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发表于 2010-3-23 21:04:22 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |正序浏览 |阅读模式 来自: INNA

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因为我每次写作文都是洋洋洒洒的 陋习很多,大家踊跃批评。

You are going to invite a Canadian friend to attend party, write  a letter for him and tell him:

what kind of party?

Why invite him?

The location of the party and how to get there.



Hi Jim,

How are you recently? We have not contact each other for 1 year since you go back Canada. I am writing this letter  to invite you join the party which I hold to celebrate our graduation from University for 1 year.



This party is not official so you can take your girl friend come with you. We can meet many old classmates on the party. Although you are now in Canada,but you are my best friend in campus and also we have lived in a room for 4 years. I miss you so much and cherish our friendship.



The party will be hold all day on Feb.2 2010 and I know you will be on vacation that time so do please come and join us. I have rent the meeting room 309 in our University which can accommodate 100 persons that day.Remember how to go to our University? Take the bus line 178 or 2111 when you get out the airport. When you arrive the University you will see our guider to lead you to the meeting room.

   

I am looking forward to hearing your reply.

yours sincerely

TOM



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发表于 2010-3-31 16:23:01 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


语法错误全更正了,应该6分不难.


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发表于 2010-3-31 11:05:11 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


楼主,强烈建议你看看米版的Miller Essay Template. 在下面链接的4楼.
http://www.freeoz.org/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=857884

因为我家主申请也准备再考,看过米版的作文模板后觉得很受益. 所以推荐给你.


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 楼主| 发表于 2010-3-30 23:43:58 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA




我在财大国定校区考试的


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发表于 2010-3-30 20:02:43 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


美国人的写作格式和雅思考试还是有点差别的...
可以借鉴下人家的语感


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发表于 2010-3-30 14:06:31 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


上文还挺收益的


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发表于 2010-3-30 09:46:03 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


咪咪,给你贴个美国鬼子来MAIL。。

Such a surprise and highlight to hear from you last week. Your email arrived at a time when I was out of town and not in a position to answer and then upon getting home Charles arrived home from school and we had a very busy weekend. I wanted to wait until I could give you a thoughtful response.

First of all “thank you” for taking the time to write. And you are correct, the Christmas & holiday season is a great time to think about old friends and reach out to those you’ve not communicated with for quite some time.

I really enjoyed the pictures of your daughter. She is so cute and does not look “naughty” at all. Now she does look like she enjoys having a lot of fun. Some of her facial expressions were so cute. And she has certainly grown. It is good to hear that both you and your husband seem to be doing well with your jobs.  

Our life stays very busy. Charles is now in his 4th Year of college and continues to do very well. Because he needed to get some more math to perhaps pursue graduate school, he has decided to go to a 5th year of undergraduate school, so he’ll not officially graduate until May 2011. He is still making very good grades, still very happy with the same girlfriend and still has a full head of very blond hair. Over the next few months he is really going to decide what to do after he graduates as now he is considering many options. It makes him a bit nervous.

Ruth is in her 3rd year at the University of Colorado. She got home last Wednesday. She is also doing well studying in the business school. She will start thinking about her postgraduate plans in the next few months, but she now wants to go live in a big city like New York and maybe work for a nonprofit organization. She did that as an intern last summer and really enjoyed it.

Eileen is doing a lot of things. A great deal of the past year was spent in remodeling our home; she designed all the changes. She also has been purchasing some property that she is redesigning & fixing up so we can rent to others. She also is doing a lot of work in fundraising for some charity organizations.

I also stay busy working with a few little companies that I have invested money into. My work with them is mainly consulting. I do this together with a lot of volunteer work serving on the International Board of Directors of a disease research organization called the Juvenile Diabetes Research Foundation. I’ve been very involved for this for more than 10 years, but the amount of work & involvement increased a great deal in the past year.

We stay busy a great deal spending some time visiting Charles & Ruth at college and then some time just traveling for fun. We took a trip to Switzerland & Italy a couple of months ago to go hiking in the Alps. That was a whole lot of fun. And then just spend a lot of time enjoying family and friends.

Like in the US is still very interesting with the tough economy. Things have still not recovered to the way they used to be. And all of this debate on what to do with the United States health care system has created a lot of debate. A great deal of changes have occurred over the last year with President Obama.

This gives you some of the highlights. And thank you again for taking the time to keep in touch. It was very nice to hear from you and let’s make sure we do not lose touch.

Take care,
Mike

PS: Do you have any trips planned to the United States? I still hope you can make the journey one day.


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发表于 2010-3-29 22:58:12 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


LZ 2.11你在哪考的,我的一鸭也是那天
我觉得作文关键是要多练,还有找人帮你改。不得不说你现在的问题还是比较大的。。。
我的建议是多输入些native Speaker的英文,不管是听还是看,可以参考下我写的总结


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发表于 2010-3-29 18:39:43 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


呵呵,收益匪浅


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发表于 2010-3-29 16:58:14 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


昨天下午就想回复了...可惜没有权限,看到那么多人都给指出问题我就不再写了,欢迎楼主继续贴,大家交流交流


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