花了差不多4个小时，一篇大作文总算是完成了，请大家帮我批改一下，多谢！<br />
A balanced diet, or eating balanced meals, is the key to a healthy life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer.<br />
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Nowadys, there are many changes in the eating habits along with the updating of living standards now. Yet, a balanced diet, as far as I am concerned, still plays a quite important role for people to have a healthy life.<br />
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Obviously, a balanced healthy diet can ensure people to obtain all the nutrients their bodies need in the right proportion. Different types of food provide different nutrients and therefore it is impossible for people to take all the necessary nutrients needed for good health and growth from one type of food. As a result, not only should the children eat a varied diet containing vegetables and meals during the whole period of their growth, the adults should also ensure the daily intake of nutrition with balanced eating habits. In that case, people would be physically strong enough to enjoy a healthy life.<br />
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Furthermore, the negative effects that an imbalanced diet could come about should not be ignored. For instance, due to frequently eating an imbalanced diet like fast-food containing more meals than fruits and vegetables, children would become more and more fat, which would put them to more inconveniences on study and outside activies. As a result, they would not enable to make their lives happier, even product more serious psychological problems.<br />
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In conclusion, it is very important for people to eat with a balanced diet. a good diet enable people to be more healthy enough to enjoy a pleasant life. On the contrary, there will be quite negative effects for people to eating imbalanced diet. Therefore, both parents and their children should have a varied diet so as to they can live happier.
几点个人意见，个人理解，不一定正确，进攻参考，有不对的，也请楼下指正，讨论作文还是能使人进步很多的~~
Nowadys, there are many changes in the eating habits along with the updating of living standards (now删去). Yet, a balanced diet, as far as I am concerned, still plays a quite important role for people to have a healthy life.
1.可以考虑将along with 后面的成分前置，效果可能稍微好点；
2.个人觉得changes in eating habits不能严格的与a balanced diet构成转折关系，最好将changes in eating habits具体化，找出几个具体的unbalanced diet的同义替换，如junk food，fast food。
Obviously, a balanced healthy diet can ensure people to obtain all the nutrients( their bodies need不如直接删去) in （the right） proportion. Different types of food provide different nutrients and therefore it is impossible for people to take all the necessary nutrients （needed删） for good health and growth from （only）one type of food. As a result, not only should the children eat a varied diet containing vegetables and meals during the whole period of their growth, the adults should also ensure the daily intake of nutrition with （balanced eating habits）. In that case, people would be physically strong enough to enjoy a healthy life.
Furthermore, the negative effects that an imbalanced diet （could come about） should not be ignored. For instance, due to frequently eating an imbalanced diet like fast-food containing （more meals没太看懂是什么意思） than fruits and vegetables, children would become more and more fat, which would put（ them to ）more inconveniences on （their）study and outside activies. As a result, they would （not enable） to make their lives （happier）, even （product more） serious psychological problems.
In conclusion, it is very important for people to eat （with） a balanced diet. a good diet enable people to be （more healthy） enough to enjoy a pleasant life. （On the contrary没有构成对比）, there will be quite negative effects for people to eating imbalanced diet. Therefore, both parents and their children should have a varied diet so as to they can live happier.
1。全文多次出现了imbalanced diet， healthy， enough，enable，varied，楼主可以考虑用其他的词语表达。
2。部分长句有不必要的冗余成分，造成了可读性差。
Nowadays, along with the updating of living standards, there are many changes in the eating habits. More and more people, particularly children, prefer to eat some food with an imbalaned nutrition such as fast-food and even junk food. A balanced diet like traditional food, as far as I am concerned, still plays a quite important role for people to have a good life.
就以你刚改的这段为例：
Nowadays, along with the updating (updating 这个词什么意思？应该用improving) of living standards, there are many changes in the （这个 the 应该去掉）eating habits. More and more people, particularly children, prefer to eat （prefer eating）some food with an imbalaned nutrition such as fast-food and even junk food (fast-food 和 junk food 不是并列关系， 不能用 and). A balanced diet like traditional food （traditional food 并不一定是 balanced diet, 没必要引入这个概念）, as far as I am concerned, still plays a quite important role for people to have a good life
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作者: 孤独草81 时间: 2010-5-5 19:55
感觉lz应该拿骗30分钟写出来的文章才有修改的价值。
4各小时写出来的代表不了到时候考场的水平。
作者: 了泛光灯都 时间: 2010-5-5 22:36
重写第一段：
Nowadays, along with the improvement of living standards, there are many changes in eating habits. More and more people, particularly children, prefer eating some food with an imbalaned nutrition such as fast-food, even junk food. A balanced diet, as far as I am concerned, still plays a quite important role for people to have a good life.
第二段的改写如下：
Obviously, eating balanced meals can ensure individuals to obtain all the nutrients in the right proportion. Different types of food provide different nutrients and therefore it is impossible to take all the necessary nutrition for a good health or growth from only one type of food. For instance, fruits and vegetables contain plenty of vitamins, while meats produce more fat and protein. As a result, not only should children eat with a varied food containing vegetables and meats during the whole period of their growth, the adults should also ensure the daily intake of nutrition by eating a quite traditional food. Only in this way could people keep fit so as to make their lives happier.