大家有空帮忙指点下我的这篇写作啊

苦女孩 · 发表于 2013-10-26 23:13:10

用了两次 ON THE OTHER HAND，LZ 有第三只手吗？

其他的~~我不是英语大牛，就不乱说了！

康熙邓 · 发表于 2013-10-27 10:55:19

看错了吧，就一处～

心乱如麻那 · 发表于 2013-10-27 15:18:45

6.5吧，上7分有难度

康熙邓 · 发表于 2013-10-27 23:12:27

如果一鸭写作能有6.5，我就心满意足啦～

kitjkalpra · 发表于 2013-10-28 07:56:07

多用however做插入语表转折 . 'On the other hand, there are some concerns about these classes' - concerns, however, have also been raised with regard to attending extra classes.

It is not difficult to understand what you tried to say, the sentence structure/wording, however, needs improvement.

康熙邓 · 发表于 2013-10-28 12:55:08

嗯，谢谢，很中肯，的确是需要在一些搭配上多改进～

fobq6714 · 发表于 2013-10-28 13:18:45

写作上7简直是要老命啊。

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