g类大作文一篇练习，请指点。

zatiqlpmq

上周G类的大作文：in some societies more and more people choose to live on their own,what reason for this,and is it a postive or negative trend?

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In some countries today, more and more people, especially many young men and women, begin to live on their own ability without help from their parents.



I think there are three reasons why they do this. Firstly, the grown children want to know more about the society without any strict regulars from their parents. So they can make decisions by themselves, such as whether they would take part in some social activities, or which type of clothes they could buy. Secondly, the telecommunication makes it is possible for them to keep touch with their families and friends without face to face. They can send an email to them to tell whatever they want, or they may have a video chat with their families on the internet thus they can see each other. Finally, there are more job opportunities waiting for them so that they can make a living by their hands. With their own salary, they can rent flats or buy laptops without their parents’ permission. They can live in a freely style.



Personally, I think there some advantages for people to live on their own. They can obtain more living experience so that they can become more social than those living on their families. Perhaps they can make more friends during living on their own. Furthermore, if they are frustrated by failure, they might revalue themselves and try to improve themselves again.



However, one thing must be pointed that the generation gap maybe widen than before when people live on their own ability because they might have not much time to communicate with their families. I hope both families and young people can take action to combat this situation to improve the family bonds.

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最后一段不知道该不该加，但是我的思维很自然地想到了写这些话，就是要表述一下live on own也有一些问题的。

请各位指点。

还有，审题也有不解，到底该不该侧重年轻人自力更生，还是各种类型的人、那样就很难写了。



谢谢。

苟抚顺

同意，楼主思维比我清晰多了...

我弄丢了

In some countries today, more and more people, especially many young men and women, begin to live on their own without any help from their parents.
I think there are three reasons for this. Firstly, young people want to know more about the society without any strict regulations from their parents. As a result, they can make decisions for themselves, such as whether they would take part in social activities, or which type of clothes to buy. Secondly, telecommunication has become possible for them to keep in touch with their family and friends without meeting face to face. They can send an email to them to tell them whatever they want, or they may have a video chat with their family on the internet and see each other. Finally, there are more job opportunities waiting for them so that they can make a living by their hands. With their own salary, they can rent flats or buy laptops without their parents’ permission. They can live with more freedom.

Personally, I think there are some advantages for people to live on their own. They can obtain more living experience so that they can become more socialised than those living with their family. Perhaps they can make more friends by living on their own. Furthermore, if they are frustrated by failure, they might revalue themselves and try to improve themselves again.

However, one thing must be pointed out is that the generation gap [maybe widen] / [maybe wider than before] if people live on their own because they might not have much time to communicate with their family. I hope both families and young people can take action to combat this situation to improve the family bonds.

zatiqlpmq

参与一下：
Many parents think advertising only tells information about snacks and toys to children. But companies think advertising also tells useful information. In my opinion, they both are right from  their angles.

to parents:
1.many advertisings spend more time showing the snacks and toys and less time on other useful information.
2.When talking about the same advertising,most of parents can remember the main content of it.That is to say they ignore other fuction of the advertising.
3.As to the children,when they see a advertising about snack or toy they might turn to their parents directly to ask for that snack or toy regardless of other information of it.

to companies:
1.Many companies spend more money designing the advertising so that more usefull information could be shown.
2.There are too many companies to product the same product, in order to get more market share they must tell customers the adventages of their products contrast to others.

In a conclusion, advertising shown to customers often contains plenty of information,althoug companies try to show more information about their products, the customers, including parents and children, will just obtain the information they want.

kf55hujzyq

感觉自己审题倒是成了问题，显得非常僵硬。楼主词汇显得普通，不过论述还比较清晰。

贴个题目：看看这个可以将些什么观点？

Many parents think advertising only tells information about snacks and toys to children. But companies think advertising also tells useful information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

zatiqlpmq

同意，第一段确实太少了，主要是思路不开阔。

zatiqlpmq

非常感谢各位的评价。
我也觉得用without太多了，句型变化不多，我再改改。

还有个问题比较困惑，看了《10天作文》好久了，模板也准备过几个，不知道为什么实战时就不知道怎么用了？不知道各位是怎么把模板套到一个新题目中的。

uyshua6112

老实说这次审题我也觉得比较难。
我就是怀疑题目是不是想侧重single但是又不想太明白、好让人上当，所以才这么含糊地说live on ones own，所以我也没有点明白，也没敢很具体地往不结婚上面靠，而只是笼统地说成独自生活。

我觉得我思维根本就很僵化，竟然连注重隐私都没说出来。

hlhy0200

多谢！
后面写的是大致是独居者生活较简单，事业上有一些优势。生活也比较随意，例如男性可以同时keep a few relationships.
然后就是传统婚姻是社会的基石，社会的基本道德和法律很多都是围绕家庭来制定的，因为社会需要保证下一代的正常成长。并且选择独居的人往往也不会避讳SEX，由此造成的很多没爹妈的娃和单亲家庭，已经成为了重要的社会问题。
结论是，独居者有独居的自由，但有些人认为婚姻更是一种责任。等等等等。。。
自己是感觉没有偏题啦。。。

猎鹰预测

楼上的不用太担心啊，这种题目本来就有多种可能性的，只要你后面的论点论据比较合理，应该不会判你偏题的。