新上一篇，没计时，拼写错误红色标记．写得有点太长了．<br />
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A great many countries around the world are gradually losing their cultural identity because of the prevalence of the Internet.<br />
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To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?<br />
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Today, internet is very common in our daily life. It shortens the physical distance, breaks the bar of communication, and eventually makes the world a small village. Meanwhile, someone warns that the countries will lose their culture identity in this wave. In spite of this concern, internet actually enhances the culture consciousness, which results in better protection of fading-away cultures.<br />
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Culture includes a lot of factors: the certain behavior in everyday life, the believe in religions, the technology developed through generations, the arts and music… We’re born, raised up in a certain culture. Sometimes we may fight for or even die for it. However, as people always take it for granted, they seldom realize its existence until they encounter a different culture and find in a shock how unique their own culture is. In the old days, when people from different culture have to travel long distance to meet with each other, such cross culture communication is time consuming, costly and rare. After internet made the meeting and casual chat a click effort, more and more average people get exposure to variant cultures and as a result realize his own cultural identity.<br />
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Internet also facilitates protection of dying tradition skills and way of life. Information is shared on web-sites. Forums provide space for discussion, donation, debate etc. Internet is a speed and powerful channel, where numerous treasures get the attentions from all over the world. This kind of promotion and advertising attract people’s interest to learn the culture, somehow invent creative ways to protect it. Good example is the ancient residential place located in Huizhou, Anhui province. When a lot of people visit there to admire its beauty, the local tour industry is scaled. The income from tour raise fund for the amendment of those old houses. This sort of healthy cycle works well for culture protection.<br />
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In one word, internet as a new technique can benefit a country’s culture identity, instead of weaken it.<br />
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Polular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occations are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.<br />
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To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?<br />
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I agree the sporting even plays an essential role in easing international tensions and somehow contributing the world peace. <br />
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If we look back how sports emerged and developed in human being’s history, it’s quite clear. At the very beginning, sports is a way of practicing daily surviving skills, such as encouraging people to run faster, jump higher etc. Then it started to have certain module and rules. Competition and rewards are introduced in. Each participant, individual or group, has his own fans, and he becomes the representative of the fans. His winning is the honor of a supporting group behind him, and his losing is a shame not only to himself. The mechanism here is quite similar as how the politician works: people of same culture, believes or benefit getting together and select their own lead to represent them in an argument or fight. Through sports, people can release their patriotic emotions, enthusiasm in a safe way.<br />
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Sports is also a good means of culture exchange and communication. People get to know each other better through sports. The big international occasion such as the football World Cup, and the Olympic Games can gather a lot of people, the athletes, the volunteers, the audience, the judges and all other people working for the event. They come from different race, location, with variant culture and thoughts. The sports occasion give them a chance to talk with each other, share their stories, happiness and sorrow and enhance the understanding. This will definitely help improving the relationship and avoiding violent conflict. The good example was the Ping-Pong diplomacy China had with USA in 1970’s. When the politician of two countries still hesitated with talking to each other, the Chinese Ping-Pong team was sent to USA as pioneer to break the thick ice.<br />
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So in one word, sports can not only show the pure human spirit, faster, higher and stronger, but also perform an important role in defending the world peace.<br />
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作者: 523720658 时间: 2010-5-14 14:16
这题目好诡异哦...
不过楼主行文如流水...我看得很敬仰啊...
作者: 文明仁化 时间: 2010-5-14 17:41
是剑3，Test 1的题目。LS过奖了，这个是没计时写的，还改过不少错的词。呵，离实战还有点距离。
作者: 文明仁化 时间: 2010-5-14 23:18
剑3 Test 1, Writing Task 1 (G)
20分钟完成，拼写错误红色标记。
You are due to start a new job next week but you will not able to because you have some problems.
Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter
1. explain your situation
2. describe your problems
3. tell him/her when you think you can start.
Dear Mike,
Thanks for offering the job of the chief IT officer in your company. I know I’ve confirmed one month ago of my start date, which is next Monday. However, I encountered an emergent issue and want to postpone the on-board date to May 1st.
The issue was caused by the recent quick expressing (spreading) disease – SARS. After the first patient was identified 2 weeks ago locally, the number of affected people increased significantly to 200 in the city as of now. Due to this situation, the government has announced all the school to be closed temporarily, including the childcare center, where I send my 3 year old son every workday. So I cannot leave home to work until I find a baby-sitter. Fortunately, one of my relatives has promised to help me out. And she will get to my home by end of next week, so that I can start to work on May 1st.
Thanks a lot for your understanding and please feel free to let me know if you have any concern about this timeline.
自己看了惨不忍睹的一篇。。。
剑3 Test 1, Writing Task 2 (G)
用时40分钟
Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a cmplete waste of time.
Do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your exprerience.
I don’t agree with this opinion. Nowadays parents always get nervous when talking about kids’ education. The modern society is full of competition and nobody wants his child to loss at the very beginning. Parents are keen to make every second of the child’s life meaningful, like what this statement says, leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are waste of time!
