请了一个外教教口语，顺便给我看看作文，不过改动很少，最近的一篇竟然说很好，不用改。<br />
我很是表示怀疑，我确认我到不了perfect的水平，估计离reasonable也还有段距离，是不是她在敷衍我？<br />
我在这里贴出来，请大家帮忙指出我的错误，不怕拍砖，越狠越好，谢谢大家。<br />
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Homework: at least 250 words<br />
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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. <br />
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.<br />
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With the rapid development of the society, some people tend to change their job after working at the same position for a period of time, although others prefer to engage the similar issue in their lives. In my point of view, I prefer to live a same life without some changes.<br />
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Living unchanged lives can lead to some positive effects. First, long period of time on working the similar issue can give individuals a chance to become experts of certain areas, such as scientists, doctors and the like. If they could devote themselves entirely to their subjects with their whole lives, success could not be a luxury for them. Second, their families could be benefited from their working conditions, as they can provide their families with steady lives. Their family members do not need to move everywhere, if they can keep on doing the same job. Finally, it can strengthen their willpowers. Doing the same work may be boring and uninteresting; however, if individuals can successfully control their negative feelings, they can get strong minds.<br />
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Admittedly, changing jobs can obviously get some advantages for them. As everything has its special characters, with changing their status, they can experience different senses from kinds of careers. But they would loss their chances to be experts of certain areas. Furthermore, changing their lifestyles may be enjoyable sometimes. As a result, unemployment can possibly hit them, which could greatly affect their families’ living qualities.<br />
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In conclusion, I prefer to live an unchanged life, even though changes seem such funny and interesting.<br />
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按照kuthlaav同学的意见，改了几个错别字，其他暂时没有变化，留给大家拍砖。<br />
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你的文章如下，我的意见穿插在其中。纯讨论，本人没有参加过雅思，所以不用考虑我的评论：
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
With the rapid development of the society, some people tend to change their job after working at the same position for a period of time, although others prefer to engage the similar issue in their lives. In my point of view, I prefer to live a same life without some changes.
第一段的第一句话，本来需要介绍背景，但是rapid development和后面的东西一点关系都没有，有点牵强。
其次，避免redundant的现象，比如some people tend to change their job for another after a short period，再多有点点过。
再次，engage用法，一般是engage sb in sth，所以句子最好是others prefer to be engaged in issues of the same kind.
最后，冠词用法，i prefer to live the same life without any changes，或者i prefer to live without change.
Living unchanged lives can lead to some positive effects. First, long period of time on working the similar issue can give individuals a chance to become experts of certain areas, such as scientists, doctors and the like. If they could devote themselves entirely to their subjects with their whole lives, success could not be a luxury for them. Second, their families could be benefited from their working conditions, as they can provide their families with steady lives. Their family members do not need to move everywhere, if they can keep on doing the same job. Finally, it can strengthen their willpowers. Doing the same work may be boring and uninteresting; however, if individuals can successfully control their negative feelings, they can get strong minds.
redundant现象，unchanged life can produce positive results. 之前的living可以省略。
第二句，long time fixed focus tends to train people into expert of his field.
benefit前面不用加am/is/are。
Admittedly, changing jobs can obviously get some advantages for them. As everything has its special characters, with changing their status, they can experience different senses from kings of careers. But they would loss their chances to be experts of certain areas. Furthermore, changing there lifestyles may be enjoyable sometimes. As a result, unemployment can possibly meet to them, which could greatly affect their families’ living qualities.
这一段开始错别字有点多，我用红色标注出来。
In conclusion, I prefer to live an unchanged life, even though changes seem such funny and interesting.
such改成so。
HOMEWORK: Unemployment is one of the most serious problems facing developed nations today. What are the advantages and/or disadvantages of reducing the working week to thirty five hours?
In developed countries, they are suffering for lots of social problems, especially for high unemployment rates. To solve this issue, it is suggested that the authorities could ask employees work less one hour than before. In my view, it is a valuable solution to societies, but not always.
To employees, they could benefit from several aspects. First, these unemployed individuals could get chances to meet the request of employ, which could greatly enhance their families’ economy conditions. Second, it could give people more leisure time than before. Then they could stay with their families for more time and could take more sports activities to improve their physical heath. Added to this, long rest time can provide them with more energy to their work affairs, which can generally improve their production efficiencies. Finally, decreasing work time could improve the developments of domestic commerce. More people could be employed and more spare time could be offered, which is the motivation of consuming activities.
