Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children<br />
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Do you agree or disagree?<br />
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In the contemporary society, a computer is playing an increasingly pivotal importance daily. It is used widely by every kind of person and young children have no exception. Whether it is negative or positive to children is becoming a debatable topic in every country. In this essay, I will argue the both effects from the following reasons.<br />
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Admittedly, it has the negative effects for young kids to use computers every day. It has radiation everywhere on any computer and it really hurts the eyes and bodies of young children based on what I have learnt from some scientific reports. Moreover, nowadays, nearly every computer can access to the Internet. It is very common that they will see plenty of violent films and pictures from there, which is detrimental to the development of young boys and girls mentally.<br />
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Nonetheless, as one of the most fantastic inventions, we have to admit that computers have brought much more positive benefits to us than the negative ones. Young kids can use them as efficient tools to study. For instance, they can search for any unrecognized word from an electronic dictionary in very short time compared to the traditional paper dictionary. This greatly enhances the efficiency to their studying work. Second, computers with Internet can make it connect to persons easily from all over the world. By using any instant chatting tool, such as MSN, boys and girls can make friends with any children with whom they even have not met before. Global communication can develop the ability for them of how to talk nicely, which does good to their future. Finally computers and other advanced technologies are widely used everywhere and they have to learn to use those including young children. I can’t imagine how a young boy or girl could find a good job without knowing how to use a computer in the future after they grow up.<br />
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In conclusion, from my perspective, I really believe it will give young children more positive effects then negative ones to use computers every day only if their parents can help to control them on the approaches in which they use.<br />
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再说点连贯和语法。。给你改第一段。其他自己发掘。
It is used widely by every kind of person including young adult （重复题目词汇不得分）. Whether it's impacts are negative or positive on children has become a debatable topic (in every country 可删除，every 用的频率太高). In this essay, I will argue the both effects from the following reasons.（你究竟是什么观点？请具体提出）
再说点连贯和语法。。给你改第一段。其他自己发掘。
It is used widely by every kind of person including young adult （重复题目词汇不得分）【我知道要替换题目词汇，已经在下文中有所体现了。但是 young adult 和young children不可能划等号吧？】. Whether it's impacts are negative or positive on children has become a debatable topic (in every country 可删除，every 用的频率太高). In this essay, I will argue the both effects from the following reasons.（你究竟是什么观点？请具体提出） 【这个评论我接受，因为我是写得不好，没考虑成熟，而且country是加得多余。但是，我也有看到很多剑桥范文并不是首段就提出观点，我只是想尝试下突破模板的范围】