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标题: 第三篇作文,写的很头大,感觉无从下口,求批改 [打印本页]

作者: o5v1gljr0    时间: 2012-4-26 18:06
标题: 第三篇作文,写的很头大,感觉无从下口,求批改


]<strong>Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach young person how to be a good parent.<br />
Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Descript the skills a person needs to be a good parents.</strong><br />
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Today, almost every young person has the chance to learn in school, and more and more people received a good education in schools than ever before. Some people suggest that schools should teach every young person how to be a good parent. I tend to believe that there is no need for schools to do that.<br />
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To be a good parent, a person should have the knowledge and skills about how to take care the baby or the child first. Usually, people learn how to take care of a baby or a child by practicing. For these kinds of skills, even if schools can teach the related knowledge, it is still very hard for a young person to acquire the knowledge without having a baby or a child. <br />
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And secondly, in the modern world, lots of people get married at the age which is about 27 to 30. There are about 3 to 5 years after they graduated from university and start the adult life. After he or she got married, an individual will build his or her own thoughts about what is responsibility, and how he or she can be responsible for the family. And these mind-sets are very important for a person to be a good parent. Without the experience of working and marriage, it is impossible for a person to acquire these kinds of knowledge.<br />
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All in all, I believe that schools are the place for young persons to acquire the knowledge about science and technologies. The young person who is still learning in school should put his or her eyes on the traditional courses.<br />
个人感觉这个话题完全是无从下口,完全不知道应该从哪个方面写。有没有大大能分析下入手点?<br />
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作者: cholleync    时间: 2012-4-26 23:58


And secondly, in the modern world, lots of people get married at the age which is about 27 to 30.
And secondly, in the modern world, lots of people get married around 27 or 30.


Do you agree or disagree with this opinion
这个是要议论的,要discuss, 这个文章就是要report+discuss
你好像没有discuss的部分







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