1. Children boarding
Nowadays sending children to boarding school is becoming increasingly popular. What is the reason? Do you think it is a positive development?
Being limited time and energy , many parents send their children to schools which offer accommodation service , with the intention to reduce their pressure coming from caring and encourage them to live more independently. Before evaluating the trend, I intend to discuss the causes for that. (47)
In current society, with two working parents, many family have no enough spare time and energy left to be with their sons and daughters. For many workers, they have to work from the morning to the evening to support the family. When they come home from offices, they have no more than four hours which can be spent before saving enough energy for tomorrow. If they have to take care their children, such as cooking and checking houseworks for them, then they probably have to arrange time effectively, which imposing a continued pressure on them, is a challenge for the tired parents, after getting rid of the intense office work. (110)
Another reason, which is possibly most important, why the father and mother prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them, is that they appreciate the living lives in schools with their peers. If boys or girls take a boarding life, then they have to and are able to spend more time, and may be enjoy themselves with their classmates. Living with the same age and background, which cannot be archived when living with their parents, the children can develop a more independent and social character. (88)
In conclusion, I believe that taking a boarding life would not only benefit the parents as it lessens the burden for parents, but also the children with such life playing a positive role in developing their characters. (37)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-29 12:28
Traffic jam is serious problem of big cities. Government decides to build wider roads in order to solve the problem. Do you agree or disagree? Give the reasons.
What the toughest disturbance that city governors are facing, should be the traffic congestion. While some people claim it can be solved through building roads with wider width, from my point of view, I do not agree with the argument simply as others. (43)
Everyday, including weekends and holidays, our roads are totally taken up by the cars, which carry people from one place to another place. Broadening the roads and streets seems to be an effective way to reduce the rush situation, because it can offer more spaces to cars to run on. But what should be pointed out is that the underlying problem is that it is cars but not roads that cause the jam, which means that widening is just a temporary solution, but not a permanent and feasible one. (89)
Being widening the roads does not settle the problem, there should be some real reasons that should be found to be responsible for it. A situation that should be acknowledged is that no matter how wide the roads will be, there will be an enough number of cars filling them, which means it is too much cars but not no sufficient space that holds the responsibility for traffic. Another reason that can really lessen the jam is the traffic rules, such as allowing some cars to be in some certain roads during assigned time, because they can control the number of running car effectively. Finally, the most important but being ignored greatly factor is the creature behind the wheels. If drivers keeping an order and having enough moderate temper and patience, then the flow would be smooth and there would be less jam even the flow speed is slow, because it is disorder that dedicates more to the traffic blocking than the slow car speed. (165)
In conclusion, after finding out the real causes for traffic congestion, I do not believe that the it would work to broaden the roads. Actually, more other effective methods can be adopted to settle the jam. (36)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-29 15:06
3. Someone claim that public transport should be free of charge, others disagree. Discuss and give your opinion.
To citizen, it has been a long history about the discussion to be for or against the charging of public transportation, and there are almost the same amount of supportive evidence that uphold their arguments respectively. (36)
Those people, who hold the support position, probably think it about according to the following reasons. For modern people, the expenditure that is costed on travelling takes up a large proportion of daily pay, especially for the poor. So, if the government can pay it for her people, then people's standard of life will be improved accordingly as they can allocate more income to other aspects of life, such as being trained and being educated. The damage to the environment, coming from car exhaust, also can be greatly reduce, because, among all sorts of vehicles, the private car contribute largely to the pollution. If the authorities take no charge for transporting service, then there will be more traveller taking these offering rather using their own cars, which will greatly relieve the pollution caused by the vehicles. (136)
Other residents, however, have an opposite attitude. They claims that if no charge will be carried out, then it will bring about some disadvantages. One of them is that, for governments, the cost of maintaining this service is a heavy burden, which cannot be born giving the consideration of taking others public services, such as paying for civil servants. The side effect of cancelling that charge, also, will lead to a domino effect, which will result in others appealing, such as calling removing the payment for hospital service. Finally, an undermining result will appear - that is, the more people taking buses and trains, the less automobile will be sold, then the smaller the related industries will be, as a result, the less job opportunities will be created. (128)
In conclusion, I advocate that free charge for public transporting should not be encouraged, because it contribute more drawbacks to the societies and the residents. (25)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-29 17:07
4. Children want to watch the same TV programmes and play the same computer games as theirs friends do. Should parents allow their to do this.
