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 楼主| 发表于 2011-1-30 07:49:14 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA




narcsity 同学也是15日考试吧,建议在纸上写作文,习惯一下考场环境,小作文也是不可忽视的。
还有拼写错误三个起就扣分了,加油。


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 楼主| 发表于 2011-1-30 12:04:43 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA




   


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发表于 2011-1-30 13:10:10 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


反复念了几遍用 to 意思更贴切些。
还有这个     违法报道
还是很Chinglish啊

另外我现在的速度太慢太慢了,自己写的话得憋好几个小时
抄闪动兄的也折腾了1个多小时
那个汗啊
唉,继续磨练去了...


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发表于 2011-1-31 00:29:08 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


谢谢闪动!
我一直在努力,第一次肯定是拿不到四个6了。我是想先体验一把,然后深入。保持平常心。


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发表于 2011-1-31 07:58:01 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


不多说,请体会不同颜色的标注。 特别指出闪动 #168 的 文章 有点离题:注意 题目红字。

题目:Lectures in the past were used as a way of teaching large number of students. but nowadays the development of technology, we do not use lectures. do you agree?



原文开头段"As technologies are developing rapidly on educational area in this day and age, (there) various (new) pedagogical methodologies have (occurred). By contrast, the traditional teaching methodology — the lecture seems inferior to the new methods in some aspects. (In despite of) that, traditional method still have the inherent advantages thus it might never be replaced but integrated into new technical methods."


In this day and age, ( ) various () modern pedagogical methodologies have ( ) been utilised to replace the traditional  classrooms for  teaching optimization. Despite that  lectures have been used for thousands of years, still I belive they are  the most socially acceptable and unchallengable effective learning approaches.

下面根据你的文章和段落中心,在你原文的基础上把文章的段落骨骼整理如下:(只给出首句和归纳句)
第一个观点:
Undoubtly, high progressing technologies improve efficiency and quality of classroom teaching, and as a consequence, comprehensively improve the quality of students.
. ........................................................................................................Therefore, the aids of innovated classroom can  not only stimulate students' interest of classes but also help them easier to grasp the lessons' contents.

第二个观点:

However, not all the students feel comfortable studying in  distance at home without any people interaction.
............................................................................................................For students, attending  classes (in reality) and comunicating with their classmates and tutors face to face are essential   learning experiences .

最后两段可以合并。请注意段落的比重均衡。

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发表于 2011-1-31 14:42:34 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA





你说的对,建议考试无论有多紧张,也要花时间列提纲, 不能像 盲头苍蝇,匆匆下笔。万一一时想不到观点便要赶着下笔,留着空格最后还是能填补上的。首段要得就是几个关键词/词组。


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 楼主| 发表于 2011-1-31 17:39:04 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


这篇题目我用了以前曾写过的一个,第二次答题感觉流畅多了,写出来后和以前对比简直像两个人写的,而且只花了我三十几分钟,然后检查,控制在四十分钟里。若现在参加考试的话,这篇应该也就是真实的水平了。继续加油!
The twenty-third essay

Some people think the high sales of products reflect the power of advertising instead of the consumers' demand. To what extent do you agree?

Answer:

In this day and age, as advertisements have increasingly influenced people's daily lives, whether the rapidly boosting production sales are due to advertising or customers' own demands has become a frequent topic of discussion. Personally, I prefer that not only advertising but also purchasing demand are all the main contributors to augment product sales.

As a matter of fact, people's purchasing decisions are some extent swayed by advertising thereby boosting conpanies' sales. In terms of children. As famous fast food companies such as Mcdonald's and KFC have advertised around the world, their main target customers —— children cannot refuse the fantastic scenes and tasty food in the ads, thus they will importune their parents to buy those fast foods for them. Likewise, Toy factories promote their products via the advertisements with animated cartoon. The Transformer is the best illustrated example. For the sake of promoting their toy robots, they made the animated films which endue the toy robots with life, world and emotion. As a consequence, this successful advertising has deeply influenced people of generation not only children but also adults and brought enormous sales for company as well.

On the other hand, people's demand also contribute to high sales. Obviously, the population of world has enhanced at a staggering rate. Therefore, some daily necessities have been demand more than before. For instance, the goods which people necessitate to deal with their daily lives from wheat to clothes are heavly demanded around the world. Even some countries which own lesser ground have to import foods to satisfy the needs. Consequently, in terms of daily necessities, people might not be controled by ads, the needy would choose things cheaper and the affluent would prefer things with high quality.

Summarily, in my point of view, the factors of boosting produce sales are both advertising and consumers' demand.

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 楼主| 发表于 2011-2-1 00:11:13 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA




多练习就好了,还有别抄我啊 ,万一抄出个4.5我。。。


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 楼主| 发表于 2011-2-1 01:44:33 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA




不到最后关头不要轻言放弃哦,我已经吃过这个教训了。你底子比我好,相信自己,不就四个六嘛,考试前一定要藐视敌人。


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 楼主| 发表于 2011-2-1 04:26:09 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA




谢谢3WU老师。看来我平时还是要加强审题练习啊。
仔细看了您的修改,感觉还是需要时间去消化一下。
实在太感谢您了


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