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最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-27 12:17:10

The forty-third essay

Technological progress in the past century has its negative effect, despite its remarkable contribution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

As technology has developed greatly in this day and age, that was accompanied by some negative effects in past century. Even though human has benefited from that development enormously, but humankind has paid huge costs for compensation and they will continue to pay.

Undoubtedly, technological progress absolutely contributes lots to human society. For instance, Lamps make our night not dark any longer, Aeroplanes allow people to fly around the earth, people find their living convenient due to household electrical appliances' help. However, technology also contributes much to war and environmental destruction.

Unfortunately, technological development helps wars becoming more destructive and catastrophic than before. As long as human exist, there wars occur. From cold-weapon era, human might not stop to fight each other. Subsequently, the powder had been invented. As a consequence, human could kill others easily. In the modern century, scientists innovate the nuclear bomb. That terrible weapon has made not only numerous people losing their families but also severe environmental pollution.

In terms of environmental problem, technological progress has put diverse pollution on this planet. First and foremost, the development of fossil fuel has created serious air and water pollution on the earth. Greenhouse effect makes the climate around the world increasing harsh, which caused by poisonous gas human factories and transportation exhausted. Additionally, technological development has stretched invaluable natural resources to the limit. In the course of time, the future generation of Homo sapiens might hardly survive due to resource shortage of the earth.

Summarily, personally, I agree with that although people have benefit from technological progress in various area in the past century, but that also cause huge disasters to the humankind.

7d0916d5 · 发表于 2011-2-27 17:47:38

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-28 03:14:24

The forty-fourth essay

The survey shows that in many countries, the people are living longer but increased life expectancy has many implications for the aging individuals and for society as a whole. What are the possible effects of longer living for individuals and society?

Answer:

As the humankind has developed rapidly in various areas in this day and age, human life expectancy is increasing in some countries as well. However, people live longer might cause some probable effects to elder individuals and the whole society.

No doubt that, increased life expectancy could lead "silver tsunami" to countries. More precisely, the quantity of a nation's senior citizens will increase. As a consequence, ageism might be occurred in those countries because elder people generally need younger population's support in terms of medical care and financial support and they might less contribute to society. Likewise, due to the age discrimination, elderly people might live in dilemma. On the one hand, they might not want just receive the help from government and other taxpayers but continue to contribute to society. On the other hand, their health condition restrict them to work like young population.

At the same time, government has to distribute more budget to health care and pensions for senior citizens. It means growing aging of population might put great pression on the social welfare. To some extent, it might be unfair to the young taxpayer.

However, the citizenry of a nation living longer reflect that country humanitarian and lodgeable. Because of the clean environment, nice living standard and reasonable social welfare, population's life expectancy is increasing.

Summarily, in my view, longer living causes the "silver tsunami" to human society. That brings pressure to social welfare and ageism which makes elderly people unhappy. But population's longer life reflects the nations humanitarian and lodgeable.

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-2-28 09:28:21

The forty-fifth essay

Some people think zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, some people think zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

Answer:

As humankind is increasingly care about animal welfare in this day and age, whether all the zoos should be closed has become a frequent topic to discussion. Some people believe that is cruel animals are closed in the zoos, whilst others think that could protect endangered animals.

Indeed, closing animals in the zoos that is unfair and inhuman to those animals. First and foremost, they will lose their freedom in the zoos. More precisely, zoos just like prisons where incarcerate the innocent animals and restrict them in small areas. Not only has it deprived animals' rights but also it could lead the animals losing their wild nature. They might become fewer abilities to seek foods independently as other wild animals. Instead, they might start to depend on human feeds. As a consequence, those animals might not adapt themselves to the nature any more but spending their life in the zoos.

However, zoos also provide safe shelters to animals. In particular endangered animals, they might live in safety and comfort and own many of descendants in the zoos until they die naturally. By contrast, animals in the nature might meet threats probably every day such as the natural enemies' attacks, diseases and famine. As a result, there perhaps rare animals could live longer in the natural world.