Nowadays, there is a trend vexing the parents - that is many boys and girls prefer to turning to the same TV channels and enjoy the same electronic games as what peers are doing. Whether such action should be encouraged or not is a problem that their guardian must face and consider profoundly. (53)
Before making up their minds, parents should learn what the advantages and disadvantages are. (14)
The drawbacks coming from that behaviour can be concluded into a package including some terrible reasons. One of them, which is often disturbing the fathers and the mothers, is that it would result in the homogeneity. This result is not what parents want to face, because it would develop a child into a person without individualisation and reduce the sense of raising achievement for parents. Another reason is that, in many cases, many TV programmes and computer games are not free, if children require the same products as their peers, then some parents would not be able to afford some of them, which would cause dissatisfaction from children. (108)
The benefits, however, should be analysed and understood, in order to help the parents make decision. The first one would be considered is that, if the youngster have the same pattern of leisure, then they would not have the feeling that they are isolated by friends, which would cause them to be more social, because they would have the same topics when they need to spend time together. Playing a same game, such as online role-playing game, also can contribute to develop a teamwork spirit and interpersonal skills for the adolescent because of the requirement to cooperate and communicate effectively and efficiently to win the game. (106)
In conclusion, the youth should not be encouraged to have the same TV channels and computer games in some cases, but most time they should be allowed to enjoy what their peers enjoy. (33)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-30 02:44
5. Some people believe individuals are more important in taking care of environment, others thinks governments should be major responsible to it. Discuss and give you opinion.
It is widely acceptable that both governments and individuals should be involved in the environment protection, but the debate of who is more crucial in this campaign is still in discussion around the world. (34)
Some people argue that citizens have more important roles in protecting our surroundings according to some supportive reasons. The one of them, which they emphasize, is the fact that it is the individuals who carry out the final action that can be taken into the practising, no matter how action is formed, which means humans is the actual and final entity. Also, in some cases, such as demonstrations again industrial pollution, it would be much more convenient and practicable for us to show up than our governments, because these cases relate to many stakeholders which cannot be mediated by governments(even the governments are in the list) and they may probably only be protested by individuals. (115)
Others, however, hold an opposite position that, in this campaign, the government can exert more important influence on and contribute to it more effectively. They believe the fact that, being a governing organization, the government has the power to make, such as restricting water polluting and animals killing or forcing people and organization to obey the laws, regulations and rules which can be employed to respect the environment. Also, they argue that, in a global village where the air is full with international cooperation, the rule maker can call for world-wide conferences that can make effective decisions for the good of environment, which cannot be done by individuals. (108)
In conclusion, it seems that there is no single party that is more important than the other, therefore, I am in the place that which is more important, in this project, is really depends. (34)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-30 13:02
6. People earn more money than before, so they tend to buy more things, do you think it is a positive or negative. What's your opinion
Undoubtedly, our moneybags are more full theses days and we are more generous to purchase products and services than we were in the past. From my point of view, I would be in the position that the disadvantages of this tendency outweigh its advantages. (44)
Having been pointed out by many people including experts, the reason for my arguments is that, being too keen on consumption, the society has to face many pessimistic facts that she would not to. The first one is the more money we spend, the less money we have. Of course, the life is consisted of buying something and selling something else, so if the pocket is empty, then it would be likely that it will be full again, but the serious reality is that spending is probably easier than earning, for most of us. Not slowing such behaviours, we would welcome the situation at last that we are not able to afford anything any more or be in heavy debt. (120)
Another point, which is learned from the developing pattern of economy is that, the economy is based on the saving and the investment and enhancing consuming means that cutting down the saving and investment is need. As a result, economy slowing will reduce the job opportunities, which impacts us eventually. (50)
Finally, the stronger purchasing ability the society has, the more commodities will be produced. Facing the unending and expanding demand, the producer will be more likely to produce fake or low-quality goods to cater for the requirement. (37)
In conclusion, from the benefits of individuals and societies, in order to have a sustainable life, we have to keep close eyes on the pocket. (25)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-31 00:23
7. In some countries, most of people prefer to rent a house rather than buy one,What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a house.
