写作一直达不到6分怎么办(过了,谢谢大家)

秦家的老虎

今天看到heb30的帖子说9月3日的雅思成绩出来了，我非常紧张地登陆网站查询，结果很出乎意料：听力6.5/阅读6.5/写作6.5/口语6，我简直不敢相信自己的眼睛。这个成绩对于坛子里的牛人们来说根本不值一提，可是对我这个基础差得要死，写作从没考过6分的人来说，真是天大的惊喜，终于过了，这也意味着自己不用去参加9月24日的那一场可以说是决定命运的考试，如果那一天还要坐到考场里，我估计自己也会吓得考不出什么了吧！

这里非常隆重地感谢localau的TZ们，自8月23日第一次发求助帖，好多热心的网友加入进来，大家提出各种意见建议，而且是非常详细中肯的，我和LP几乎每天都要打开帖子研究大家的回复意见。一些网友像3WU、Vzrain、Kuthlaav、YUEXMA等等还逐字、逐段地分析说明，用LP的话说“比我的VIP写作老师还上心”。还有一位叫jho的网友主动发来短信让我们加QQ，并和我们分享他的作文考试经验，真的让人非常感动。不管怎么说，这次能过，我觉得有幸运的成份，也有我自己的一点努力，不过让我感触最深的还是来自家人的支持以及陌生人的热诚。再次衷心地谢谢大家！



这一年来考了不知多少次了，其他项都上了6分，就是写作一直5分或5.5，平时练习作文都写了两个笔记本了，培训课也交了不少钱，但写作就是提高不上去，不知问题出在哪里，恳请坛子里的高手帮忙指正下，先谢谢大家了。小作文：

a.Your English teacher who taught you several years have invited you to have a meal at his house, but you can not go,1)explain the reason;2) suggest next arrangement;3)tell him about yourself and your improvement in English learning.



我的练习：

Dear Professor James:

Thank you for inviting me to have meals at your house next Friday. It was my great honor. I am sorry to tell you that I am not available on that day. Because I have an exam at my university. I am sorry for any inconvenience caused by this change.

After finishing the high school,I was accepted by XX University with the major of English. In the university, I always use the methods you taught me to practice English, which makes great contribution to my overall English ability. When it comes to this ,I should take this opportunity to thank you. In the final exam last year, I won the first prize in the Department of English. And this year I am going to study Cambridge Business English for getting a favourable position in future.

Last week, we were informed that we will have final exam on next Fiday. So important the exam is that I can not miss. But it causes you many inconvenience. Please forgive me. I am very happy to have an opportunity to have meal with you . Considering that I have exam on Friday. Is it possible to arrange on Monday, 26th July? If it is not suit your schedule, please let me know. So we can make alternative arrangement. You can contact me on XXXX. I am looking forward to hearing from you.



Best regards



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俄特工

恭喜楼主过了啊。。。。。。。

黄丫丫

个人意见，本人雅思盲，看了笑笑就好。我作业也很差，只能找出一部分问题。

小作文：
a.Your English teacher who taught you several years have invited you to have a meal at his house, but you can not go,1)explain the reason;2) suggest next arrangement;3)tell him about yourself and your improvement in English learning.

我的练习：
Dear Professor James:
Thank you for inviting me to have meals at your house next Friday. It was my great honor. I am sorry to tell you that I am not available on that day. Because I have an exam at my university. I am sorry for any inconvenience caused by this change.
题目是have a meal，你写的have meals，你真馋，吃一顿还不够。
it was my great honor，时态可能有问题吧，考虑is。
i regret to inform you that i will not be available that day, for it clashes with my exam.
cause by this change可以考虑省略。
可以考虑写成，我个人理解的啊
thank you for your invitation, it is my honor. but i regret to inform you that i am supposed to have an exam next friday, so i am afraid i will not be able to call on you.

