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发表于 2010-5-25 11:49:13
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来自： INNA
5月8写的作文，g类，凭记忆回忆了下，请高手点评，得分5.5，自我感觉比以前6分的作文写的好，所以复议了……大家看看有希望么？
作文task1 写一个关于training course的，之前参加了培训中心的兴趣班，写个feedback
要说明：
1、 参加了什么班
2、 好的地方
3、 不好的地方和建议
Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to give you a feedback about a training course I have attended to.
I was a student in a writing training course in your center last month from April 10 to 20.I found that all the staff, from the manager to teachers, were very friendly helpful. I particularly loved my teacher, Mr. Morris, who was so experienced that he helped a lot in learning English. Also, the standard of classrooms were far beyond what I had expected, which were all quite spacious and clean.
However, I found that the restaurant in your center stopped serving lunch at 12.00. As I always had lessons until 12.30, I would have to have lunch outside. I also talked about it with other students, who expressed the same disappointment.
I will be glad to know if my suggestions have turned out to be helpful in improving your service.
I look forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
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task 2 Some people suggest that dangerous sports should be banned 你agree还是disagree
At present, some people argue that dangerous sports ought to be restricted. However, as far as I am concerned, I totally don’t agree with this viewpoint.
It is evident that there are a variety of benefits about dangerous sports. First of all, they are helpful to the economic development. In other words, because of the ban on dangerous sports, it is highly likely that a large number of employees in such fields like sales for dangerous sports facilities will become unemployed, leading to the soar of unemployment rate, which hinders the economic development. Secondly, they help enrich people’s spare time. Some dangerous sports,such as bungee jumping, always tend to be very exciting and enjoyable. Actually, the majority of young people, especially those creative ones, always complain about their dull lives and often prefer to do some exciting sports, therefore, dangerous sports are a good way for people to spend their leisure time. Finally, they are great for cultivating one’s personality. Specifically, by taking part in some dangerous sports, people eventually learn to never give up easily when encountering difficulties, which should be necessary for success.
Admittedly, there are some disadvantages about dangerous sports. For instance, people are more likely to get hurt when doing some dangerous sports. However, most of the injuries can be prevented by various measures, such as upgrading sports facilities.
In conclusion, I am convinced that dangerous sports shouldn’t be banned, not only because they are good to economy, but for they are essential for individuals as well. Also, I suggest that we should make greater efforts to secure the health of the dangerous sports players.
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