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dpyj0786 · 发表于 2011-1-2 18:57:12

It is means?! 2个动词啦。。。

1吃八方1 · 发表于 2011-1-2 22:58:43

今天比较有空，发了心得帖，然后再来好为人师一下
根据我自己的经验，来提点意见。一家之言，未必适合楼主情况，兄弟看合适的就拿去，不合适的地方别当真。
In contemporary society, as the rapid progress of traffic technology people can travel by aeroplane more cost-effectively. Subsequently, Some people are delight with that because it is mean that they can reavel further by inexpensive cost, but other people do not think so. Relatively, they are worry about the environment problem which are making by plane.
这是常见的写法，问题在于不够开门见山，前面铺垫现状铺垫得有点多。而且题目让你讨论两种观点后说说你自己的看法，你这里没有提出你自己的观点。
我大概会写成这样：
Travelling by air has become cheaper, enabling people to travel farther but at the same time causing environmental issues. However, I believe it is possible to strike a balance between convenience of travel and protection of environment.

第二段你有意控制结构，第一句说获益，后面举例。举例都很具体。
不过题目似乎说的是travel得更远，从这一点上似乎不太扣题。

第三段联想得很棒，从机票便宜联想到航空公司成本，这样联系上了环保问题，真的很赞。我的思维很局限，换成我我肯定就卡住了。

第二三段的问题是内容有，形式不够好。建议考虑以总分总的结构重新写写，注意一段就一个中心思想，围绕它把话说透。

最后一段一开始两个in有点别扭。你提出了一个建议，即鼓励低价机票但采取措施避免环境污染问题，不过这里突然跳出来有点突兀。是否可以考虑增加第四段，先解释一下这个建议，然后再在第五段总结？

语法问题的确比较多，可能会降低考官阅读舒适度。不过语法是没有捷径的，所以也急不来。楼上有同学建议牛津语法，那书不错，可考虑系统地学学。有了理论再加实践，假以时日一定会大大提高。

楼主加油！祝早日成功！

调皮娃 · 发表于 2011-1-3 00:18:24

学习，加油。
怪物猎人，呵呵，我也玩过，不过有个橘红色的奇丑的大鸟我怎么都打不过去，所以就放弃了。

谢谢楼上的牛人们

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最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-1-3 02:21:33

晕,这个没注意.我以前一直这么写的.幸好幸好,以后改正,多谢提醒.

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-1-3 10:57:40

茉莉姐也出手了 ,语法是不能速成的,555,我宁愿背单词去...
在看了你的评价前我一直觉得雅思作文应该写四段,开头只提背景不发表看法.现在知道还可以这样写.
非常感谢纠正,正好偷学一下,英文属于厚积薄发的学科,关键还是要多加积累和多练习.
拉丁派系的语言应该是相通的吧,茉莉姐英语那么好,法语应该没问题的,一起加油吧!

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-1-3 19:50:05

现在已经出第三部了,可以带两只猫猫去虐畜.不敢玩,怕一玩就放不下手,我可是技术流,杀你说的那怪鸟可以不穿衣服的...

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-1-4 01:24:59

The eighth essay

Some people think competitive sport is important for a child's education. Others think it has negative effects on children. Discuss both the views.

Answer:

In this day and age, parents and educational institutions have paid much attention to children's education. Then whether children attend competitive sports that are important for their education or not has become a topic of discussion.

No doubt that, competitive sports could cultivate various skills and minds for kids. They would acquire such as team spirit and senses of competition and cooperation from some competitive sports like football, basketball and volleyball. Those sports not only strengthen children physically, at the meantime, those provide honour to encourage kids to fight for it through their own efforts. It is a sort of experience what children can not acquire from the lecture hall and gives kids preparation for dealing with the fierce competition in the future. However, because of that, kids are suffering the fierce competition at an early age as well.

Maybe, that is a threat against children for tasting the competition at an early age. They have not excellent capability to know how to win a game fair and square but just a wish for win. As they are keen to win, thus they would become aggressive to compete by fair means or foul, even injure the opponents. In all likelihood, These kinds of behaviour would become standard practices for they to deal with other people in the future. Furthermore, kids would be addicted to the sports so that they disregard the schooling. As a consequence, these children would become sports stars fortunately or have insufficient abilities to compete their peers for winning a job opportunity.

In summary, proper quantities of competitive sports could afford children well-rounded, but we should deter them from addiction to the sports and create a fair surrounding of competition.

cpv5j7a3c · 发表于 2011-1-4 04:08:38

admire一下，我每当要弄挂它时，就莫名的一下被它弄挂，等雅思过了，给你切磋一下，哈哈。你是用psp玩的吗？

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-1-4 08:41:47

用大锤子，对着它的脑壳子往死里敲，然后它就晕了倒地，然后再往脑壳子上砸下去，千万别不忍心,以前的敲头党也是这么干的，收益颇丰。是用psp玩的。

最难缠钉子户 · 发表于 2011-1-4 09:56:06

The ninth essay

Many people think having enough money brings happiness but others think too much money can bring problems. Do you agree or disagree?

Answer:

In current society, there are increasing numbers of affluent people in the world. Some people claim that people could get happiness provided that having enough money, but the others think having excessive money could cause problems.

Indeed, money have played a vital role in persons' life. More precisely, people can not live in this planet without money in present-day society. There are too many things which people have to deal with in every single day, and most of those are need paying from a egg to real estate loan. No doubt that, sufficient materials make persons happier. In contrast, people who live in poverty would suffer extreme misery. They would never enjoy their life but worry about the money which are needed to combat the daily life tomorrow. As a consequence, they are keen to own money as having enough money to surviver that is their hapiness.

However, rich people always own their concern because of money. Their lives are brilliant, they can give their children everything they want. But, there are many of things can not be got through money. Because their kids never lack material things thus they would never treasure those things as well. In all likelihood, they would become wasters ultimately. By contrast, the children of the impoverished would earn things by their effort. At the meantime, they acquire a sense of achievement and a ability of independence as well. In terms of this, the wealthy kids never manage to reach a comparable level.

Overall, In my view, people's happiness are based on the adequate money for managing their daily life, but people own overmany money could cause problems of their descendants' education.

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