<strong>Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.<br />
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.</strong><br />
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Nowadays, many people have changed their old conception of working. They will never spend their lives doing the same things while others still keep no change. In my opinion, change is a good thing but it is not suitable for everyone.<br />
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On the one side, people can get benefits from changing their jobs. Firstly, searching for a new job can earn more money. People always pursue wealth which is their first target for working. According to a survey, 90 percent of people who want to change their occupation are not satisfied with current salary. Secondly, people will be lazy if they keep stay in a same place. A new environment will encourage them to express their potential ability. Last but not least, new working opportunity enable employees to study new technology to enrich their knowledge which will promote the skill level of the workers.<br />
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On the other side, people should not change their job indiscriminately because they should consider some issues. In the first place, people need to get accustomed to a new system which means new employee to the new company. No one in the company will treat you as professional worker as before. In their eyes, you just a new colleague who can be commanded by anyone. In the second place, if you are a frequent job-hopping, the company will suspicious your loyalty and integrity. For instance, if a candidate have never worked for a company more than one year, definitely, the interviewer of the new company will refuse your application. Finally, people should consider more about job changing especially if they have married. Although money is important, stable of life is more significant. Changing a job means a challenge, it may be failed. At that time, the whole family will tied by the pressure of unemployment. That is why people really should consider carefully about this thing.<br />
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All in all, every coin has two sides. Even though changing a job will encounter some risks, people will be gain more through job-hopping if they can make a serious consideration before they make decisions.<br />
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最近写作文 发现2个大问题 <br />
1. 不会造句，很奇怪 许多句子或者单词等到写作文的时候 怎么也想不出来<br />
2. 字数太多 动不动就奔300+去了 <br />
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各位水友猛拍~
作者: 张哎墨 时间: 2010-8-30 10:17
我来坐坐FreeOZ名人的沙发。。。
第一段：
doing the same things & change is a good thing 与题目重复，最好换成意思一样但是句法不同的表达方式。
第二段与第三段句首：
On the one side/on the other side: 我不是很确认这样是不是准确，但我觉得是不是： on one hand/ on the other hand 更好？
第二段：searching for a new job can earn more money - 语法错误
People always pursue wealth which is their first target for working - 这个观点是不是有些偏激了？
enrich their knowledge which will promote the skill level of the workers. - 末尾怎么像在说别的人而不是 enrich their knowledge 本人呢？
第三段没有细看，留点悬念
第四段：
every coin has two sides - 这句话好像听某个雅思考官说，已经被中国考生用滥了，因此建议不用
Even though changing a job will encounter some risks - 语法错误，主语呢？
都没什么大问题,几个感觉更好的说法,:
In my opinion, change is a good thing but it is not suitable for everyone.->In my opinion, change is a good thing but not suitable for everyone.
searching for a new job can earn more money 寻找新工作的过程可以赚更多钱?->a new job always means more money
study new technology to -> learn new technology to
you just a new colleague who can be commanded by anyone.-> you, just a new colleague can be commanded by anyone.
it may be failed. At that time, the whole family will tied by -> it may fail. At that time, the whole family could be tied by
作者: zyjkp 时间: 2010-9-1 08:52
开头不大好，如果没有新东西写的话，句式最好倒腾一下，不要与题目一致。
比如： Change is often considered to be an effective measure to improve people's life, but it is not always the case, because in fact change sometimes brings disasters to originally peaceful life. This essay will argue that change means risk, which not only may bring profits but also lead to crisis.
还有第二段，Firstly, searching for a new job can earn more money.
这句话是逻辑上不通的，老外对这个似乎很注意，要留意加上often 或者 sometimes之类的修饰吧。
下面没咋看。。。
作者: 明飞巧 时间: 2010-9-1 13:43
我估计是：
Task Response 5
Coherence and Cohesion 5.5
Lexical Resource 5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy 5
Overall 5
如果在细节方面多加润色，是个很好的作文了。下面我就给几点拙见，仅供参考。
1. According to a （限定性的比如网络调研，社会科学研究。。。）survey, 90 percent（限定性的比如大概啊，up to等等，因为这个都是咱们自己编的么，别说那么太肯定了） of people who want to change their occupation are not satisfied with current salary. 这个句子可以改成一个因果的句式，比如调查显示90%的人想跳槽，其中最主要的原因就是为了获取更高薪水。
2. That is why people really should consider carefully about this thing （这个句子用this thing结束，太生硬了。是不是可以加进一些关于情景的时间状语的句子呢，比如when they want to...,或者before a person/ an individual make his resignment decision）.
3. All in all, every coin has two sides.这个是个败笔，太老套了。还不如说中国古语云：鱼肉和熊掌不可兼得呢。论语里说的似乎是。昨天听BBC里面有个词coexist（原话好像说的是：modern human being must find a way to coexist with natural environments）, 你就说risks and opportunities coexist呢。
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作者: fdkc2czzt 时间: 2010-9-2 17:07
Nowadays, many people have changed their old conception of working.They will never spend their lives doing the same things while othersstill keep no change. In my opinion, change is a good thing but it isnot suitable for everyone.
