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发表于 2011-12-24 03:13:56 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式 来自: INNA

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Modern lifestyle means that many parents have little time for their children. Many children do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree.



Nowadays, with the development of economic, the lifestyle of modern society has changed a lot, some people maintain that we put less efforts and attention on children that before. However, personally, I have doubt about this opinion.



Parents are actually paying more attention on their children for they squeeze more time to company with their teenagers on both education and entertainment. Specifically, nowadays, increasingly numerous parents begin to more money and time into the interests of their kids, such as piano and painting in earlier age of them. And after school, they will also assist their children if difficulties are met. Besides, many fathers and mothers realize that they need to play a key role on helping their youngsters relieve the pressure from school, taking them to appreciate films and companying with them for the whole weekend are good cases in point. All of these activities are taking a higher proportion of the time owned by parents than ever before.



On the other hand, there is no denying that some parents are not motivated enough to spend more time on their children due to some reason. They tend to be lazy after one day work and some of them have to work overtime improving their performance. In addition, there are family members who are more willing to put efforts on their job career to earn more money. However, they are still small groups of people among public. Many families choose to have no kid when they are still in the early stage of the job career in order to avoid possible tensions between juveniles’ care and high pressure from work. Actually, modern families are very wise on how to keep balance between them.



In conclusion, I would like to advocate that it is not because of modern lifestyle that parents begin to neglect their children. On the country, they find they need to give higher priority to nurture children in order to make them be able to keep pace with modern society. As for the causes of phenomenon of neglecting children can be more sophisticated than we imagine.



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发表于 2011-12-24 07:37:04 | 只看该作者 来自: INNA


lz同志,你要是想让高手给你批作文应该写仔细点,你这里面的拼写错误实在是很多啊,最后一段 On the country-> contrary,第一段 economic是形容词,你是不是想用economy? 我觉得你里面很多词用得都有问题,当然我的水平也不高,不敢确定是不是准确。
我马上也要考试了,一起努力吧!


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