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发表于 2011-3-20 18:05:38 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


不过严肃的说,要是考试写成这样的信,分数不会高,我感觉
英文信,一是表意清楚,二是有礼貌
另外一定要用一些惯用句子。比如开头结尾。I am looking forward to your reply. 这句子就极其不地道


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 楼主| 发表于 2011-3-21 05:59:44 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA



分数不会高的原因在哪呢?
是表意不清楚和没有礼貌,还缺少惯用句子吗?
能不能具体的说说,最近练大作文挺多,但是书信还是不知道怎么写.


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 楼主| 发表于 2011-3-21 13:48:55 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


Writing19 [考前最后一篇了,明天一早赶赴济南,谢谢大家的帮忙.]  
You rented an apartment for a holiday last year and you are happy with it although there is a problem with it. You want to rent it again this year, write a letter about: 1. Why you are happy with it
2. What the problem is
3. Give information of the details and dates you required.
         
         
Dear Sir or Madam,


I am writing to seek accommodation from your company for my vacation.

Last year, I rented an apartment from your company, in which I had a great time. The room was so tidy, and the service was provided by the waiter was excellent. The waiters were well-trained, and they always knew what I needed and when the items should be sent to me. At the same time, they never interrupted the games which I played with my family. Therefore, considering the excellent service, I would like to rent the apartment again in two weeks.

However, there was a problem which annoyed me at night. It was the flags outside the front window. At night, the wind blew the flags, which could hit the glasses of the window. It made little sound, but at the quiet night, it really bothered me. Therefore, I hope you could move the flags more than 2 meters away from the windows.

I would like to reserve room 303, the same room as last year. I will take my wife go there with me in May 5th.

I am looking forward to receiving your replay. Thanks for your kind assistance.


Yours sincerely,


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发表于 2011-3-21 20:26:13 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


I am looking forward to your reply.应改为I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.


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