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冰鬼鬼丫头 · 发表于 2011-12-1 10:58:12

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Some people suggest that high school graduate students should go to universities to have higher education, but others encourage students to find jobs to meet the needs of the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Currently, some press coverage that it is quite difficult for college students to have a decent job. A debate arises, then. High school students should go to universities to have higher education or find job after graduation.

Some people take Bill Gates as an example to illustrate that one person could achieve success without university diploma. They reckon that work experience is more important than educational background. Bill took the computers to every family and computer changed the world. No one could doubt his achievement. Besides, students could contact various persons. College atmosphere is comparatively easy and comfortable, yet. The former is more beneficial for students.

In contrast, other people hold opposite opinions. College experience is a crucial part of one’s life. Not only did students obtain friendship and love, but also they establish life belief and value recognition in the university. Despite the fact that not all the students could attain their ideal jobs, most of them take the college life as a precious memory.

It is not easy to judge which choice is better. Different students have their own opinion in terms of their financial status, exam records, interests etc. Furthermore, due to the large amount of population, students are persuaded to take different method to reach their goals. Educational background and wealthy level are not key factors to judge a person’s success.

In summary, both statements are reasonable. High school students should be encouraged to make their own decisions. Comprehensive factors should be considered and a great number of elements affect the final results.

多多指点！

tgyaqvj2b · 发表于 2011-12-1 21:40:07

首先抱歉，最近每天都在跟我老公商量结婚的细节，到晚上九点已经困得脑袋不灵，随便点评两句吧。
感觉还是跑题了。题目里至少隐含了如下含义：1、education,work，这两个选择的利与弊。2、最后要给出自己的观点。疲倦不堪的小胖认为，全文从层次——意思的层次而非段落层次——上划分的话，就要针对work说education，针对education说work，这样做到不离题。到最后给出自己的观点呢，是因为你讨论过，而且两大方向都是很明显的利弊各占——这样还是能回到题目，证明题目合理性。所以就算half and half，也是需要给双方面一定支撑。但你前面的内容无关结论，结论的出现突兀生硬。
雅思的作文题其实都很有逻辑性，围绕题目写文章的话不难，中国考生还真是想得不对路子。

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vexcvbdt · 发表于 2011-12-2 00:46:18

怎么说，要严谨严谨再严谨。你花钱来给自己机会，不是为了让考官看模板，而是逼迫他们给你一个值得你付出的金钱的成绩，对自己要求要够高够明确，也要够自信。他们关心的是你对英语有没有感情，不是看你怎么应付考试。这不是励志，是身经百战的小胖同学的考试心得。

赵力超 · 发表于 2011-12-2 06:44:58

题目的中心词在于education ,job,society,自己慢慢体会。你只要体会到这一层，再写起来就爽气得多，自信得多了。

woedbot · 发表于 2011-12-2 14:11:36

小胖简直是个宝，说话又风趣又在点上，每天上FREE 一大乐趣就是看你回帖了。
你考G 类吗？我觉得G类和A类作文有很大区别。 G类很宽泛，像我这次考的
more and more people live alone now, do you thinkg it is negative or positve development? 我觉得宽得不行，像一块饼，不知从何下嘴，小胖有啥思路

observavohose · 发表于 2011-12-2 17:02:19

谢谢过奖，看得我都脸红了。我还没考雅思，就在这大言不惭批评考友，大家不拍我就很知足了。我考Ｇ类的，口语是最大的难题，一听那个ｌｉｓｔｅｎ　ｔｏ　ｔｈｉｓ，１分钟就犯困。。。
这题目是很宽，有点不知从何扯起的感觉。。。如果我来看，从ｄｅｖｅｌｏｐｍｅｎｔ下手，它暗示了考生要写一篇洋溢现代社会味道的时评短文。可以写一种历史的感觉出来，证明你了解这个发展如何进展，科技进步啊，生活节奏加快啊，这些。至于看好看衰，就从前景往回推导吧，考官不限制，不需要太纠结。
我写命题作文时，习惯从题目里找“门”和结论，找到这两样，之间的通路自然就有了。。。。

eprfn795245 · 发表于 2011-12-3 04:55:19

我觉得就从雅思作文的要求来看，LZ的这个文章立意和结构应该是够了，不会因为论证偏差扣分吧~

rjunmsnw · 发表于 2011-12-3 06:41:26

作为一个常年活跃在文学领域的人士,小胖可以负责的告诉大家,cambridge的专家在命题方面是负责和严谨的。一个负责的语言学家会给出一个逻辑清晰没有矛盾的题目，所以审题这件事可以决定生死。我说的“门”，决定行文的思路、角度、风格的东西，在每个剑桥作文题里都有，所以请一定要多多练习审题。最后的终极目标是让内容和题目浑然天成不可分割，让考官服气了。
你们可以不信小胖，但要相信cambridge的金字招牌。
今天不聊了，看2011维多利亚秀去了。。。不困了。。。要减肥。。。。

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wzqf5844 · 发表于 2011-12-3 16:26:59

可以让考官不给他高分，名正言顺的，这个考生根本不懂题目。。。我们做杂志时，每个选题都有很深的解释阐述，读者不知道而已。。。。。

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81gyhuvdt3 · 发表于 2011-12-3 17:33:49

Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so medical service should be run by the government instead of profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages?
小胖来看看这题，很诡异，背景里介绍了政府来运营medical service ，但是问题里只提到 private health care ，你说文章里要不要分析政府运营的好处呢~

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