It is true that the number of visitors has now increased in recent years for many reasons. Clearly tourists are obviously of benefit from travelling around the world in many respects. There are many causes to drive more tourists to travel than in the past. The main reason that people travel more than the past is the improving living standards. That means they can afford the cost of travel, such as accommodation, tickets diet and so on. If they cannot afford the high expense of their journey, they are unable to go anywhere even if they want to go. Furthermore, the fast pace of life make people feel exhausted and they are often too busy to spare time to refresh themselves. Travelling, therefore, give them a chance to escape from the daily grind to relieve themselves. The developing of modern transports also provides a possibility for the booming of the tourism industry. Airplanes, for example, enable people to travel abroad without spending too much time. When workers have recharged themselves, they could devote themselves to heavy daily work, which in turn enable people to travel again. It seems that the benefits are just the causes of travelling for many people, but they can still benefit from travel in many sides. First of all, having a wonderful trip can enrich their life experiences. If you have never gone somewhere, you cannot have any specific feeling or thinking in such things. A great journey may not only give us an opportunity to live life to the full, but also make us broaden our horizon. Then we may keep an open mind and have a positive outlook on our life and the future as well. In other words, it is not simply a way of travelling but a window to a colourful life. To sum up, more travelers tend to travel around than ever before because they can be greatly of benefit from this kind of things. For these people, they not only lead a colorful life, but live a happy life as well.<br />
Travelling, therefore, give them a chance to escape from the daily grind to relieve themselves
改成Travelling, therefore, gives them a chance to escape from the daily grind to relieve their pressure.
The developing of modern transports also provides a possibility for the booming of the tourism industry.
改成The development of modern transports also provides a possibility for the booming of the tourism industry
现在有事，所以只是草草看了一下。蛮流畅的，有的地方用法也很地道。
小的语法错误和少量不地道的表达是致命伤，给你改的这两个地方就有体现。
规避语法错误，保持现在的流畅，以及语言再地道一些，就可以上7了
祝好运~
作者: 听雨如诗 时间: 2013-4-14 17:46
回家了..
第一句感觉有点问题It is true that the number of visitors has now increased in recent years for many reasons. Clearly tourists are obviously of benefit from travelling around the world in many respects.感觉now和recent years有点重复，tourists are of benefit from这个似乎也有点别扭，be of n和be adj是一样，tourists are beneficial from travelling,这个就明显感觉有点不通顺了,直接说benefit from就可以了，简单粗暴
第二段Furthermore, the fast pace of life make people feel exhausted and they are often too busy to spare time to refresh themselves.这个错误出现两次了，楼主要当心了，makes,记得加s
第三段which in turn enable people to travel again.第三次出现这个错误...enables
If you have never gone somewhere, you cannot have any specific feeling or thinking in such things. 这句话感觉有点口语化，总觉得出现you怪怪的，换种说法吧，感觉方法还蛮多的。
but also make us broaden our horizon，直接说but also broaden our horizon就可以了
and the future as well，as well去掉吧
最后一段抛开语法错误不说，和前面也有些重复，paraphrase一下吧，动作大点
To sum up, more travelers tend to travel around than ever before because they can be greatly of benefit from this kind of things. For these people, they not only lead a colorful life, but live a happy life as well. 把happy换掉吧，fulfilling啥的都可以..
祝楼主好运
作者: 11gyhutib5 时间: 2013-4-15 01:09
这个是剑8的G类第1套大作文
作者: 11gyhutib5 时间: 2013-4-15 12:50
单复数的问题是要好好注意一下,我平时就比较粗心不太注意这些细节.
第一遍的时候我用的是development后来改成了developing，因为想强调这个过程，看来这有点想当然了，查了下字典刚,根本就没这种用法
对，重复的问题挺严重的，所以每一句我想改成这样.: It is true that the number of visitors has now increased in recent years for many reasons. Clearly tourists can profit from travelling around the world in many respects
Without such kind of travelling experience, it is hard to form any specific expression on these placese.
最后一段，想了下，改成这样，觉得对文章的原因概括不够，所以:
To sum up, after being able to afford their travel, more people are travelling around than ever before. Meanwhile, they can be greatly of benefit from travelling to live life to the full.
It is true that the number of visitors has increased in recent years. For many reasons, more people prefer to leave their home temporarily to have a holiday. Consequently, tourists also profit from travelling around the world in many respects.
