为了第五次雅思,每天一篇作文求批改

jgoqat4680 · 发表于 2011-3-2 23:18:09

楼主
你的口语成绩也起伏太大了点……

Guox998 · 发表于 2011-3-3 04:07:55

搂主很有潜力。
但是打个比方，就像一个功力不太深厚的人却学会了一些高深的武功，练出来的功就不伦不类了。

建议搂住先写一些朴实无华的句子，生僻词不要用。不要把句子弄得太长了，太长了需要水平的，水平不高就一下子露马脚了。

eihks623 · 发表于 2011-3-3 15:24:12

我也挺奇怪,之前的外教都说我在6.5分左右,这次不知道怎么搞的变成5分了.可能还是跟作文一样,基础不够扎实吧.

eihks623 · 发表于 2011-3-3 19:17:21

there are only several months need to work【从句用法错误】
这个错误怎么修改呢,我想了半天都没想出来.
和‘Especially for the one who likes travelling can travel to anywhere he wants to go after earning enough money through the temporary job.【只有状语，没有主谓】’
Especially for the one likes travelling,he can travel to anywhere he wants to go after earning enough money through the temporary job.
以及‘it is more difficult for the one who prefer to temporary jobs 【从句主谓不一致】’
it is more difficult for the one who prefers temporary jobs ..

请问,以上修改是不是正确.

ovzq5050 · 发表于 2011-3-3 21:06:58

there are only several months need to work【从句用法错误】
这个错误怎么修改呢,我想了半天都没想出来.

-》1. there are only several months (that) casual workers need to work for
2. there are only several months to work for
3. there are only several months needed to work for
4. there are only several months required to work for
5. casual workers need to work for only several months.
6. casual workers only need to work for several months.

下面的句子之前的语法错应该改过来了。

和‘Especially for the one who likes travelling can travel to anywhere he wants to go after earning enough money through the temporary job.【只有状语，没有主谓】’
Especially for the one likes travelling,he can travel to anywhere he wants to go after earning enough money through the temporary job.
以及‘it is more difficult for the one who prefer to temporary jobs 【从句主谓不一致】’
it is more difficult for the one who prefers temporary jobs ..

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