It is a commonplace that most citizens have a preference of renting houses rather than buying houses for themselves in some countries. Being two different living lives, these two patterns have their own drawbacks and benefits respectively. (37)
To rent a house, which is the favourable choice made by most people, probably may be based on some supportive reasons. One of them is with regard to the cost. Housing cost, for most people, is considered as the principle expense. Renting a house would not cost that much as purchasing a house and it can save money for other usages, such as vocation training, educating and commodities purchasing. Another reason why people take that action is that it would be more convenient for them to change housing, especially when they feel uncomfortable or just want to migrate to other places, which means there are more options that they can pick. (111)
There are, however, some disadvantage that should not be neglected when renting houses. It is obvious that living a life without their own houses would make tenants,especially for women, children and the old, bear a sense of unstability of life, regarding the fact that it is more likely to be driven out of the house if the landlord or the landlady wants them out. The increasing rental, also, imposes a threat to those people. Being in societies with inflation, people have to face the reality that almost all the prices are on the increase day by day. Comparing to renting houses, owning their own houses would possess a maximum interest in the long term. (114)
In conclusion, house renting, as a kind of human activity that need balance, would not avoid being in the situation where everything has double folds. (25)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-31 01:13
8. Nowadays, people buy food which is already to eat instead of cooking it themselves. Do you think the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?
Sit down, open packages or bags, then begin to enjoy foods seems to be a preferable choice for some people these days. While it brings conveniences to these consumers, I, from my point of view, believe that its drawbacks outbalance its benefits. (42)
Admittedly, the cooked foods bears some benefits, though they do not predominate. Saving the time which should have been spent in purchasing foodstuffs for cooking, is a main appealing feature for some people who choose such food. Also, door-to-door service offered by many sellers, including foods suppliers, takes up a place for that eating habits. (55)
The disadvantages brought by already-to-eat foods, however, cannot be neglected and should be placed in the first position when buying and eating such foods. One of them is the nutrition, as scale products, these foods have less minerals and vitamins than those we by ourselves, because of the different approaches they are prepared. Also, the multi-choice of food materials, which can be achieved by doing it yourself, leave buyer less spaces to be picked, which means they have to taste the same food now and then. What a tasteless life! But the most significant point that should be pointed out is the cooking, as an art, is an essential part of cultures in any societies. If the hoping of keeping and enhancing this art are put on those manufacturer who chase the maximum profit as their motives, then it will probably disappear in the near future. (147)
To sum up, regarding the interest of individuals and societies, the question of which is predominant, between the the disadvantages of the cooked food and the advantages it brings about, I choose the former undoubtedly. (35)
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作者: q0i9kbfe5 时间: 2012-8-31 04:08
9. Nowadays, some employers give increasing importance to employing people wich social skill in addition to good qualifications. So it is widely accepted that social skills are as important as good qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The trend of recruiting emphasising the importance of social skills, as well as qualifications, seems to be being a consensus amongst the human resources of organizations these days. As for me, I totally agree with recruiters. (36)
As a recruiting policy, relating to the quality of the staff of companies, valuing the importance of social skills as other characteristics has its understandable arguments. One of them is those candidates, with high social abilities, tend to be having more personal resources which can less be seen in other people. In a competitive market, personal resources of employees can bring more business opportunities, which is the key feature of successful enterprises, to the organizations. (75)
Another reason of taking such action closely links to the employees themselves. It is being seen around us that the worker equipping excellent social skills, in addition to good qualifications, always is more confident compared with other people who possess less social skill but with the same qualifications. Being confident, they are more likely pleased to help others succeed, which can form a good atmosphere of teamwork spirit as the teamwork spirit has been considered by many employers as premises of success of business. (84)
Also, using skills to deal with the surroundings, the employees can create a harmonious working atmosphere. If the relationship among a group is favourable, then the team with enough qualifications would be able to overcome many obstacles and handicaps. (39)
In conclusion, the brilliant social skills can not only bring the most probable value to the organization, but also it can contribute to the interest of other workers and they should be put in the same position with qualifications. (39)
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你没有展开说明 Do you think it is a positive development？只是在结尾提了一句。所以整篇有点跑题了。
还有楼主的从句用的太多了，好几处好几句从句，看得人云山雾罩的。
比如; If they have to take care their children, such as cooking and checking houseworks for them, then they probably have to arrange time effectively, which imposing a continued pressure on them, is a challenge for the tired parents, after getting rid of the intense office work.
