上次考的6.5，目标是7.多多批评指正啊。字数有点多 327了。<br />
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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.<br />
Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?<br />
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Some people believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks to live in a house than living in an apartment, while I tend to have the belief that there are both advantages and disadvantages in either way of living no matter it is a house or an apartment.<br />
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On the one hand, people who live in a house have the opportunity to enjoy much richer family lives than those in an apartment. A variety of outdoor activities, for example barbecues, can be held at home for house habitants, which is an impossible luxury for people living in an apartment. Since most houses have a distance with neighbours, this enables people to organize some special events or parties without disturbing neighbours. For example, one of my friends once invited me to a family concert at her house, and she didn’t need to worry that the noise would annoy neighbours because it was all corn field nearby her home. Moreover, most houses are equipped with gardens, thus providing a chance for the family to do some gardening work together which can contribute to build a good family atmosphere and connect the family members more closely.<br />
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However, there are also some good points about living in an apartment than in a house. Apartment is rather convenient due to the fact that its location is usually closer to downtown than house so that people don’t need to travel a long distance to go to work. Furthermore, apartment is comparatively easier to clean because it is often smaller and only the indoor part needs to be cleansed. Living in an apartment also gives people a sense of belonging and safety because there are usually safeguards at the gate and people live close to the neighbours, and this applies especially to single people or DINK families.<br />
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In conclusion, I believe that a house is more suitable for a bigger family especially family with children while an apartment is more appropriate to smaller household.
Some people believe that there are more benefits than drawbacks to live in a house than living in an apartment, 这句很奇怪，为什么会有两个than的结构呢，第二个than 是想表达 ‘比’的意思吗？
while I tend to have the belief that there are both advantages and disadvantages in either way of living no matter it is a house or an apartment. 这里紧接着前半句的believe又出现了同根词belief, 而且又一次出现了 there are 的句型，而且 either way of living 和 no matter XXXXX 有意义重复的嫌疑。
既然你喜欢simon的简约风格，就要舍得砍掉一些句子成分，可以考虑改成如下：
Some people claim that living in a house compared with in an apartment would bring up more benefits, while I tend to believe that either residence arrangement has its own pro's and con's.
不过这样走简约风的话，字数上好像太寒酸了。
作者: 真特别 时间: 2012-4-20 14:44
while I tend to have the belief that there are both advantages and disadvantages in either way of living no matter it is a house or an apartment.
这句话就感觉乖乖的，感觉是为了凑字数才写这么长。。。while I tend to ..
Some people claim there are more benefits than drawbacks to live in a house compared with in an apartment, while I believe that there are both advantages and disadvantages in either way of inhabiting.
On the one hand, house owners have the opportunity to enjoy much richer family lives than those in an apartment. A variety of outdoor activities, for example barbecues, can be held at home for house habitants, which is an impossible luxury for apartment owners. Houses are usually equipped with gardens, thus providing the opportunity for the family to do some gardening work together which can contribute to enhance the family ties. Moreover, since most houses have a distance with neighbours’, this enables people to organize some special events or parties without disturbing others. For instance, one of my friends once invited me to a family concert at her house, and she didn’t need to worry about the noise that could annoy her neighbours.
However, there are also some good points about living in an apartment. Apartment is rather convenient due to the fact that its location is usually closer to downtown so that people don’t need to waste time on travelling to work. Furthermore, apartment is comparatively easier to clean because it is often smaller and only the indoor parts need to be attended. Staying in an apartment also gives people a sense of belonging and safety because there are usually safeguards at the gate and people live close to the neighbours, and this applies especially to single people or DINK families.
In conclusion, I think it depends whether a house or an apartment is more suitable for living and different people have different preferences.