Little has been done to prevent animals and plants from dying out, although people have been aware of this problem for a long time. Why have people done so little about it? How can we solve this problem? <br />
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今天练了三篇，没一篇能在45分钟能写完的，都花的比较久，这篇写了一半，感觉理由段写得太大了都不好细化论据，憋了好久才顺清思路继续写下去，哎，求点评，拜谢。<br />
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More and more wildlife are going extinction and the trend doesn't revert due to little efforts human have taken. Obviously, human being could not survive solely and live a decent life if animals and plants keep going disappear from the earth. Hence, it is imperative to address the causes of this ridiculous phenomenon and find some feasible solutions.<br />
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The most significant reason is that people pursue social development regardless of environment preservation. In order to promote the growth of local economy, many governments especially the developing countries lay too much emphasis on economic development and pay little attention on the environment protection, which results environmental deterioration and eventually leads the extinction of animals and plants. Specifically, the increasing pollution produced by manufacturing industry erodes the living place of animals and imposes a destructive impact on their habitats. Also, the over-exploration of natural resources such as deforestation and tourism poses a threat to the survival of wild lives. With little constraints on such means of development, the survival space for wildlife is narrowing. Consequently, animals and plants are dying out. As to individual level, selfishness, greed and interests drive people away from a eco-friendly life style. The one profits from ivory trade would keep on hunting elephant even there is a law prohibiting such behavior.<br />
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To combat the problem, it requires a long term efforts of both governments and individuals. Actually, the government should play a more active role in protecting ecosystem. A delight government should devise a plan of sustainable development, take some initiatives to curb the pollution such as establishing some stringent regulations to punish the pollution producer and strike a wise balance between social development and environment protecting. Also, government have an obligation to educate the civilians to be friendly to nature, by some advertisements or some campaigns. In conclusion, only governments and individuals work together can the severe issue be solved.
作者: breryhorFlevy 时间: 2012-4-15 05:39
有些句子有点罗嗦。
词汇量很大，牛。
作者: runrk0706e 时间: 2012-4-15 12:48
很多词我都不认识，仰慕一下楼主的文采
作者: fbdhehicr 时间: 2012-4-15 14:06
大致看了一下，大体思路 还可以。
有些用语的细节可以再improve一下，
下面是我的 一些comments，FYI。
还有一些地方我觉得不是那么native，但是我也不知道怎么样修改才native
共同进步
More and more wildlife are(is) going extinction(it is a noun) and the trend doesn't revert due to little efforts human have taken(effort has been taken). Obviously, human being could not survive solely and live a decent life if animals and plants keep going disappearit's a verb) from the earth. Hence, it is imperative to address the causes(impoper meaning, use issue or matter) of this ridiculous (unsiutalbe meaning.use bad or negative)phenomenon and find some feasible solutions.
The most significant reason is that people pursue social development regardless of environment preservation( I prefer protection). In order to promote the growth of local economy, many governments especially the developing countries lay too much emphasis on economic development and pay little attention on the environment protection, which results in environmental deterioration and eventually leads to the extinction of animals and plants. Specifically, the increasing ( the increasingly worsening )pollution produced(caused) by manufacturing industry erodes (manufactories ruined or destoryed) the living place of animals and imposes a destructive impact on their habitats. Also, the over-exploration of natural resources such as deforestation and tourism poses a threat to the survival of wild lives. With little constraints on such means of development, the survival space for wildlife is narrowing. Consequently, animals and plants are dying out. As to individual level,(what does it mean) selfishness, greed and interests drive people away from a eco-friendly life style. The one profits from ivory trade would keep on hunting elephant even there is a law prohibiting such behavior.(profits would keep on though......? I didn't get it)
To combat the problem, it requires a long term efforts of both governments and individuals. Actually, the government should play a more active role in protecting ecosystem. A delight(noun, use wise or farseeing) government should devise a plan of sustainable development, take some initiatives to curb the pollution such as establishing some stringent regulations to punish the pollution producer and strike a wise balance between social development and environment protecting. Also, government have an obligation to educate the civilians to be friendly to nature, by some advertisements or some campaigns. In conclusion, only governments and individuals work together can the severe issue be solved.
作者: hussau98tq 时间: 2012-4-15 19:41
Thanks a lot for your comment.
About the reason of "individual level" I wrote, actually I want to talk about that some wild species are dying out due to someone's selfishness and greed. I rewrite it as below:
Moreover, illegal hunting and exploitation is another critical reason that puts many wild creatures on the list of endanger species. Due to selfishness and greed, some people illegally catch and hunt wildlife such as elephants and whales for high interests even there are laws prohibiting these behaviors.
作者: caqweyroypf 时间: 2012-4-16 02:09
Moreover, illegal hunting and exploitation is another critical reason that puts many wild creatures on the list of endanger species. Due to selfishness and greed, some people illegally catch and hunt wildlife such as elephants and whales for high interests even there are laws prohibiting these behaviors.
恕我直言，感觉有点为了写长句，而重复表达某一意思。 如已经是ilegally 又说laws prohibiting .....
之前你的整个文章也有点类似 的问题。