Multi-cultural societies in which there is a mixture of different ethnic cultures can bring more benefits than drawbacks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?<br />
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Multi-culture means exposing societies to different perspectives coming from different ethnic groups. Ethnic groups co-exist is the current status of not only western countries such as Canada, Australia and America, but also in the eastern side of the world, like India and China. <br />
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Multi-culture has positive effects on societies. To begin with, multi-culture enriches art formats. For example, America composed of many ethnic groups in the world, is rich in a wide variety of musical formats, Blues and Hip-Hop are famous ones actually created by African people. In China, individuals can enjoy different dances from 55 ethnic minorities. Besides, the combination of many cultures definitely facilitates the economic development. In Canada or Australia, immigrants working hard or taking jobs that local people dislike make those countries become more prosperous than before. Lastly, It is much more easier to make correct decisions according to diverse views of distinct ethnic groups than just from the sole view. Most solutions have been proved effective through extensive discussion about all viewpoints over and over again to make sure all groups express their opinions completely<br />
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However, there are obvious drawbacks about multi-culture. Specifically, diversity of cultures might lead to intense friction if policies are not established very well. It is not surprising that conflict is established in ethnic groups with so many different background, perspectives and approaches to life. If there are not appropriate measures or rules to protect equality, fights or wars inevitably happen and damage the unity of different ethnic groups or the harmony of societies<br />
To sum up, multi-culture has both pros and cons. In my opinion, the advantages are stronger than the disadvantages, different ethnic groups co-existing. The disadvantages should be thought of as a certain price that societies have to pay due to the characteristics of the world that we live in.
作者: htnr9856 时间: 2011-10-24 13:20
从基本面上说，问题不大，从几个方面分析。
task response：两个观点都讨论，而且都进行了展开。并且运用了论据来支持论点。所以这点得分不会少，估计7到8。
coherence and cohesion：进行了有效的分段，句子之间的连接也合理，signpost用的合理。估计也能拿到7分。
lexical resource：词汇量足够大了，在部分词性上面有错误，例如co-exist--->co-existence, format--->form,等。但不影响表述，估计也在7分左右。
grammatical：有一些语法错误，例如介词的误用，很多时候or应该是and。但是不影响阅读。所以我觉得也会得到7分。
综上所述，我觉得你可以拿7分。only that 有一个问题，就是语言组织有一些不自然，不符合外国人的使用习惯，虽然在语言上是正确的，但是就是有点不自然。例如：Multi-culture means exposing societies to different perspectives coming from different ethnic groups.这句话中coming可以省略。
再例如：Ethnic groups co-exist is the current status of not only western countries such as Canada, Australia and America, but also in the eastern side of the world, like India and China. 第二句的第一个词和第一句的最后一个词是一样的，如果是老外，肯定就用which了或者用代词they或者their。还有not only的位置个人觉得可以放在is后面，或者australia也不是western country，不知道对不对。还有，两个并列的句子，第一句用of，第二句用in，有点乱。
个人感觉，仅仅是个人感觉。不知道是否会影响得分。
今天写了一篇
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The increasing demand for fresh water has become a global problem. What are the causes of this phenomenon and what are the measures that should be taken to deal with it?
These days, a number of countries increasingly lack fresh water, especially in countries with a large amount of population, such as India and China. In China, many cities can not provide water for 24*7 hours, and even give the quota for everyone.
There are a variety of reasons that contribute to this issue. To start with, the quick population expansion leads to more needs of water consumption even though everyone keeps the same amount of water usage. Now China has more than 1.3 billion people, therefore, it is not surprise that how much water all of them require. Furthermore, the growing economic development makes this shortage more serious. The increasing number of plants is built everywhere which definitely consume more water to generate products. For example, the firm producing clothes need water to clean up before selling them. In addition, lots of plants emit polluted water to damage water sources and decrease the usable water to some extent. This tread is obvious in industrialized areas, such as in Guangzhou and Jiangsu provinces.
