部弄完。
逃避心理
发表于 2011-12-6 19:27:39
从这一楼开始，将要介绍的是语言班阅读课程里面的内容。主要是介绍如何鉴赏文献的。一共会有五个部分：Module 5 (Reading 1) 至Module 5 (Reading 5)。逐一介绍了对文献进行解析的方法、区别和分析句子之间逻辑关系的方法以及句子之间各种逻辑关系的linking words的介绍及其使用。内容详尽，值得仔细研读。
Module 5 (Reading 1): additional Information from Reading textbook: detailing the body of an essay
5R1.1 Expository writing
5R1.2 Paragraph structure
5R1.3 The topic sentence of a paragraph
5R1.4 Supporting sentences
5R1.5 Concluding sentence
5R1.6 Linking sentences
5R1.7 Putting it all together
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逃避心理
发表于 2011-12-7 07:14:29
Module 5 (Reading 2): relationship in text - addition & sequence
5R2.1 Relationship in text - addition
5R2.2 Relationship in text – sequence
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逃避心理
发表于 2011-12-7 13:42:48
Module 5 (Reading 3): Paragraphs in context - short expository text
以上说明了essay的最基本结构。
以上说明了essay和一个body paragraph在基本结构上其实是很相似的。
5R3.1 Expository text: context
5R3.2 Introductory paragraph in an expository text
5R3.3 Evidence in an expository text
5R3.4 The relationship between ideas in an expository text: summary
5R3.5 Organisation of the details in the evidence paragraphs
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