大作文求批改

马蹄dada

两个月前一雅，作文走运得了6分， 结果口语part 2基本没怎么开口，5.5分。

12.11二雅， 老天保佑我过啊。我要求至少4个6呢……



大作文求批。

题目：University students are more focus on specialistic subjects in nowadays. Some people think universities should encourage students to study at a range of subjects in addition to special area.



答：

In modern college education, students are not simply trained to be handyman in some certain area any more. Acting on the contention that the graduates from university should be as resourceful as possible in every subject, some people insist that university should encourage students to study more other than their own major. I personally worry that this trend may bring about bad influence towards the students’ future.



Admittedly, since the culture communication has become increasingly frequent and the information technology is developing on a high way, no individual could ever lock himself in his own workshop for any advanced research. A mathematic graduate, for instance, need to be competent in English for the sake of being able to publish his accomplishment in an international forum or seminar. And a geography student should be capable to manipulate “GOOGLE” because its function is so tremendous that even the landscape of a valley which is thousands miles away is vivid in your screen. Assuming, of course, you are really a veteran in computer.



However, does that really mean that college students are supposed to be trained as Mr. Know-all? It is extremely doubtful, from my view, whether it makes sense.



First of all, students are, instead of machinery, human kind, which means that they are not as energized as we imagine. To be excellent in their own major, they are probably forced to exhaust themselves. Rarely can anybody effortlessly be outstanding in college study. Secondly, major lessons are quite essential for their following career. Therefore they should always be at priority. Thirdly, study is not the unique job that students should do. They also should attend social activities when they get tired.



Overall, I believe that college students should broaden their horizons by learning other subjects if their own cases permit. But their own special area should be fully occupied originally.



时间40分钟左右。但是感觉中途写得有点累，词不达意，结尾那段绝对是时间不够敷衍了事的。 看了很多单词， 等到实战时还是很难用上。口语也是同样情况。

大家也会有这种困惑吗？



anyway， 求批。



老天保佑我二雅通过吧。