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Topic: Many people migrate from large cities to small towns for lower living costs and better environment, do you think advantage of this development outweigh its disadvantage?<br />
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In modern society,undoubtely whether or not people should migrate from big cities to small regions has become a hot issue of ordinary people's life. The issue has triggered a heated discussion and generated different views. Some people say that is beneficial for people to live in a small town, while others insist that it is not convenient for people to leave large cities and move to small regions. Personally I think the former is more convincing and I would qualify it to some extent.<br />
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Firstly, the environment of large city is becoming more awful. Obviously the small towns are better in environment than the big cities. It is evident that people suffer kinds of terrible diseases in the modern cities as the result of continually exasperating environment. If people move to regional areas, they can be far away from the risk of pollution and keep healthy easily<br />
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Secondly, the living expense in modern cities is much higher than small towns. Probably we can take the house price as the example. The medium house price in Beijing, the capital city of China is approximately $300,000, whereas it is reported that the medium price for buying a house in a small region near Beijing is just about $100,000. It seems clearly that houses in the small region are more affordable than the large modern city-Beijing.<br />
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Obviously, we can not deny the fact that living in small towns has brought us some inconvinience, such as lack of transports, few shopping centers, and few job opportunities. However these have already been history. The public facilities have always been on-going provided and the job opportunities are increasing as more and more people moving to the regional areas. It will be more convinient for people to live in the small towns than before.<br />
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Having considered all the arguments above, we may safely draw the conclusion that migrating from big modern cities to small towns will bring a lot of benefit to people. Most people can have comfortable lifestyle with good environment and less living cost.<br />
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作者: qome2704 时间: 2010-8-9 23:49
Some people say that it is...
Obviously the environment in small towns are better...
It is evident that people suffer different kinds...
as a reuslt of the continually...
they can be/stay far away from...
It seems that OR It is clear that houses in small region...
modernised city - Beijing.
a lot of benefit(s)...
作者: 中国强能也 时间: 2010-8-10 07:50
审题： do you think advantage of this development outweigh its disadvantage
您分析的很好，我很受启发，特别是在brainstorming方面，一些话题不敢展开，因为自己的单词量还不够，所以就套用了题目中出现的两个点：environment and living cost, 看来还是要转成其他方面的点来做比较，不然可能也会被考官认为是抄题目了。 还有sentence structure方面我也觉得复杂句欠缺，句式比较死板。 另外有一点我比较担心的是，每次我写作练习，感觉字数都远远超出TASK 2要求的250字，大概都要有320-350字，这样会不会被认为字数过多而扣分，而且写作时间又不够呢？