However, what does education really mean? First it’s to give children enough knowledge and skill to survive. But the knowledge and skills are only useful when children are willing to accept them, learn them by heart. Kid is born to be curious about new things. However, if they’re forced to do something, they will most likely resist it and lose interest. So don’t plan a certain educational activity for kids. Give them the freedom, they can choose what they’re most interested in and learn well.
Education also means to build a healthy spirit, with the ability to love, to treasure the life, to have sympathy of the other’s sorrow. This factor of education cannot be achieved by simple class study. Children can learn this from their daily life, by making friends, by getting closer to the nature.
Leisure time can bring a lot surprise to the children, if they have the right to decide how to spend it. Give children the choices (options) and leave them a free space to grow. You will find how amazing every kid can be with different talent.
If we look back how sports emerged and developed in human being’s history, it’s quite clear.
这句是个典型的错句，而且是雅思考官视为大忌的一种错误，it 指代不明。我读到这里我还在等着it is quite clear that....，看看究竟是什么clear，结果句子结束了，也就是说这句话主语没了，不知道这个it究竟是指什么，你不能想当然的以为it就是指代你上一段讲的东西，英语是不能这样跨越着来的。
还有这句：They come from different race, location, with variant culture and thoughts，语法也是有问题的。
with介词短语是就近修饰的，不能想当然就认为它是修饰主语they的，在这个句子最后里with修饰的是race，location。改为：They come from different race, location, holding variant culture and thoughts
You are due to start a new job next week but you will not able to because you have some problems.
Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter
1. explain your situation
2. describe your problems
3. tell him/her when you think you can start.
Dear Sir,
I am so excited about my new job and looking forward to kick off as soon as possible. But I am very sorry to write to you to discuss the possibility of delaying my on-board time one week later than the day we agreed days ago.
The reason is my grand parents will visiting Beijing for one weeks from the next Monday. They are both eighty years old and this trip might be their last one to my family and I really hope I could spend some more time with them and show them around in the city.
During this period, I will develop the ideas we discussed and generate one report about it. Also, I will read the documents you passed to me in our last meeting. I want you believe that I will be well-prepared when I am sitting in the office on Jun. 25.
Your understanding and permission will be highly appreciated.
Sincerely,
xxx
作者: yhwwvjlp 时间: 2010-5-21 15:58
1 It 使用要慎重，建议用“，which”把前面的句子当成后面句子的对象
2 学术论文缩写不能出现
3 楼主老毛病了，一定要突出论点，句子之间用大个的耀眼的连接词，每个分论点后要有支持句。
4 也是老毛病，最后一段-也就是第四段，缺乏总结前面论点的句子，给人一种草草收兵的感觉。
有些句型看着头疼，但说不上哪里不对 水平有限 我也是来学习的
作者: 文明仁化 时间: 2010-5-21 21:10
Dear Sir,
I am so excited about my new job and looking forward to kick off (kicking of) as soon as possible. But I am very sorry to write to you to discuss (too many tos, and a typical chinese English) the possibility of delaying my on-board time one week later (seems we don't say delay sth later than) than the day we agreed days ago. But i'm very soory that my on-board date may be delayed for one week, and i'm writing to you to discuss this issue.
The reason is that my grand parents will visiting Beijing for one weeks from the next Monday (will visit BJ next Mon, and stay here for one week). They are both eighty years old and this trip might be their last one to my family and I really hope I could spend some more time (some is not necessary) with them and show them around in the city.
During this period, I will develop the ideas we discussed and generate one report about it. Also, I will read the documents you passed to me in our last meeting. I want you believe (it's chinese english again, you can say, it's no doubt that i will...) that I will be well-prepared when I am sitting (step into) in the office on Jun. 25.
Your understanding and permission will be highly appreciated.
Sincerely,
xxx
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作者: 文明仁化 时间: 2010-5-21 22:53
哈哈，兔兔和象象很热心哈。这篇不是偶的，偶也来改了改。
作者: yebjs2o6n8 时间: 2010-5-22 01:32
show sb around in the city？确定需要in？
如果有不确定的用法，我宁愿换种表达方法，呵呵
作者: 文明仁化 时间: 2010-5-22 12:57
嗯，这句也有点怪怪的，一般只说show sb around (here/there), 不过不太确定。刚想找人问问呢。
作者: gootdlan921 时间: 2010-5-22 14:32
好像语法不算错 查了下 around除了prep还是adv可以做动词的状语吧
作者: imissu88 时间: 2010-5-22 23:55
要是用adj来修饰city 就用nearby
作者: 股票研究所12 时间: 2010-5-23 04:47
非常谢谢leciel95的修改和建议，关于chenglish的部分一定会多加注意的。
上班时间写的，犯了很多一眼就看到的错误，感谢大家不吝赐教。
关于show sb. around in the city，我是这么考虑的，show sb. around我的理解是待人参观的意思，in the city or in the downtown 只是做状语，不知道这样理解有没有错误？