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最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-14 03:47:33

The thirty-second essay

The development of technology changes the way people interact with each other. In which way does it change the type of relationship that people make? Does it have positive or negative effect on the development?

Answer:

In this day and age, as technology is developing rapidly in communicational area, people have changed their ways of communication. Consequently, people have transform their relationship type via this sort of technology as they can interact with other people wherever their are. However, this brings many positive effects as well as negative effects on the development.

Indeed, communicational technologies such as the Internet and telecommunication have changed people's relationship types. For instance, people can handle banking transaction at home on the Internet instead of facing the banking assistants at the bank. Besides, youngsters also can find new friends on the Internet wherever they are. Additionally, soldiers who are defending frontier can talk with their family members for the sake of easing their homesickness. Therefore, it seems that people have greatly benefited from communicational technologies.

In terms of development, undoubtedly, communicational technologies have contributed more. First and foremost, people can interact with others by long distance, which is the efficient communicational way. As a consequence, people can save more time on the road and have more time to do else things. More precisely, human society have walked in a new era which is high efficient and less time-consuming by communicational technologies.

However, at the same time, there might be some negative effects caused by communicational technologies. Because many things can be done without really meeting people, in the course of time, some could be lack of sufficient abilities to deal with persons face to face. By that, people could be alienated from each other.

Summarily, communicational technologies allow people to communicate with each other long distance, and those bring both positive effects and negative effects on the development as well.

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-14 04:49:15

如你所说，题目写到现在已经出现重复的了。有些就是意思不太一样，但也不能大意，一忽略细节就会跑题。
这个题目的要求是Discuss both and give your own opinion，换句话说，两方观点都要讲。而你写的偏向于do you agree or disagree.
不过词汇量真是大。。
加油！

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-14 10:33:31

Is that means "return to/on" just a sort of fixed phrase? Like "pay attention to"?

fm98hujzju · 发表于 2011-2-14 13:12:28

人猿泰山44 · 发表于 2011-2-15 01:12:20

几天没来都30多篇了，这毅力一般人比不上。佩服

hu228190 · 发表于 2011-2-15 02:25:03

这个是The thirty-second essay。闪动太努力了我赶不上进度了

题目问的是究竟是positive还是negative, 开头结尾没有说清楚作者本人的观点。

截图最后一个as well.不小心截掉了。。。将就吧。。。

子木光 · 发表于 2011-2-15 10:59:52

楼主的第31篇是关于贫富差距，社会问题貌似面比较广，恐怕需要多准备几篇。这篇是解决问题，按模版提纲写了3个causes，2个solutions+1个转进

请教：
1. countries with higher disparities of income are worse in all manner of social indicators，这里原文用的是fare worse on，觉得好高端，是神马个用法？
2. the reforms will strike most negativity，这里原文用的是pernicious，可以换成malignance吗？

题目：

提纲：
Causes:
1. China: tax forms & monopoly
2. America: share of income goes to the top -- financial sector
3. Globalization and techonology
Solutions:
1. Focus on pushing up the bottom rather than dragging down the top
2. Cut the subsidies
转进结尾：
In a freer world skill and intellect would still be rewarded

正文：
The debate about inequality is an old topic, but in the wake of world recession several economists now reckon that inequality was the root cause of financial crisis, other critics suggest that countries with higher disparities of income are worse in all manner of social indicators, from higher murder rates to lower life well-beings.

The gap between rich and poor has risen in emerging economies such as China as well as in many developed countries especially America. But the reasons for this differ. In China inequality has a lot to do with its irrational tax regulation and state-dominated monopoly. In America inequality began to widen in last generation because the share of income goes to the top particularly those working in financial sector. Furthermore, globalization lets unskilled jobs move to cheaper countries, technology brings well-educated labours high premium.

Viewed from this perspective, the right way to combat inequality is as clear as crystal. On one hand, without some discriminated tax rules it is unable to narrow the gap, but overly prescriptive rules that fossilize economy in its current form could indeed hamper innovation. In other words, policymakers need to focus on pushing up the bottom rather than dragging down the top. On the other hand, governments should get rid of subsidies that favour specific industries. Forcing bankers to hold more capitals and breaking up monopolies are undoubtedly positive for society’s safety.

