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作者: 欧西关青海    时间: 2011-12-24 03:05
标题: 马上考试咯,作文求批改


<strong>Modern buildings change the appearance of towns and cities. In order to protect the cultural identity, the government should ensure that all the new buildings are built in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?</strong><br />
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Today, the appearance of buildings has been greatly influenced as the increasing chance of international cultural communication. Some people argue that this trend will do harm to the local culture, therefore, houses should be regulated and be presented in the traditional way. Overall, the disadvantages this suggestion brings overweigh its advantages.<br />
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Admittedly, constructing all buildings in traditional styles, to some extent, may contribute to the local cultural preservation. The first reason is that the cities with a traditional appearance can clearly present the local culture to the visitors. In these cities, the visitors would naturally do as the locals showing the respect to the local customs. Such an impressive experience may have an unconsciously influence in their minds, which undoubtedly is an effective way of spreading the local culture. Another reason is that the traditional appearance of towns and cities will raise the sense of belonging for the local residents. Accordingly, it enables the local people—the inheritors of local customs—to introduce their culture to other people with great motivation.<br />
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On the other hand, the mandatory regulation of buildings’ appearance, of course, brings some adverse effects to the local society as well. One reason is that, to meet the requirements, the modern buildings have to sacrifice some functions needed in the people’s daily life. Some insulation materials, for example, cannot be used in the traditional exterior construction. It would totally run counter to the original purposes of building construction. Furthermore, personalized style of buildings is the symbol of open society. If all the houses were built in the local style, the cities would hardly be recognized by other people with different backgrounds and eventually restrict these regions’ development.<br />
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To sum up, regulating the appearance of buildings does help to preserve the local culture. However, we cannot achieve it by sacrificing the buildings’ functions and the development of the local society. <br />
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马上就要考试了,紧张<span></span>




作者: 光明的瞎子    时间: 2011-12-24 14:45


反正如果让我写这个题目我肯定不会从这个角度去写,我觉得cultural identity应该evlove with the development of society, by combining different cultural identity, it will finally end up with a newly created unique cultural identity.
lz啥时候考,我1月7号考试,到现在还没联系过作文



作者: lokylethy    时间: 2011-12-24 18:12


btw,我怎么觉得你让不断比表明观点的段还长啊?这样有点喧宾夺主的感觉吧



作者: 欧西关青海    时间: 2011-12-24 19:46


你的观点我考虑过,但是感觉太升华了,写起来hold 不住,就写了点实实在在浅显的观点
让步段确实写太多了,写完了也没想怎么改,下次得注意这个问题
我也是1月7号考,呵呵,一起加油



作者: 小小绿草    时间: 2011-12-25 07:04


个人的思路如下,请高人指点.

p1.引提,disagreen-40-50 words
p2. 论点1, 全球化趋势下,每种文化都会相互融合, 相互学习发展, 城市也一样,也应当吸收其他文化优点, 建设一些其他文化或更现代的建筑,
而不是为了保护你的传统而抵制全球发展趋势, 这样你的文化既不会保护好,也不会更好的发展,只会衰落. 80-90words
p3, 论点2, 建筑的实际需求不同, 应适应当前社会的发展,对介绍本民族文化相关的建筑可以建传统风格,
但对于表现当前科技相关的建筑可以建成更现代更能体现当前科技水平的现代风格.&nbsp;&nbsp;这样既能保护文化特征又能促进社会发展.80-90words
p4. 总结一下你的观点,并强调你的结论. 40-50words



p1, 引题 -agree
p2 论点1,社会的发展需要多元化,而在全球化发展的背景下,很多民族文化正在衰落或消失, 而城市建筑正式一个民族特征的重要表现,
为了阻止文化的入侵和, 政府应该让新建筑都建成传统风格 来保护本民族的特征,&nbsp;&nbsp;和民族文化.
p3, 论点2, 近200年的现代化发展的的影响远远超出了以前几千的发展, 很多城市具有传统风格的建筑正在消失,城市居民也感到他们的思维方式,生活方式
也在发生变化, 政府应当意识到这样的问题的严重性,及早行动保护自己的民族文化,而建设传统风格的建筑正是一种非常有效的方法.
p4, 总结观点,



作者: 1187017584    时间: 2011-12-25 16:02


雅思考官还是那么的酸气十足。一般往文化上拐的作文题目对于理科生肯定是考验,还是尽量挨着文化这个词凑论据比较稳妥。小胖这么说,不知道楼主和朋友们能否理解。



作者: 欧西关青海    时间: 2011-12-25 21:11


不太理解啊,请小胖明示



作者: 人猿泰山44    时间: 2011-12-26 04:01


咱们这个论坛上,学理工的考友永远占绝大多数。但其实雅思是一个纯的语言类的、文科的考试。它的命题思路就跟国内的语文卷子差不多,深入剖析啦,内涵外延啦,有深度又生动啦,注重思想性前瞻性啦。。。这么解释也很绕,换句话说,出题的人都是至少文学专业硕士出身的主儿,天下文人一般酸,他们想看到的是有思想的东西,这是所有学文的人的共性,犯酸。这个指名道姓讲文化的题目摆在这,回帖就跟着文化走,最能讨好考官。。。
最近已经被装修折磨疯了,总结的说,还是首先考虑切题,然后才是语法什么的。



作者: 9zynga8xe    时间: 2011-12-26 15:08


建议每段的论点句弄紧凑些,反正我现在读起来有大喘气的感觉,可把插入语删掉。不管agree 还是disagree,最好说起来直接点。



作者: 佐佐木广原    时间: 2011-12-26 18:36


建议每段的论点句弄紧凑些,反正我现在读起来有大喘气的感觉,可把插入语删掉。不管agree 还是disagree,最好说起来直接点。



作者: 股票研究所12    时间: 2011-12-26 20:44


写的够好了。 肯定拿7分







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