而且这句话里面有错误
1. is a challenge for the tired parents的主语是什么？
2. 不是housework 是homework。
3. 有了if, 不需要then,
4. continued-> continuous,
5. effectively-efficiently。
6. after getting rid of the intense office work 加在后面不恰当。
7. 这句话的意思是：如果他们必须照顾他们的孩子，那他们可能必须有效安排时间。这句话要表达的逻辑有问题。
Another reason, which is possibly most important, why the father and mother prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them, is that they appreciate the living lives in schools with their peers.
这句也有点莫名。
我有说了些（ the children can develop a more independent and social character），不过的确是比较少，哈
还有楼主的从句用的太多了，好几处好几句从句，看得人云山雾罩的。
比如; If they have to take care their children, such as cooking and checking houseworks for them, then they probably have to arrange time effectively, which imposing a continued pressure on them, is a challenge for the tired parents, after getting rid of the intense office work.
而且这句话里面有错误
1. is a challenge for the tired parents的主语是什么？
是which，我把imposing a continued pressure on them做分词短语用来修饰which，不知道能不能这么用，我找看看，反正我也觉得怪。这个我刚才看了您的疑问后，也一直找了好久主语，这个是前天写的，我都忘了句式了：）
Another reason, which is possibly most important, why the father and mother prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them, is that they appreciate the living lives in schools with their peers.
这句也有点莫名。
是有点儿怪，我的想法是， which非限制性定语从句，而why是reason的同位语从句， is句子跟reason才是一伙的
Being limited time and energy 用法错误, many parents send their children to schools which offer accommodation service , with the intention to reduce their pressure coming from caring and encourage them to live more independently. Before evaluating the trend你就没有怎么evaluating，因为你最后一段只是总结段，所以文章跑题, I intend to discuss the causes for that. (47)
In current society, with two working parents, many family have no enough spare time and energy left to be with their sons and daughters. For many workers, they have to work from the morning to the evening to support the family. When they come home from offices, they have no more than four hours which can be spent before saving enough energy for tomorrow. If they have to take care their children, such as cooking and checking houseworks for them, then they probably have to arrange time effectively, which imposing a continued pressure on them, is a challenge for the tired parents, after getting rid of the intense office work. (110)
Another reason, which is possibly most important, why the father and mother prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them这是什么意思，住校了还和他们在一起吗, is that they appreciate the living lives in schools with their peers. If boys or girls take a boarding life, then they have to and are able to spend more time, and may be enjoy themselves with their classmates. Living with the same age and background省略过头, which cannot be archived when living with their parents, the children can develop a more independent and social character. (88)
In conclusion, I believe that taking a boarding life would not only benefit the parents as it lessens the burden for parents, but also the children with such life playing a positive role in developing their characters.
你说你在范文里面看到了 if then 的用法，所以你用了两处，你在看别的英文文章里面看到过这种用法吗？ 有可能有的文章里面用了一次，但是一般来说那可能是有特别的强调意思的。如果楼主觉得用了if，就要用then 这是大错特错了。所以请斟酌吧。看得出来楼主是一个充满自信的人，呵呵，不过这有可能是会影响到你的学习过程的。很多搭配和逻辑中国人难免犯chglish的问题。如果你读多了英语文章，再来看自己写的文章，也许能看得出些许问题吧。其实你觉得你跑题并不是大问题，但这有可能会使你达不到6分的，因为整篇文章没有按照要求的内容写。 楼主勤奋写作令人敬佩，但是一口气写这么多并不能使你提高，因为你并不知道自己的问题，就一个劲的写，怎么提高呢？呵呵，这仅是个人想法，供楼主参考。
1：alpinistzheng说的“Being limited time and energy 用法错误”，改成Being time and energy limited怎么样？
2：跑题最可怕了，这个估计是思维习惯问题，还真没头绪，惨，，，，，，
3：prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them 是prefer 。。。to结构，自己感觉也有问题，如何改好呢？
4：the same age and background省略过头，这个您是说只说年龄和背景太简单，还是说背景需要交代清楚点呢？
5：朗文查了下，电子版，一个3.8g，一个1.7g，看了电驴的界面，看来得搞个，，，，，
6：把原因和positive分开估计要动大手术了，找个时间分开再写一次，，，
再次感谢各位，有问题各位尽请说，本来就是来让人找茬的：）
刚刚又发现了几个问题，乱七八糟的，看不下去了：
Being time and energy limited （移到后面）, many parents send their children to schools which offer accommodation services(用复数) , with the intention to reduce their pressure coming from caring and encourage them to live more independently. Before evaluating the trend, I intend to discuss the causes for that. (47)
In current society(应该是societies), with two（是不是用double好点？） working parents, many family(应该是families) have no enough spare time and energy left to be with their（？） sons and daughters. For many workers, they have to work from the morning to the evening to support the family（是不是应该用their families？）. When they come home from offices, they have（是不是用it is好点？） no more than four hours which can be spent before saving enough energy for tomorrow. If they have to take care their children, such as cooking and checking houseworks for them, then（那就删掉） they probably have to arrange time effectively, which is a challenge for the tired parents and impose a continual pressure on them, after getting rid of the intense office work. (110)
Another reason, which is possibly most important, why the father and the 加个the mother prefer their children to be boarding to being stay with them, is that they appreciate the living lives in schools with children's （换一个）peers. If boys or girls take a boarding life, then（删掉） they have to and are able to spend more time enjoying(把“, and may be” 换成enjoying) themselves with their classmates. Living with the same age and background, the children can develop a more independent and social character, which cannot be achieved when living with their parents(移到后面，用来修饰charater) . (88)
In conclusion, I believe that taking a boarding life would not only benefit the parents as it lessens the burden for parents, but also the children with such life（改成lives） playing a positive role in developing their characters.
