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发表于 2011-9-25 08:06:51
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来自： INNA
真的呀？这样能得7？我放心了，那我拿个9不成问题了。 楼主的作文做到了达意，基本顺畅，但还是有不少值得商榷的地方的，语法上的、甚至逻辑上的。下面我只是从语言的角度把有问题的地方标出来了。
With the rapid development of the society, some people tend to change their job after working at the same position for a period of time, although others prefer to engage the similar issue in their lives. In my point of view, I prefer to live a same life without some changes.
Living unchanged lives can lead to some positive effects. First, long period of time on working the similar issue can give individuals a chance to become experts of certain areas, such as scientists, doctors and the like. If they could devote themselves entirely to their subjects with their whole lives, success could not be a luxury for them. Second, their families could be benefited from their working conditions, as they can provide their families with steady lives. Their family members do not need to move everywhere, if they can keep on doing the same job. Finally, it can strengthen their willpowers. Doing the same work may be boring and uninteresting; however, if individuals can successfully control their negative feelings, they can get strong minds.
Admittedly, changing jobs can obviously get some advantages for them. As everything has its special characters, with changing their status, they can experience different senses from kinds of careers. But they would loss their chances to be experts of certain areas. Furthermore, changing their lifestyles may be enjoyable sometimes. As a result, unemployment can possibly hit them, which could greatly affect their families’ living qualities.
In conclusion, I prefer to live an unchanged life, even though changes seem such funny and interesting.
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