Do you agree or disagree with the following statement “'genetic engineering' is beneficial for human being” , give reasons and example to support your ideas.<br />
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In these years, more and more countries are interested and involved in genetic engineering projects, and huge development has been made in this specific area. The potential impact of genetic engineering on human being is a subject of intense debate. In my opinion, the future of genetic engineering is stimulating and fascinating, but also we should not oversee its downside.<br />
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Obviously genetic technology can improve our quality of life in many aspects. It is believed that the characters of a life are determined by its gene. Improving the gene of crops is an effective way to address the problem of food scarcity. Furthermore, waste treatment and sewage disposal is becoming unmanageable, and it is possible to get some bacteria which could degrade them with genetic technology. Theoretically, it is even possible to create brand new kind of lives which have special abilities, such as producing oil or gas in order to solve the resource problem we are now facing. And diseases like cancer could also be tackled in the future as the gene of human being could be improved.<br />
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On the other hand, genetic technology is a threaten to biodiversity. A vast of creatures may extinct because they are less competitive and adaptable than those creatures whose genes have been artificially changed. And everybody may look similar if they are able to change their gene freely. <br />
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According to the above discussions, genetic engineering has a promising future, but it may also lead to the loss of biodiversity.
最后一段只有一句话，这是需要避免的。我觉得至少应该再加上一句我们应该如何扬长避短之类的废话。另外最后这个According to the above discussions更像是应用文的文体，建议换成更常见于essay的In conclusion啊In summary啊之类的。我知道这些已经用烂了，不过我觉得比这个还是要更合适一点。
In these years, more and more countries are interested and involved ingenetic engineering projects, and huge development has been made inthis specific area. The potential impact of genetic engineering onhuman being is a subject of intense debate. In my opinion, the futureof genetic engineering is stimulating and fascinating, but also weshould not oversee its downside.
1.扣题了.LZ的开头段是一个扣了题的好例子.
2.In these years --> In recent decades,
3. 所有的be interested--->be interested in
4.第一句可改为因果型句子 xxxxxx are not only interested in but also got involved in xxxxxxx, such that xxxxxx.
5.在第一句后,简单地讲一下基因工程与人类的好坏作用后再讲引起讨论
5.第二句开头可用 As a result 等来承上.
6. human being -->human beings
7. is a subject xxxxx ---> has become an intensely debated subject.
8.在 In my opinion 后加, considering xxxxxxxx. 由于题目问的是基因工程于人类的影响,所以应扣紧这方面来讲, 而不是讲它的发展前途.
Obviously genetic technology can improve our quality of life in manyaspects. It is believed that the characters of a life are determined byits gene. Improving the gene of crops is an effective way to addressthe problem of food scarcity. Furthermore, waste treatment and sewagedisposal is becoming unmanageable, and it is possible to get somebacteria which could degrade them with genetic technology.Theoretically, it is even possible to create brand new kind of liveswhich have special abilities, such as producing oil or gas in order tosolve the resource problem we are now facing. And diseases like cancercould also be tackled in the future as the gene of human being could beimproved.
1. Obviously ---> Obviously,
2. our quality of life---> the quality of our life
3.believed太弱了,而且被人believed的东西也不见的是事实 ---> It has been scientifically shown
4. the characters 太绝对了 ---> some important characters
5. of a life --> of the human life
6. gene ---> genes
7. Improving the gene --->For instance, modifying the genes
10. is becoming ---> are becoming more and more
11. 第四句有点臃肿,而且第三句已讲基因改造,那第四句最好以基因工程为主语, 如: Furthermore, genetic technology can also be applied to create bacteria, which can effectively degrade human waste and sewage. Such application will greatly assist the waste and sewage treament process, which has become more and more unmanagable in many countries, due to the rapid increase of human popluation.
On the other hand, genetic technology is a threaten to biodiversity. Avast of creatures may extinct because they are less competitive andadaptable than those creatures whose genes have been artificiallychanged. And everybody may look similar if they are able to changetheir gene freely.
waste treatment and sewage disposal is becoming unmanageable 这句有逻辑错误，可以换成waste treatment and sewage disposal are becoming incredible challenges
感觉LZ句式比较单一，有几句可以变换一下
Furthermore, waste treatment and sewage disposal is becoming unmanageable, and it is possible to get some bacteria which could degrade them with genetic technology.
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Furthermore, while waste treatment and sewage disposal becoming incredible challenges, combatting these difficulties with genetic technology would be a possiblity. For instance, ...
后面还有一个it is even possible to... ， 句型重复了。
有些句子少做些调整给人的感觉就明显不同，
比如
On the other hand, genetic technology is a threaten to biodiversity.
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Genetic technology, on the other hand, is a threaten to biodiversity.
According to the above discussions,...
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Given the discussions above, ...