Some people who failed at school can be highly successful in their adult life. Discuss why does this happen? And what are the main factors to get a successful life?
两个问题中明显是the latter plays a more important role.
1) success does not only depend on academic achievement
2) there are a variety of factors contributing one's successful life, such as ...,
有个别语法问题 eg.
Academic institutions focus on arts and science, but to succeed it takes more than that
拜楼主，词汇和句式都太强大了。
说一点，我记得mark morgen的书里说举例不要超过三个，比如
Around the globe students are taught math, physics, chemistry, music, etc.
还有他的书里不建议用.etc，不过十天里好像鼓励用，我也不知道
写作考6。5的颤抖着发言。
lz实力其实很强，比我写的好多了，呵呵。我上语言时，老师说，写作时最好不要用第一人称，所以你文中“my answer”和“I have seen”不知道是不是合适？另一个，就是你第一句，Is academic performance everything?把全文讨论的焦点放在学习成绩和“everything”的关系上了，而题目要求讨论的内容是学习成绩和“be successful in their adult life, 所以改成 Is academic performance success in life会不会好些？最后一点，据我现在一个鬼子老太太同学（她是亚斯写作考官）说，第一段最好能把key factors列出来，这样提纲挈领，看起来干净利落，印象分会更好。
nice-looking是没问题的，我有把握，呵呵
good-looking是指外貌，nice-looking表示“看起来不错”，这里是要缩写school reports that look nice.
bill gates那个我感觉可以不用展开，韩寒的例子的确需要一点evidence才行
作者: fuhbh 时间: 2010-5-14 13:51
Does excellent academic performance means everything? Obviously my answer to this question would be “No”, since I have seen a host of examples of people doing poor in school but hitting success in life. Bill Gates, the world renowned school dropout, with his Microsoft, makes a perfect example. 我为人人，人人为我+ Q5 a2 g& m) A, h( Y; W
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Primarily, academic achievement at school or college differs from success in adult life . Educational institutions are designed to teach students mainly arts and science, and excellent academic performances do show a person’s ability to absorb and apply what he has been taught through exams. Whereas a successful adult life apparently takes many forms, the life of a wealthy businessman, an elite professional, or even a happy and busy housewife. With such differences, doing great at school does not necessarily make things easier.
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To succeed in adult life a person needs far more than nice-looking school reports, because he will be faced with the unpredictable which knowledge of arts and science cannot help solve. Instead, some qualities such as perseverance, resilience, sociability and the list does not end here, will be quite demanded,… In China there is a talented young man named Han Han who dropped out (actually quitting when he realized he was about to get kicked out) from high school yet still managed to become one of the best selling writers. Lately this Chinese literary bad boy made his way to Time Magazine’s the World’s Most Influential People list.(example 想说明what？）
needless to say, if one wishes to have a successful adult life the most important thing would be for him to acquire qualities that help him cope with the complications in life. This is not to say that academic performances are not demanding though. The point is: Even if a person fails in schooling, he still has a chance to experience life and achieve his life goal.
感觉7分.还是难， 不够多吧。见笑