On the one side, people can get benefits from changing their jobs.Firstly, searching for a new job can earn more money. People alwayspursue wealth which is their first target for working. According to asurvey, 90 percent of people who want to change their occupation arenot satisfied with current salary. Secondly, people will be lazy ifthey keep stay in a same place. A new environment will encourage themto express their potential ability. Last but not least, new workingopportunity enable employees to study new technology to enrich theirknowledge which will promote the skill level of the workers.
1.on the one side ---> on the one hand
2. 第一段没有讲清楚工作变换,但是这段一开头就讲,所以语意上出现连接问题.
3.文段中的论据松散,并不能很好地论证论点(文段的第一句).给人以只是在罗列理由而已.点与点之间没有什么连接.
4.第二句语意不清晰.
5.第三句过于绝对,只能讲some people.
6.occupation-->职业,所以转工不等于转职业.
7.keep stay -->keep staying
8. in a same place --> in the same place
9. potential ability --> potentials
10. Last but not least --> Last but not the least, 另外此短语一般于文章结尾用.
11. opportunity enable --> opportunities enable
12.总体上不少语句不是很通顺.
On the other side, people should not change their job indiscriminatelybecause they should consider some issues. In the first place, peopleneed to get accustomed to a new system which means new employee to thenew company. No one in the company will treat you as professionalworker as before. In their eyes, you just a new colleague who can becommanded by anyone. In the second place, if you are a frequentjob-hopping, the company will suspicious your loyalty and integrity.For instance, if a candidate have never worked for a company more thanone year, definitely, the interviewer of the new company will refuseyour application. Finally, people should consider more about jobchanging especially if they have married. Although money is important,stable of life is more significant. Changing a job means a challenge,it may be failed. At that time, the whole family will tied by thepressure of unemployment. That is why people really should considercarefully about this thing.
1.On the other side --> On the other hand
2. some 太弱 -->following
3.第二句,后半语句有问题
4.第三,四句不合理
5.job-hopping--job--hopper
6.suspicius -->suspect,其实suspect用得不当,应用have doubts in your
7.have --> has
8. more than one year --> for more than one year
9.删definitely
10. 删of the new company
11.在第五句application 后加 based on ......
12. 第六句与论点矛盾.
13. stable --> stability
14.段落语句结构性很低,点与点之间没什么连接以至于论据没什么力度.LZ可以搜搜以前论坛一些同学的作文作为参考.
All in all, every coin has two sides. Even though changing a job willencounter some risks, people will be gain more through job-hopping ifthey can make a serious consideration before they make decisions.
1. All in all ---> In all
2.will be gain --> will gain
3.由于前面论点没摆好,这段没有办法总结全文,所以也没有呼应到第一段.
Since the dawn of the 21st century, we human beings are experiencing various changes, social and technological, in every aspect of our lives. However, the debate over the pros and cons of changes is still representative of the type of questions raised regarding how changes may affect people and modern society. Though some people avoid changes and try to live a routine life, I believe the positive effects of changes far outweigh its negative ones.
Convincing argument can be made that we can benefit a lot from changes. First, changes are inevitable and necessary for social revolutions and evolutions of human beings. If our ancestors had not changed their hunting lifestyle and not settled down to farm, we would probably still live in caves. If the British in the 1860s had not embraced changes and made the 1st step of industrial revolution, mass production would still be a dream today. If cars and aero planes had not been invented, we perhaps would never be able to imagine how things were like on the other side of the planet, let alone globalization. Such instances can be countless.
Moreover, changes can bring about opportunities. In history every social change was followed by new job vacancies and new professions. It is only possible for people who can take the chance to improve their living conditions or achieve their ultimate goals. Take the CEO of Apple for example. If Steve Jobs had never dropped out from college and taken the first bite off the apple, he would probably just be an ordinary person instead of one of the most successful businessmen and legendary icons. Also, changes can afford us with amusements and keep us from getting bored. For people living everyday life like a routine transaction, the enthusiasm and passion inside them would soon die out, or even never exist, which might lead to serious psychological problems such as depression.
Granted, changes may carry some risks, since there are good changes and bad ones too, like natural catastrophes and financial crisis. Some argue that people might lose their jobs or even their lives due to those evil changes. However, with modern technology we are increasingly better able to cope with those kinds of problems.
To conclude, even though sometimes changes may have negative influences on people and the society, some of which cannot be neglected, I still believe that their positive effects are more noteworthy.
作者: Nawncreesse 时间: 2010-9-3 11:17
改个introduction 试试。
Recent years have been witnessing a multitude of changes which come from societies and technologies, affect us in every walk of life. However, many argue whether we should accept them or merely avoid. In my opinion, accepting and overcoming these challenges would finally keep you from backing a loser.