Such reforms would not narrow all income disparities, in a freer world skill and intellect would still be rewarded, reducing global trade barrier is something to be welcomed. But the reforms will strike most negativity and allow more people to move upwards.

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山山无欺 · 发表于 2011-2-15 19:33:46

我也来了。

TOPIC:
Nowadays, the gap between the rich and the poor is increasing, discuss the causes and the solutions.
Plan:
cause:
technology  : developed country and developing country
society       : weak legal system and useless administration, capital grab wealth by manipulating market
solutions:
international aid
wealth redistribution by balanced taxation

ANSWER:
The rapid economic growth creates a vast deal of new wealth but it also has led to a growing gap between rich and poor.
Such kind of situation can be found not only between developed countries and developing countries, but also among different social levels.
Therefore, this inequlity should be addressed respectively.

Due to historic reasons, some countries are left far behind others in almost every aspect, especially in terms of science and technology, which have been utilized by the latter to steal enormous amount of wealth from the former.  With the globalization, many technic-previliged countries seek to perform apparently unequal trades with lesser-advanced countries, for example,  by authorizing a relatively low-end technology to the latter, in return the former are permitted to exploit rare natural resources in their territories with unbelievable low price. In my point of view, this kind of transactions is actually a disguised invasion in the form of economic, which should be held responsible for the poverty in some countries and regions.

I think international aid for poor countries is crucial for mitigating this phenomenon. International organizations, such as United Nations and World Bank, should provide support to them in both technical  and financial fields, enabling them to improve infrastructures and strengthen industries, therefor they could be involved in international businesses at an even level.

In addition to above-metioned issues, at a small scale, the wealth gap among different social groups should be attributed to injudicious domestic policies. The weak legal system and useless administration have allowed the greedy capital to grab huge money by manipulating market. In china for example, a lot of companies invest in real estate and compromise the price at an incredible high level, in which case the average-income people have to give out all their saving for one small house. Furthermore, unreasonable taxation system also plays a vital role in widening the gap. Again taking China as an evidence, the 80% revenue of government is from ordinary employees in 2001, which is such heavy a burden for them and leaves them with poverty.

It is a necessity for the government to introduce balanced taxation and enforce administration over marketing, so that the wealth could be redistributed evenly. Otherwise, never could the gap be reduced between the rich and the poor. Governments are supposed to be judicious after all.
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最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-15 20:08:08

昨天实在是腾不出空来复习，今天补上。

The thirty-third essay

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of large cities and into regional area, do you think advantage of this development outweigh its disadvantage.

Answer:

Currently, as increasing industries and businesses are boosting in some large cities, governments start to encourage them to relocate to regional areas. In my view, the strengths of this development might not outweigh its weaknesses.

Undoubtedly, the industries and businesses in large cities will cause severe environmental problems. For instance, some manufactories could discharge a vast deal of poisonous gap to the air and drain a great number of effluent sewage directly to the rivers. Likewise, the great many of vehicles owned by enterprises and factories not only also emit numerous exhaust but also put a strain on the already crowded ground of cities. In particular heavy trucks, they also make terrible noise and earthshock which are greatly disturbing the residents who live near the roads. Because of these, it seems businesses and industries might be relocated soon.

However, factories and companies provide employment opportunities as well. I assume that all the companies and factories have moved to the regional areas, thus cities would become quieter and air and water would more clear than before. Subsequently, people might find that they are hardly to get a job in the cities because all the enterprises and factories have gone. Therefore, they have to move to regional area or drive a long distance for jobs. In the course of time, regional areas will become new cities and the previous cities will become suburbs.

Summarily, in my view, even though industries and businesses make environmental problems and disturb some inhabitants, but they offer employment opportunities to residents as well. Because job opportunities are vital to people, thus I think this development's disadvantage outweigh its advantages.

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-16 06:31:19

别佩服了，生不如死啊，你也加油吧。

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