Financial education should be mandatory component of the school program, To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?<br />
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Education is always a topic of public interest and concern. Recently, there has been a controversy over whether financial education should be taught as a mondatory part of the school program. In my opinion, although financial education can bring students some benefits, it is only suitable for a selective course.<br />
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Obviously, students study in school in order to acquire more knowledge and these learning enable them to make a better development in the rapidly changing society. Therefore, students could be taught on rather extensive courses, such as history, arts and sports, even finacial one. However, due to the limited time spent on their study, students should select some courses that can develop their intelligence and bodies, such as math, sports. In this case, financial eduaction should, as a selective course, be taught to those students who are very inerest in financial issues and have more spare time.<br />
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However, we can not ignore the importance to some special students. For instance, it is universally acknowledged that some students have higher gift rather than those common students. Sometimes those mandatory courses can not meet their demand, some extra courses, like financial course, will be the best one of their choices. Therefore, financial education, as a modantory component on school educaton, is only suitable for those gifted students, not for all ones.<br />
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All in all, considering the difference of students and their limited study time, the financial education should not be mandatory part of the teaching scheme, and only is a better choice for those students having gifted ability so as to they could gain more knowledge during their educational period.<br />
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谢谢了！
作者: lopyappeaph 时间: 2010-5-11 06:10
写的蛮好的
作者: ptgv6018 时间: 2010-5-11 08:18
楼上的同学，给提点意见或错误呗，谢谢了！
我不知道我用的那些代词合适不，these,those，ones等，如
Therefore, financial education, as a modantory component on school educaton, is only suitable for those gifted students, not for all ones.
作者: 2026967360 时间: 2010-5-11 19:37
先说一下总体感受...模板...
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The demand of something is rising(descending) dramatically. This phenomenon can be partly attributed to something. Somebody figure out that ….同意： I approve this opinion to a great extent. (不同意：while I argue that).
Obviously, something bring a lot of benefits to somebody.
In the first place, …such as…
Next, …recent evidence suggests that…
Furthermore, … For instance,…
At the mean time, despite something, there are some demerits that…. However,…
Education is always a topic of public interest and concern. Recently, there has been a controversy over whether financial education should be taught as
should be included as...---> teach education 很怪。
a mondatory part of the school program. In my opinion, although financial education can bring students some benefits, it is only suitable for a selective course.
be suitable for sb: 适合某人， 在这里用法不对
Obviously, students study in school in order to acquire more knowledge and these learning
these learning: 前面根本没提 那些 learning， 所以 指代不清
enable them to make a better development in the rapidly changing society. Therefore, students could
could: 能...， 我觉得用 should 较好。
be taught on rather extensive
rather: 较口语， extensive 换成 comprehensive 怎么样（不确定，呵呵）
courses, such as history, arts and sports, even finacial one.
financial,拼写错误 且 用的不好
However, due to the limited time spent on their study, students should select some courses that can develop their intelligence and bodies, such as math, sports. In this case,
in this case: 不太恰当
financial eduaction should, as a selective course, be taught to those students who are very inerest
interested.
in financial issues and have more spare time.
However,
逻辑不太对
we can not ignore the importance to some special students. For instance, it is universally acknowledged that some students have higher gift rather
rather 用的不好， higher gift 不知道有这种说法没
than those common
指代不清
students. Sometimes those mandatory courses can not meet their demand,
demands
some extra courses, like financial course, will be the best one of their choices. Therefore, financial education, as a modantory component on school educaton, is only suitable for those gifted students, not for all ones.
All in all, considering the difference of students and their limited study time, the financial education should not be mandatory part of the teaching scheme, and only is
语法错误 be
a better choice for those students having gifted ability
怪怪的， 用gifts OK了
so as to they could gain more knowledge during their educational period.
还不错啊，但是最后结尾别用all in all， 我以前语言班老师说的，all in all偏口语。
In my opinion, although financial education can bring students some benefits, it is only suitable for a selective course！我觉得for应该改成as啊
总体还可以把，6分上上，模板迹象很严重啊，呵呵
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