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巨壑眇云庄 · 发表于 2010-5-12 20:00:42

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Some people think that teaching children of different abilities together benefits everyone. Others believe that intelligent children should be taught separately and given special treatment. Discuss both sides of view and give you own opinion.

The variety of children with different level of intelligence and ability in one class pose a debate about the way of teaching. Smart children with good family education can be taught with higher lever of knowledge. Other children who are less intelligent should be taught patiently. By what means a teacher can cater these two sorts of children?

Some people think the best way to teach all the children well is to separate intelligent children from the rest. Each kind of children can be taught by different ways based on children's different background. And both smart children and less intelligent children can learn efficiently. Smart children will learn quickly and get more knowledge. The rest of children can also master what they are taught by ways of teaching that suit them.

Other people oppose to separate children. They think both sorts of children will be damaged. Firstly, the children who are deemed less intelligent will feel upset and discouraged. This separation will cause the feeling of children’s inferiority which retards the development of their own. Secondly, the smart children can not benefit from the separation even they can be treated specially. Perhaps those smart children can learn more knowledge. However, the education can not be only inputting knowledge of science into children's mind. Children should learn more at school. Children should learn to handle the relationship with various people, including children less intelligence, which will help them to fit the complicated society when they grow up. Moreover, every child regardless of his intelligence has his own merit. A smart child can also learn much from a child which is not as smart as him.

Children should live in the environment of variety. Keeping smart children from the rest will lead to damage on all children.

午夜就放纵 · 发表于 2010-5-13 07:50:56

我不是高手，不过我很有空～～看了一下你的作文
感觉思路很清楚啊，可能是高分

rr4c2m1hu · 发表于 2010-5-13 18:51:34

The variety of children with different level of intelligence and ability in one class pose a debate about the way of teaching. Smart children with good family education can be taught with higher lever （level）of knowledge. Other children who are less intelligent should be taught patiently.(??) By what means a teacher can (can是否应该在a teacher前?)cater these two sorts of children?
Some people think the best way to teach all the children well is to separate intelligent children from the rest. Each kind of children can be taught by different ways based on children's different background. And (应该用,and..吧？)both smart children and less intelligent children can learn efficiently. Smart children will learn quickly and get more knowledge. The rest of children can also master what they are taught by ways of teaching that suit them.

mxtjbjpcah · 发表于 2010-5-14 05:10:05

简单评下， children 出现的太多，同义替换下， youngsters, teenagers, adolescents, youths, 等等

jsuv8170 · 发表于 2010-5-14 05:49:32

1. different level 和different background我认为都应该是复数different levels, different backgrounds
2.是cater for不是cater？
3.Other people oppose to separate children, 是不是应该改成other ppl oppose the sepration of children into different groups，用名词？
4.They think both sorts of children will be damaged,这个damage用的有点恐怖，不至于
5.the children who are deemed less intelligent will feel upset and discouraged. will用的欠缺点，我觉得would更好，下面有几处也是
6.This separation will cause the feeling of children’s inferiority which retards the development of their own. 试着改改, this separation would cause feelings of inferiority (or make children feel inferiority), which is likely to retard children's (their) development.
6. which will help them to fit the complicated society，加个in 感觉更好fit in the society
7.A smart child can also learn much from a child which is not as smart as him. 改为a child who is not as smart as him？

an94hujrif · 发表于 2010-5-14 10:28:44

做个记号，回头看，呵呵

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