作者: 11gyhutib5 时间: 2013-4-16 10:08
It seems experienced employers are more satisfied the demands in the job market recently. Compared with graduates from the college, experienced workers are more popular with employers. Nonetheless, this does not indicated that academic qualifications are unnecessary. Instead, I believe that both an academic education and work experiences are essential when it comes to get a good position the in job market.
Experienced workers are more competitive against freshmen. First of all, experience can maximize the employers' profits, for they do not need to spend extra time and money on training them. Furthermore, those employees may not only adapt to work surroundings quickly, but also have the capacity to solve problems when they work. Finally, their experiences will play a key role to reform the current system if there is a necessary. In this way, they help the company reduce the cost largely, so they are more popular in the job market.
However, formal qualifications are also very useful and helpful in the career. To begin with, academic qualifications are relative to their future career development. It shows your potential abilities to the employers that you are qualified to the position in the future. In other words, workers will be limited in their promotion if they lack academic backgrounds. Moreover, in some professional areas, such as accountancy, the medical industry and archeology, academic knowledge often determines one's professional level and achievement. It is impossible to apply for a position in these professions without any formal qualification.
In conclusion, although practical skills become more important to job seekers than ever before, but it is also indispensable for applicants to have necessary academic qualifications when it comes to obtaining a good job.
作者: 11gyhutib5 时间: 2013-4-16 13:47
In today’s job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
作者: nyzhm4hy82 时间: 2013-4-16 21:38
背新概念很有帮助么？ 这个工作量有点大啊，要背正本的话。
作者: 绿绿衣裳 时间: 2013-4-17 03:51
绝对有帮助，不过不强求背，
跟读和仿写很有用
作者: sds6w9h8h7s 时间: 2013-4-17 12:43
It seems experienced employers are more satisfied the demands in the job market recently（有问题，be satisfied with是固定搭配，表示满意，但是你表达的不是满意的意思，所以看得出来是中文直译的，要不得，in the job market看得出来也有很中国特色，这样不好，修改一下可以说are more favorable in the job fair）. Compared with graduates from the college, experienced workers are more popular with employers.（这个基本和上句重复了，要是要体现the newly graduate直接可以在上句里面加个than就可以了） Nonetheless, this does not indicated that academic qualifications are unnecessary（语法错误惨不忍睹，does not后面加动词原形，不管是什么样的水平，这个都不应该错，后面那个教育程度也很生硬,可以改成educational backgrounds are of no use）. Instead, I believe that both an academic education and work experiences are essential when it comes to get a good position the in job market. （啰嗦，重复）
Experienced workers are more competitive against freshmen（不说偏不偏题或这个topic sentence好不好，就文笔而言给人感觉就不好。毕竟这种表达大家都用，见到太多次了，而且和前面有重复的，experienced workers typically could gain a competitive edge over beginners）. First of all, experience can maximize the employers' profits(hiring the experienced, to some extent, could bring down the cost of employers), for they do not need to spend extra time and money on training them. Furthermore, those employees may not only adapt to work surroundings quickly(could not only find their positions in the workplace in a short term), but also have the capacity to solve problems when they work(but also be more capable of handling tricky problems they meet). Finally, their experiences will play a key role to reform the current system if there is a necessary(逻辑很大问题，语法问题也很明显，finally, to, necessary都用的莫名其妙，reform system这个也没见过，改成in addition, their experience may help to accelerate the reform of incumbent commercial systems). In this way, they help the company reduce the cost largely, so they are more popular in the job market. (换种表达，自己换吧)
看了两段不想看了，其实主要是再看下去也一样，你自己都看得出来自己的问题，就算再发10篇上来也一样。
好好读读我推荐的那本书吧，还有新概念，希望你看完新概念不是只学了几个单词。
sorry,语气很难听，只是我上次给你的建议没有看出你在这次的习作中执行了。
磨刀不误砍柴工，祝你好运
It is true that the number of visitors has now increased in recent years for many reasons.
now和in recent years语义重复；visitor偏重指参观者，在这里还是用tourist好点，因为visitor的囊括范围小于tourist。
Clearly tourists are obviously of benefit from travelling around the world in many respects.
Clearly与obviously再次重复。sb be of benefit 的用法闻所未闻。respects错误，明显是想说aspects。