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发表于 2012-4-21 05:43:20 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


长短句结合才是最佳的。实际也反映了结构和表达方式的多样性。


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 楼主| 发表于 2012-4-21 14:52:47 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


参照大家的意见,又改了一下。

Some people claim there are more benefits than drawbacks to live in a house compared with in an apartment, while I believe that there are both advantages and disadvantages in either way of inhabiting.

On the one hand, house owners have the opportunity to enjoy much richer family lives than those in an apartment. A variety of outdoor activities, for example barbecues, can be held at home for house habitants, which is an impossible luxury for apartment owners. Houses are usually equipped with gardens, thus providing the opportunity for the family to do some gardening work together which can contribute to enhance the family ties. Moreover, since most houses have a distance with neighbours’, this enables people to organize some special events or parties without disturbing others. For instance, one of my friends once invited me to a family concert at her house, and she didn’t need to worry about the noise that could annoy her neighbours.

However, there are also some good points about living in an apartment. Apartment is rather convenient due to the fact that its location is usually closer to downtown so that people don’t need to waste time on travelling to work. Furthermore, apartment is comparatively easier to clean because it is often smaller and only the indoor parts need to be attended. Staying in an apartment also gives people a sense of belonging and safety because there are usually safeguards at the gate and people live close to the neighbours, and this applies especially to single people or DINK families.

In conclusion, I think it depends whether a house or an apartment is more suitable for living and different people have different preferences.


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 楼主| 发表于 2012-4-21 18:23:31 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


明白了。多谢。看来应该再注意一下这个。


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