In order to make any improvements regarding the issue of water scarcity, a series of steps should be adopted. The most important one is to encourage people take all kinds of methods to reduce the consumption of water or promote any efficient water use. For example, water can be reserved to wash toilets after people water fruits and vegetables. If everyone reduce the usage of water a little bit, the number of water saved will be surprising for the whole year and everyone. Besides, move plants and residents to other places to avoid the further pollution to sources of water. In this way, safe water can be offered to people and reduce the shortage of fresh water.
To sum up, to solve the critical issue of water shortage, everyone should make his or her contribution to it. At the same time, the government should take effective measures to protect available water. Otherwise, water scarcity will significantly impact everyone’s life.
作者: 伯传贺 时间: 2011-10-25 15:08
the quick population expansion leads to more needs of water consumption even though everyone keeps the same amount of water usage, whereas the speed of discovering and exploiting new sources of fresh water is much slower which results in the shortage;
可以提污染：
Besides, enviromental pullution caused by human activities actually worsen the situation, water pullution is a good case in point. Millions tons of polluted water are discarged into fresh lakes tremendously destroying and decreasing the precious fresh water source people rely on.
作者: coqdflv034 时间: 2011-10-26 00:54
你写的这几句话怎么读起来这么舒服呢， 差距呀
作者: sd383565 时间: 2011-10-26 05:35
the quick population expansion leads to more needs of water consumption even though everyone keeps the same amount of water usage, whereas the speed of discovering and exploiting new sources of fresh water is much slower which results in the shortage;
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The consistent increase in population leads to soaring demand of water resource. And thus water shortage is inevitable when total need outgrows the exploitation.
不过还是觉得没有ayanoo的那个好。一个根本原因，你说的是你的opinion，或者你的fact and example不够形象。而ayanoo的那个一看就知道在举例。
所以，语言不一定要停留在概括归纳的层次，除非是文章的结尾，那就很好了。
此外，改改ayanoo的句子，看看效果：
Besides, enviromental pullution caused by human activities actually worsen the situation, AND water pullution is a good case in point. Millions tons of polluted water discarged into fresh lakes ARE tremendously destroying and decreasing the precious fresh water source people rely on.
嘿嘿，加了一个and，把一个are的位置条换了一下，算是耍了一个小聪明吧。
作者: coqdflv034 时间: 2011-10-26 09:18
一个根本原因，你说的是你的opinion，或者你的fact and example不够形象。而ayanoo的那个一看就知道在举例。
所以，语言不一定要停留在概括归纳的层次，
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顶这句话， 很犀利， 一语中的。
The multicultural society comprises different ethnic groups with diverse cultural perspectives and backgrounds. Ethnic groups co-exist is the current status not only in western countries such as Canada, Australia and America, but also in the eastern side of the world, like India and China.
作者: 34lgk2evm4e 时间: 2011-10-27 16:23
我只能这样理解你的开头，介绍背景信息。但是文章开头，提供了背景信息再点题就可以了。要举例是好习惯，但是你举例提出了很多国家，跟文章没有任何关系。
记得一点，你的focus是multiculture的 advantages and disadvantages，其他无关的东西能不写就不写，因为不仅不能说明任何问题，反而有跑题的嫌疑。
The multi-cultural society comprises different ethnic groups with diverse cultural perspectives and backgrounds. Some people argue that Multi-culture has a fundamentally beneficial influence on our lives, while many others contend that it has a detrimental effect.
作者: coqdflv034 时间: 2011-10-28 00:19
改成这样后，我觉得开头和结尾都是套话， 没有什么有用的信息了， 不知道理解得对不对
作者: coqdflv034 时间: 2011-10-28 11:40
写了篇小作文
You rented a car from car Rental Company. The air conditioner has stopped working. You phoned the company a week ago but it has still not been repaired.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- introduce yourself
- explain the situation
- say what action you would like to company to take.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to complain about the air conditioner of my car, which I took on rent from your company on October, 10, 2011.
I rented one Ford car from your company located in the airport. And one of staff members suggested me to pickup this car since it was almost brand new and should work well.