However, disadvantages should not be ignored. Less working time means employers should request more employees to do the same job than before. It is obvious that they will cost more to run a company or a factory. Consequently, they will be in stiffer international competitions because of high cost. If with reducing taxes, business owners may not suffer from it. Furthermore, considering the increasing cost, some employers may have trends to give their staff heavy workload instead of hiring additional employees. Obviously, it will harm employees’ benefits. Then, governments should pay attention to this trend and should take measures to deal with it.
In conclusion, decreasing work time to improve employment rates is reasonable to the society, even though there are some disadvantages that could be solved.
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作者: 咖啡因颗颗 时间: 2011-9-20 15:29
In developed countries, they are suffering for lots of social problems, especially for high unemployment rates.
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they 换成people？
suffering from
especially high unemployment
作者: 90后杀大狗 时间: 2011-9-20 22:38
To solve this issue, it is suggested that the authorities could ask employees work less one hour than before. In my view, it is a valuable solution to societies, but not always.
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this issue 换成 the issue？
one hour less than before.
作者: 88后宋希小 时间: 2011-9-21 04:27
我就不客气了……
HOMEWORK: Unemployment is one of the most serious problems facing developed nations today. What are the advantages and/or disadvantages of reducing the working week to thirty five hours?
In developed countries, they are suffering for lots of social problems, especially for high unemployment rates. To solve this issue, it is suggested that the authorities could ask employees work less one hour than before. In my view, it is a valuable solution to societies, but not always.
第一个they，作为代词，他指代谁，是countries还是people还是who？
suffer from是一个词组，suffer for不是。
especially for的for可以也必须去掉。
it is suggested that后面句子需要用should或者动词原形。
从40小时到35小时，我理解是每天减少一个小时，所以one hour per day，这个需要说清楚。
solution一般不用valuable来形容，可以用effective, effecient, useful等，而且societies前需要加the或者其他冠词。
To employees, they could benefit from several aspects. First, these unemployed individuals could get chances to meet the request of employ, which could greatly enhance their families’ economy conditions. Second, it could give people more leisure time than before. Then they could stay with their families for more time and could take more sports activities to improve their physical heath. Added to this, long rest time can provide them with more energy to their work affairs, which can generally improve their production efficiencies. Finally, decreasing work time could improve the developments of domestic commerce. More people could be employed and more spare time could be offered, which is the motivation of consuming activities.
To employees建议改成for employees，个人理解。还有，could的时态问题，口语没有关系，如果正文还是建议由于时态原因改成can，除非表示猜测等。
meet the request of employ最后一个词是否应该是the employers或者employment。
economy是动词，所以ecomonic。
it could give people more leisure time里面的it不要解释，所以建议改成被动句型，more leisure time could be given to people或者more leisure time is available.
developments，production efficiencies这些都是概念词，貌似应该都是不可数，所以用single form。
However, disadvantages should not be ignored. Less working time means employers should request more employees to do the same job than before. It is obvious that they will cost more to run a company or a factory. Consequently, they will be in stiffer international competitions because of high cost. If with reducing taxes, business owners may not suffer from it. Furthermore, considering the increasing cost, some employers may have trends to give their staff heavy workload instead of hiring additional employees. Obviously, it will harm employees’ benefits. Then, governments should pay attention to this trend and should take measures to deal with it.
means employers中间建议加一个that，这样才构成从句。
they will cost more有点问题，要么it will cost more，要么they will spend more。
they will be in siffer international……这句读不通，要么in a stiffer place/position in international，要么其他的。
if with这句，也有问题，可以修改成only with reduced taxes,
may not suffer from it建议改成may suffer less.
In conclusion, decreasing work time to improve employment rates is reasonable to the society, even though there are some disadvantages that could be solved.
With the rapid development of the society, some people tend to change their job after working at the same position for a period of time, although others prefer to engage the similar issue in their lives. In my point of view, I prefer to live a same life without some changes.
Living unchanged lives can lead to some positive effects. First, long period of time on working the similar issue can give individuals a chance to become experts of certain areas, such as scientists, doctors and the like. If they could devote themselves entirely to their subjects with their whole lives, success could not be a luxury for them. Second, their families could be benefited from their working conditions, as they can provide their families with steady lives. Their family members do not need to move everywhere, if they can keep on doing the same job. Finally, it can strengthen their willpowers. Doing the same work may be boring and uninteresting; however, if individuals can successfully control their negative feelings, they can get strong minds.
Admittedly, changing jobs can obviously get some advantages for them. As everything has its special characters, with changing their status, they can experience different senses from kinds of careers. But they would loss their chances to be experts of certain areas. Furthermore, changing their lifestyles may be enjoyable sometimes. As a result, unemployment can possibly hit them, which could greatly affect their families’ living qualities.
In conclusion, I prefer to live an unchanged life, even though changes seem such funny and interesting.