Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this.<br />
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Discuss both these views and give your opinion.<br />
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How to educate next generation to be a perfect citizen has been increasingly impertant now.Many people argue that parents should account for the parctice, however ,others hold the opinion that is the sutiable place where teach young people learn and apply the social rules.<br />
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Nevertheless to say ,parents have scignificant impact on children. Resaerch has suggested that the personality of individual is formed during the first few years ,therefore ,during this period ,the parendt should nature important aspects which are basic skills such as curioty ,patient and creation for the learning and living in the children's later lives.<br />
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However,humanity is highly characteristic of social life and shool is a area in which the children can be provided opportuinties to learn and practise the social rules through the activities in which children interact with their peers. In addition, in schooling children can re-expressing their ideas and have those tested and refined by teachers and classmates. These actives in schools are extermenly important for children becase they can develop abilities such as co-operation and effective contacts which play a fundmentanl role in the morden commercial society.<br />
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Therefore, the best hope for educating children to be a goog memember of comunity is to combine the family upbring with the school.parents should be closed informed with their children's progresses in school and the interact between school authority and parents should play a basic part in the education of children.
作者: 齐心鞋城 时间: 2011-10-25 13:31
In my option, It must be a 7 point at least.
task response：要求讨论两个观点，而且给出你的观点。在讨论两个观点的时候展开不够充分，会导致一定的丢分。打个比方：a是你的观点，b是你对观点的补充说明，c是一个普遍存在的事实，d是举例，e是总结或者对于特殊情况的一些补充。其实，我们有很多方法把一个观点说明清楚，但是文章中间的第二段并没有展开。第三段虽然论述了很多，但是都停留在你的观点层面，没有extend。所以会导致一定的丢分。
coherence and cohesion：能够有效的分段，得分。连接词的使用会存在一些问题，但是不影响阅读。
lexical resource：词汇量不是问题，但是用词的准确性有待提高。还有一个非常大的问题，就是单词的拼写存在大量的错误，已经超越了slips的范围，所以会扣分。而且单词的词性需要搞清楚，比如active就是adj，activity就是noun，不要误用。
grammatic range and accuracy:存在语法错误，但是能够清楚的表达自己的意思。