Unfortunately, after just one day, the air conditioner did not perform well since it could not provide cool wind. It was terrible for us in current hot summer days without cooling system in the car. When I observed it, I contacted the customer center immediately and they promised me they would send one technician to get it repaired within 2 working days. Almost one week has passed since I called, but still it is not being repaired.
To resolve the problem, I suggest you exchange this for another car before the day after tomorrow. Enclosed are copies of my records including receipts and the transaction number. If you need to contact me, you can reach me at 013611320435
Best Regards
Cindy
作者: 279j8jq3 时间: 2011-10-28 13:45
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- introduce yourself
- explain the situation
- say what action you would like to company to take.
自己计算下分配给这三个task的字数分别是多少？
写信的主要目的是哪一部分？
作者: coqdflv034 时间: 2011-10-29 01:38
第三部分至少应该和第二部分差不多。 不能少于第二部分
作者: Stodedueque 时间: 2011-10-29 06:35
Hello Cindy,
给我写的话我会在第一段就告诉考官我完全同意题目中的opinion.
小作文：
Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Cindy Zhang and my customer reference number is 1234567. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction about the unfixed air conditioner of a Ford Focus I rented on 10/October/2011.介绍自己
The car was initially collected in fully working order. However, the air conditioner stopped functioning the next day after collection. As an air conditioner is much needed during the hot summer, I immediately reported the defect to your call centre. A customer representitive named Vincent Zhong promised me over the phone that a technician will be sent to carry out the repair within 2 working days. However, it has been 7 days since the incident was reported and I have not been approached by any of your technicians.说明情况，请用想象力写够字数，并且情节要要合情合理
In order to resolve the problem as soon as possible, I urge you to exchange my car within 2 days or I will have further escalate this matter to the Australian Consumer Protection Group. Enclosed are copies of my records including receipts and the transaction number. If you need to contact me, you can reach me at 01361111111
提出建议
You have a full-time job and are also doing a part-time evening course.
You now find that you cannot continue the course.
Write a letter to the course tutor. In your letter
describe the situation
Explain why you cannot continue at this time
Say what action you would like to take
Dear David,
I am writing to let you know that I can not attend the “Marketing strategies” course every Tuesday and Thursday evenings until the end of this month. I am so sorry about this since I love this course so much.
The cause why I can not continue the classes is I am so busy with my job on daytime. One of our customers requested that we should deliver the new functionality by 27th of this month. So all of engineers have to work overtime in order to meet this sudden change. As a lead testing engineer, I have more assignments. I can not go to the school at night during this period.
To resolve the issue, could you please send me training materials? I can try to learn them after I complete work assignments. If possible, can you tell me your phone number in case I have questions about the course. And my email is [email protected].
Best Regards
Cindy
Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
These days, humankind produces increasingly large amount of garbage has become a serious problem to solve. It is beneficial for society and the environment to analyze causes and give valuable solutions.
A wide variety of reasons contribute to the amount of rubbish generated by people. The most important one is the people tend to buy more products than they actually require. When people go to supermarkets or department stores, they usually buy more kinds of vegetables and fruits just because they are on sale or look gorgeous. Unfortunately, they can not consume all of these in a short time before food gets rotten. As a result, they have drop off them. Besides, producers often sell goods with a large amount as a unit is worsening this situation. Consumers have to pick up the large package although they need a small size. In addition, individuals have more requirements of good than in the past since they are much richer. If they do not like the existed TVs or fridges, they will discard them without hesitation and buy fancy innovations.
Based on the analysis above, governments have to take a series of steps to combat this trend. Firstly, governments should encourage consumers cultivate the appropriate habits of buying: People buy products that they really need. Consumers even can get refunding if they use the same product than expected. Secondly, governments should set the tax for collecting rubbish. When residents produce more rubbish than the quota, they are forced to pay the extra money to cover them. Last but not the least, the government should make measures to let producers offer small size of products. In this way, consumers have more choices.
To sum up, to solve the burden of more and more rubbish generated by people, governments should guide people consume what they really need. At the same time, producers should give different sizes of goods to satisfy customers’ needs.