雅思作文的复习体会，以及task2练习，欢迎讨论及批改

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雅思作文一直找不到感觉，练习了几篇作文，找淘宝上的人帮助修改了，也指出了问题，就是不知道怎么提高。

在书籍方面，看了滇老师的10天，感觉里面的词汇还是很有用，这几天也在反复的复习。但是对模板什么的不怎么感冒。我的最主要的问题是找不到素材，找到了素材对语言的逻辑组织不能做到很熟练，即使有逻辑了，词汇也满足不了思想的充分表达。



我的体会，在作文方面，最最重要的是逻辑的组织。我的想法是在在开始的几分钟，要把自己要陈述的事实和证据想一边，最好能够做个大纲。然后要把这些素材有先有后，有逻辑的组织起来。有时候先说A，再说B的顺序以及不同连接词的应用对观点的表达式完全不同的。要反驳的观点可能要用一些弱化的词。



在逻辑上清楚了以后，再找一些合适的连接词把这些小句子连接起来。这样读者才能比较流畅的了解你的观点。



我练习了以下作文：

Some People think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion



总结

1. 理解清楚题目的意思。我理解没有错误的话，这个题目是比较在道德教育方面，是要着重家庭教育还是学校教育。

2. 组织素材。我大概用中文写了一下：

思路，不一定要写这么详细。我觉得考试的时候至少要用英文或者中文简单写个提纲。

a.        家庭教育和学校教育个应该关注什么 –〉缩小范围到道德教育，道德教育是一个首要重要的论题。引出争论。给出我的观点。

b.        家庭教育才是唯一的观点，理由家长可以观察到学生的方方面面，可以面对面的谈话，可以非常细心的了解到孩子的心理健康，但是这个只对有很多时间的父母有效。另外一方面我们必须认识到家长是学生的很好的榜样，家长的性格和道德品质往往非常严重的影响到学生，所以对Parenting对学生道德教育来说非常重要。但是这只是针对有很好的道德教育的家长，不是用于其它类型，如道德本身就有问题，或者没有正确的方法

c.        限制于以上的缺点，有人认为学校才是道德教育的地方。理由是学校是一个小社会，具备教育怎么与人相处并成为一个好公民的先天条件；虽然学校作为一个社会团体，有义务为道德教育做出努力，但是学校的很重要的一个人物是学术教育，受制于资源的限制，以及学生数量众多，很难把精力放在每个人的道德教育上。

d.        总结，各有各的优缺点，而且道德问题可以出现在家里也可以出现在社会上。我的观点是要将学校教育和家庭教育结合起来。比如说学校要有统一的机制能够与家长保持有效的沟通，学校有义务投入更多的资源寻求正确的教育方法，并引导有需要的家长进行家庭教育。



3. 用英文的思路完成整篇文章



It has been a debatable topic of whether the parenting or schooling is more important in the children education, especially in morel aspect, one regarded as most critical qualification for a man needed by the society.



Some people might think family education should be the focus. As parents are the closest persons to children, so it is easy for parents to detect the psychological or morel problems, and educate them via face to face talking or by family meeting. This is, however, only applicable for those who has enough time to stay with their children, as in such a stressful society, many parents usually need to work very late, even at home. And the communication between them becomes rare. Even for those with plenty time with children, it is the fact that parents are not perfect. They may lack of correct education or communication skills or even have morel defects.



Due to above reasons, it might be suggested that morel education in school is much more import. Some may think a school is a society miniature, which has advantages in conditions to educate children to be good members. Despite the fact the schools are society communities, thereby having obligation to invest efforts in morel education, it is admittedly that schools with limited resource of teachers and vast number of students are difficult to put focus on each student on their personal development. Moreover, the academic outcomes become dominant measurement in some school, especially in high schools, where students are all seeking opportunities to go to university.



It is obvious now that there are advantages and disadvantages in both parenting and schooling. It is not dependable to reply on only one education model, especially due to the fact that morel problems may happen anywhere. The best solution would be synthesizing the two. That is the school should take the responsibility to put more energy on it and keep frequent communication with parents who has obligation to guide children and tackle morel problems by following correct approach suggested by education experts.



个人观点，敬请指教和探讨！