Personally, since human do not know the animals' real minds. I assume maybe every animal has its own personality just like human. Some like peaceful life and some like adventure. But I am sure there is one thing same as human - to survive.

Summarily, although zoos restrict the animals' freedom but those also protect the animals, particularly endangered animals avoiding the risks from the natural world. In my view, animals naturally want to survive just like humankind.

十脚蝎 · 发表于 2011-2-28 14:27:04

Shan,It is impressive to read your essays. The advance you have made is definitely great!
For study,I tick off some sentences which may have some mistakes in my opinion as following.

A."Some people believe that is cruel animals are closed in the zoos."
-> Some people believe that it is cruel to close animals in zoos.

B."Indeed, closing animals in the zoos that is unfair and inhuman to those animals."
-> Indeed, closing animals in zoos is unfair and inhuman to those creatures.

C."it could lead the animals losing their wild nature."
-> it could lead the animals to lose their wild nature.

D."They might become fewer abilities to seek foods independently as other wild animals."
-> The ability to seek foods independently might become lower than other wild animals.

E."own many of descendants in the zoos until they die naturally."
-> Change own to have will be better.
You can own something.Or you can express : They have their own descendants.

G."As a result, there perhaps rare animals could live longer in the natural world."
-> As a result, perhaps, rare animals could live longer in the natural world.

Logic is wonderful.Pay more attention to the use of sentence structure will be better.

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上海人民广场 · 发表于 2011-3-1 02:25:26

我想了解一下你们好多人后面都有写记录。是在签名里面写吗？但是那个貌似不能写太多。。。
比如闪动的是：
08-09-11与中介签定合同
08-10-20递交TRA评估
08-11-20TRA 4311-13 successful
09-6-13第一次烤鸭，第一面对蓝眼睛4 L4.5 R3.5 W4.5 S4...无语
10-12-11第二次烤鸭，阅读填差格了...5.5 L6.5 R5 W4.5 S5.5
10-12-28自从被雅思逼成神经病，整个人精神多了。
11-3-19第三次烤鸭，玩命ing...
我想搞，怎么搞啊。。。

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-3-1 02:46:09

好久不见^_^，受教了。
问一个问题，如果是不可数名词做主语，那后面是用复数形式语法还是单数形式语法。
例如：many transportation is/are ....

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-3-1 13:01:59

就是在签名里写的，记得换行。

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-3-1 20:15:37

The forty-sixth essay

Travel by air is becoming cheaper and cheaper. Some people think it is beneficial, but other people think it has drawbacks to environment and the resources of the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:

As air transportation is developing rapidly in this day and age, the prices of air travel have become increasingly cheaper. some people believe it is harmful to environment and the resources around the world, but others think it is a beneficial development.

Undoubtedly, people would get great benefits from cheap air travel prices. First and foremost, they can travel faster and further than before and might not worry about the costly prices any more. As aeroplane is the fastest and the most comfortable means of transportation currently, people can spend less time on their journey and enjoy good services during the time. Cheaper prices of air travel allow people to choose such convenient transport. In particular needy people and exotic labours, the expensive fees on journey before might restrict them to visit their families who are far away from them, but those have gone now.

However, cheap airline tickets also greatly drive airways' overhead costs up since those are the main incomes of airline companies. Instead, they might choose low quality fuel for the sake of cutting down their operating costs. As a result, there numerous of poisonous gas could be discharged to the air directly. Additionally, cheaper prices of air travel promote the demands of flights. Airways have to boost the flights for satisfying the high demands. Consequently, that boosts the consumption of fuel and put the pressure on natural resources.

Summarily, in my view, cheap prices of air travel obviously benefit people. Even though cheap price might harm airways' profits thereby causing some environmental problems and boosting natural resources consumption, but I believe airways could make some measures such as making different ticket prices in a flight instead of using low quality fuel and increasing flights to resolve overhead costs' problem.

ledxz8t1 · 发表于 2011-3-2 00:48:01

不可数名词做主语，后面应该是单数。我这样觉得的。也不能确定。。。

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