4.作状语
作时间 条件 原因 让步状语事要位于句首 且与后面用逗号隔开 能转换为一个相应的状语从句
作结果 方式 伴随状语时要位于句尾 且与前面用逗号隔开 有时也可以不用
注意分词作状语时的逻辑主语（即分词动作的发出者）一般要与句中主语保持一致．〔这个是重点 是考试和高考的常考点 大家必须记住〕
个人经验状语从句是万能的 而分词作状语具有局限性 当分词不能表示的时候可以用从句来做
1）作时间状语
eg.Walking in the street,I saw him.当我在街上走时，我看到他了．
可以转化为一个时间状语从句 When/While I was walking in the street,I saw him.
当我要表达正在进行的动作时 我们可以在分词前面加上when／while
那么上面的例句就可以改写为When/While walking in the street,I saw him.（其实有的时候也可以理解为时间状语从句中的省略 但是不是时时成立的）
重新注意一下所给出的例子
Walking in the street,I saw him.我是翻译成”当我在街上走时，我看到他了．”而不可以翻译为”当他在街上走时，他看到我了．”（这个是因为”分词作状语时 其逻辑主语一般要与句中主语保持一致”）
但是有的同学问了 那我要是想翻译成”当他在街上走时，我看到他了．”那应该怎么做那？
可以用状语从句来做啊 因为从句是万能的啊
When/While he was walking in the street,I saw him.
在这里在告诉大家另外的一个方法
He walking in the street,I saw him.
这是分词的独立主格形式 我们以下会介绍 在这里不需太理解．
2）作条件状语
eg. Working hard,you will succeed.
3）作原因状语
eg. Being ill,she stayed at home.
注意 being是常用来作原因状语的
4）作让步状语
eg. Having failed many times,he didn't lost heart.
5）作结果状语
eg. His friend died,leaving him a lot of money,
6）作方式状语
eg. Please answer the question using another way.
7）作伴随状语
可以转化为一个并列句
eg. He is standing there,singing.
各么到底神马叫Redundant阿~就是重复了同一个意思呗
楼猪僧僧记得，当时小卡圈出了搂住一个句子，明确告诉我这个句子redundant vocabulary,让我自己找
楼猪基本上把每个词都猜了一遍~
那句子大概是这样的
Will Smith cited Boss Wu's article in his book that....
乃们觉得有何不妥？没有吧？多简洁明朗的文风！！！！完全小清新好不好！！！
答案
cite的意思是：在自己文章中引用别人的观点
故，cite 了就不可以再 in his book~
啰嗦！！！！
小卡，乃是要我老命么~~乃可知按你这标准，搂住T2写不满100字？
上回说道,I不能用，有些童鞋，要在文章里表达，“我觉得，但我也不是特别确定“这种意思的时候
怎么办呢~
现实生活里，你说 I believe(believe是个语气很弱的词，表示非常没把握，这件事大家都知道了？）
I believe I will have kids some day.
I believe my car is a sleeping transformer. 懂？
或者说I reckon(=think)（澳岛上是不说think的~岛民从来不think好吗！！！！）
I reckon Corvette has paid big money for the role of Big Bee.