kjeok1o1m0
发表于 2011-7-30 22:48:16
感谢楼主，辛苦了！
jkbfc
发表于 2011-7-31 01:52:30
这一普及，估计雅思考试中心又得提高评分标准了，人家想不明白，天朝的考生的写作能力怎么就能水涨船高呢，不行！俺安德鲁撒克逊至高无上的作文一定要死磕这帮黄种人
拭目以待。。。
高家桩人
发表于 2011-7-31 13:11:36
改好了，请楼主MM帮忙看下吧
Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of the private health care outweigh the advantages?
Private healthcare becomes a frequent topic of discussion nowadays. it is well understand that one’s healthy is the fundamental of his or her happiness and because of this, personal healthcare is indeed very important for the wellbeing of the citizens.
Yet some people think that there are many guarantees, like public healthcare or international health organizations, which could be the assistance of personal health problems. Of course, it is definitely true that those measures contribute to the individuals’ health, whilst The vital principal is that there are still some particular emergencies which can not covered in the public health system.
Obviously, commercial health care is beneficial to the individuals and societies. Firstly, for the sake of risk transfer, it is strongly recommended that every citizen involved in the medical insurance. For example, it is not uncommon for those dangerous occupations, like oilmen or miners, take the risk of injury. Without the private healthcare, the medical fee would be a big burden to those families. Furthermore, the annual physical examination include in the health insurance, plays a crucial role in the terms of the individuals’ healthy maintenance. It is essential that whether he or she could achieve personal success depends on whether he or she is healthy. Last but not least, technically speaking, private healthcare could be the symbol of our civilization. It represented the humanism and charity of business units.
To sum up, private medical care is the insurance of individuals’ interest and a kind of charity in principal. I claim that medical insurance is excellent additional option and crucial supplement of contemporary public healthcare.
vzzm8329
发表于 2011-7-31 15:14:10
妈呀受益匪浅！LZ你总结的太强了啊啊啊！！早看到你这篇文章我也不会栽在作文上差0.5，早就4个7办176奔澳洲去了好吗~~~！！！悲催的175捶胸顿足写道...
fp2t1f9s4l
发表于 2011-8-1 00:59:26
这个帖子必须顶，楼主太强了
强烈建议楼主再来一个 “口语”考试的独门菜谱
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luttomotums
发表于 2011-8-1 08:49:43
楼主,真是天才!
UpsentKnots
发表于 2011-8-1 19:17:07
楼主有才，满纸的淘宝体啊亲
何日二头
发表于 2011-8-2 01:55:43
原创吗？写的不错啊，
Hieniaror
发表于 2011-8-2 03:23:14
再次来顶 要不要把我一篇受十天写作影响深刻的习作拿上来也献丑……
clko7021
发表于 2011-8-2 15:08:53
楼主不去新东方可惜了...澳洲也有这个培训吧～