After finishing the high school,I was accepted by XX University with the major of English. In the university, I always use the methods you taught me to practice English, which makes great contribution to my overall English ability. When it comes to this ,I should take this opportunity to thank you. In the final exam last year, I won the first prize in the Department of English. And this year I am going to study Cambridge Business English for getting a favourable position in future.
high school前面不用加the。  accepted考虑admitted。in the university可以省略。 i always study english the way you taught me。  for getting这个getting可以省略。

Last week, we were informed that we will have final exam on next Fiday. So important the exam is that I can not miss. But it causes you many inconvenience. Please forgive me. I am very happy to have an opportunity to have meal with you . Considering that I have exam on Friday. Is it possible to arrange on Monday, 26th July? If it is not suit your schedule, please let me know. So we can make alternative arrangement. You can contact me on XXXX. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
时态问题 we were informed that we would……
so开始的句子需要倒装，so important is the exam that i can not miss it.
if it is not suitable for you,  suit是动词，不用在am/is/are后面使用。


Best regards

00gyhuuqd6

语法是基本功，所以积累很重要。但要快速提高，至少提高到一个少写错句的程度，也是有一定速成的办法的。但过程会很痛苦。。。

1。 到网上 找一些有 既有题目，又有范文（或者 语法比较正确的 考生答案） 的练习。  不看答案，自己按时间先写一遍。。
2。把自己文章 不限时间，认真修改。
3。看范文/别人答案，第一： 分析结构。第二分析观点。第三，也是最痛苦的部分：分析每一个句子的 语法，用不同的颜色，划分出主语，谓语， 宾语，固定连词组合，从句格式，标点符号。 一句一句地分析，开始很痛苦，很慢。。可是你会进步的，而且进步很快。因为你在分析过程中会发现很多用法，或者固定连词，时态等，跟你原来想法不一致，这种知识的冲突，第一，让你履步艰难， 第二，一旦把这种冲突积累到一定程度（3篇左右优秀范文）， 你便知道自己的语法缺陷， 并能自己给自己修改。
4。把自己文章 再次修改。
5。 找人修改，最好是 English speaker.
6.  审查别人的修改。。分析自己的错误，总结问题，形成再一次思潮冲突。
7。 带着自己的收获，重新写文章（可以是原来的题目）。。。
8。。回到 第一步。。直到 雅斯达到要求。

bmce5819

楼主 我觉得还是基本功吧。。基本功扎实了6分就没问题了。。。。

hrfd11fbtw

Dear Jack：
How is everything going in Australia？We don’t（最好不要用缩写） keep in touch （keep in touch是说多联系吧，这里你是想说很久没联系了吧？说成“我们很久没有多联系了”会不会很奇怪？）for long time. I am writing this letter to ask for your help, as I am going to study a master degree in Australia..

I have applied 2 year maser IT degree in UTS. （apply是一个瞬间动词，用过去式就可以了，如果要表示状态要用被动）As my IELTS score is （缺从句谓语）below academic requirement, I have to take language course in Holmes. It takes about 3 months. I want to choose the course in daytime and finish in 2 years, because my parents have limited finance to support my study. To make matter worse（直接翻译是“为了让情况更差，我爸妈怎么了怎么了”还是奇怪。是否可以用what makes it worse is that....), my parents want to send my brother to Australia after a year. As a bigger brother, I want （want重复了，表示意愿可以说would like，表示打算可以说intend（上一句）; ease的主语应该是能够减轻负担的东西，不是你，所以……I would like to do something that can ease...）to ease my parents’ financial burden. Therefore, I need to take a part time job.

I heard that you are working in a restaurant. If it is possible, could you please introduce me to your boss? I do not mind work in kitchen or canteen. Or do you have any friends or colleagues working in other places and their employers are looking for staff. （问号）So  这里为何要so？去掉you can 话说你在求人家……可否用it would be very appriciated if you can.....introduce me to them; or you can post my resume to (on) the job seeking website.

Thank you in advance.

Best regards

秦家的老虎

嗯,3WU有没有一些关于短期提高语法的建议或方法?现在真是火烧眉毛了。。。

狄仁杰之中国梦

只看了小作文和大作文 第一段。就知道这回5分上下。
小作文，几乎看不到一句是没有语法错误的。
大作文，第一段就问非所答。

Ali-sa

5.5??

水晶小纽扣

Admittedly
Furthermore
In conclusion

个人看法. 这些词用烂了, 考官看着会有点反感, 用随便一点的句子代替, 连词用在复杂句中就行了, 没必要每个段落固定这样开局, 有点死板.