Some people go to supermarkets for shopping rather than small or loacal shops. Why is it ? Is it a positive or negtive development ?请无情滴批改吧~~
With the improvement of the standard of people’s lives, enormous changes have happened in many aspects of people’s lifestyle, especially in the selection of shopping place. Currently, people tend to go to supermarkets, rather than local or small shops, for shopping. It is widely accepted that this is a positive trend caused by lot of reasons.
Actually, supermarkets have a lot of uncomparalled advantages, compared with small groceries. To begin with, it is pretty convenient to buy all the goods people need. Unlike local or small shops which have limited space to demonstrate a certain number of goods, supermarkets meet almost all the needs of people, including foods, clothes, cosmetics, and so on. It is unncessary fo people to walk aroud other shops. In addition, the price in supermarkets is relatively lower than in small shops. If people have a VIP member card of supermarkets, people can enjoy the discounts of many goods, which is very economical for most families. Small shops, however, are really hard to do that. Further, supermarkets have better reputation and after-sale services. Supermarkets are more likely to offer free delivery and warranty services if the sum of goods is big enough, which is one of the trickies used by supermarkets to attract more consumers.
Undoubtedly, this phenomenon is a positive development. Firstly, it greatly saves a vast amount of time. As the pace of life is accerlating, most people have to work overtime and have no sufficient time for shopping. It is the abundance of goods in supermarkets that makes it positive. Additionly, shopping in supermarkets saves much money for people, which makes life better. People living in big cities have to pay money on many aspects, such as daily expense, medical care and children’s education. Most importantly, friendly shopping environment is more useful to release pressure from work. Current supermarkets are always equipmented with various facilities, for example, restaurants, games, fitness club, etc. which are better places for people relaxing.
Overall, it is because shopping in supermarkets is more convenient, ecomonmical and comfortable, that people would like to go there to purchase what they want. It is indeed a positive advancement than before.
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以下是淘宝改作文给的建议，感觉还不如老麦和asxdcfv，哼哼 其他就修改了一些小语法错误
For this topic, or this kind of topics, I recommend to clarify two question separately in the below two paragraphs, and make sure you have make them clearly different. As we can see, the second opinion actually provides one more cause of this phenomenon, which is not organized enough.
Other language problems have been modified by me, and wish you can pay more attention to the organization.
第二段第一句话这么说：
there are many reasons to explain the increasing popularity of shopping in supermarkets in terms of conevient transport, lower price and wider selection of products. (主题句）。
接下来，就是通过对在conevient transport, lower price 和 wider selection of products这几个方面，超市购物比传统购物优越的地方，从而解释了为什么会有人选择去超市购物。
一家之言，仅供参考，祝楼主好运！
作者: zwbvj769 时间: 2012-3-14 12:24
我来补充下，楼上评分理由正确，只是LZ把题目写错了。我考了，题目是WHAT IS YOUR OPINION? 不是WHY IT IS?所以有误会。楼上给的方法让我学习了不同题目的作文思想。
以下是淘宝改作文给的建议，感觉还不如老麦和asxdcfv，哼哼 其他就修改了一些小语法错误
For this topic, or this kind of topics, I recommend to clarify two question separately in the below two paragraphs, and make sure you have make them clearly different. As we can see, the second opinion actually provides one more cause of this phenomenon, which is not organized enough.
Other language problems have been modified by me, and wish you can pay more attention to the organization.
感谢点评：）
这个文章题目来自simon的网站，对这个题目simon的建议是——
Here are some ideas:
1.Introduce the topic by paraphrasing the statement, then give a clear opinion about whether there are more advantages or disadvantages.
2.Advantages - e.g. costs are lower in regional areas; there is more space; provide jobs to boost deprived areas; avoid further overcrowding in cities.
3.Disadvantages - e.g. greater availability of skilled workers in big cities; better transport and infrastructure; companies based in regional areas are further from their clients, providers and other contacts.
4.Conclude by summarising your opinion in a different way.